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  1. Hello, I've added some little corrections highlighted on red. Humans are social beings who cannot live alone and family members are the one who supports people no matter what happens with anyone’s life. Personally, I believe that living with families for a long time has unmatched advantages which can give a head start to achieve ultimate success in life. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.First of all, family members can give you emotional and mental support which you wouldn't find from anyone in your life. Human life is fraught with dangers and everyone has their ups and downs in life. My own experience is a compelling example of this. WhenI broke up with my girlfriend in my early twenties, I quickly fell into depression. I used to cry a lot, always thinking about suicide and gloomy thoughts. In sum, my emotional and mental state was self-destructing and detrimental for achieving any kinds of success in life. But nothing bad happened and I overcame fear and depression because my family was always there for me. They gave me emotional and mental support which I was in badly need of.Secondly, Living with family has a sweet perk of gaining financial support when needed. Especially, when people are in their young adult's phase, taking big projects in hand or investing money in businesses is not uncommon. However, I business taking a loss for some time is not abnormal -> I can't understand what you're trying to say, in fact, it happens all the time. In this case, People who live with their family can borrow some money from parents or other family members to keep their business going. For example, my big brother invested a fair sum of money in stock exchange in his twenties. Unfortunately, he had made some bad calls and lost a big chunk of that money. he immediately moved in to live with my parents to lessen some of his living costs and, also borrow some money from my dad to make up for the loss. In conclusion, I strongly believe that living with families for a longer time garner many unparalleled advantages compared to living alone. One reason for my argument is, It can decrease your living costs greatly and will grant you financial support. Another appealing reason is living with families actually prevent people from a breakdown of emotional distress as there is always family members with them to support.
  2. Hello, dear friends, Please give me your feedback about my independent essay. The topic is: Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular. Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. Entertainment, which is the art of making the time more interesting and painfulness, has been one of the most important activities in cultures. In early times, it was achieved in many different ways: the joker in big kingdoms, the Olympic games in Greek culture, and the celebrations and parties in Rome empire. Nowadays, entertainment has evolved into movies, submerging people’s life into different histories, roles, and dramas, contributing to forget people’s problems and sufferings. In my opinion, movies have become too popular due to the easiness of access and the wide range of topics covered. Firstly, Movies are in any single place of the world, from homes to nearly any place on earth. The easiness of watching movies is a result of today’s technologies achievements. Novel smart devices such as mobile phones, tablets, smart tv, and laptops, which are used broadly by a high percentage of the population, allow people to enjoy their preferred movies anywhere and almost at any time. Additionally, there are many movie’s categories, like romantic, drama, scare, kids, documentary, and others, that satisfy a huge number of people preferences. Moreover, the searching mechanism has been improved by new multimedia platforms like Netflix, Amazon Movies, Youtube, and so on, allowing the movie’s lovers to find out what they want. To summarize, movies have become very popular as a result of the easy access and the broad range of topics covered, giving satisfaction to a high percentage of the demand.
  3. Hello, I've made some changes, please help me with your valuable comments. In contrast to the reading passage, which supports the idea of contamination as the cause for the decreasing of sea otter’s population in northern Alaska, the lecturer emphasizes on the point that the predator’s attacks are the main reason for such event, thus, having a different point of view. The passage explains that sea otter mortality’s rising is led by contamination resulting from oil rigs operating in the zone, additionally, the pattern of mortality, which is characterized with a high otter’s decreasing in some areas and almost nothing in another one results from the marine currents which concentrate the contaminants in some regions and causes the death to the mammals that live there. On the other hand, the professor refutes this point by noting that the otter’s death in this way will cause dead bodies to get to the coast, which is not happening now. Professor states his hypothesis based on that the predators (like Orcas) are changing their diet mainly owing to the difficulty to get whales in the zone, the principal food for them. This difficulty has been contributed by the decreasing in whale’s population, as a consequence of the high levels of hunting executed by the human being. Thus, Orcas are killing otters and other little mammals in the absence of whales, additionally, the patterns of those behaviors are concentrated in zones where the orcas have access and are uneven in unreachable rocky areas. To summarize, according to the lecturer, otter’s population decreasing is led by Orca’s diet changes and is supported by these facts: no dead bodies at the coast, orca’s difficulty to get whales in the area and pattern of otter’s population which is higher in orca’s inaccessible areas. The professor’s ideas contrasts and in some ways refutes the reading passage hypothesis of deaths caused by contamination.
  4. Your essay seems to be correct.
  5. Hello dear friends, I'm impressed because of the collaborative environment in this forum, that makes me feel that the world isn't selfish at all and that sharing and helping is one of the most important values for the success of society. By the way, I would be really greatfull if you guys can take a look at my essay which is done in the preparing stage for my toefl exam. :playful: Here it is: In contrast to the reading passage, which supports the idea of contamination as the cause for the decreasing of sea otter’s population in the northern of Alaska, the lecturer emphasizes on the point that the predator’s attacks are the main reason for such event. The passage explains that sea otter mortality’s rising is led by contamination produced by oil rigs operating in the zone, additionally, the pattern of mortality, which is characterized by a highly otter’s decreasing in some areas and almost nothing in another ones is because of marine currents which concentrates the contaminants in some regions and causing the death to mammals that lives there. On the other hand, the professor refutes this point by noting that the otter’s death in this way will cause dead bodies to get to the coast, which is not happening now. Professor states his hypothesis based on that the predators (like Orcas) are changing their diet mainly because of the difficulty to get whales in the zone, the principal food for them. This difficulty is led by the decreasing in whale’s population produced by the high levels of hunting executed by the human being. Thus, Orcas are killing otters and other little mammals in the absence of whales additionally, the patterns of those behaviors are concentrated in zones where the orcas have access and are uneven in inaccessible rocky areas. To summarize, according to the lecturer, otter’s population decreasing is led by Orca’s diet changes and is supported by these facts: no dead bodies at the coast, orca’s difficulty to get whales in the area and pattern of otter’s population higher in orca’s inaccessible areas. The professor’s ideas contrast and in some ways refutes the reading passage hypothesis of contamination.
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