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    TWE 5.0 (reached 6.0)

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  1. Lukas

    TOEFL essay simulator

    No problem at all, as long as you keep it accessable for the public free of charge and keep me acknowledged (as you did). Thanks for doing that, it makes it easier than the download option. I haven't checked back here for months. I was just looking up some information for a friend today and saw your post. I think the link to the simulator introduction page you uploaded is a useful starting point, too (http://toeflng.forumarket.com/toefl/EssaySim/), as it describes how to use the simulator and some technical aspects. Cheers from downunder
  2. Lukas

    TOEFL essay simulator

    Thanks for all the feedback! It looks like I'm approaching the 200 downloads limit : )
  3. Lukas

    essay2

    4, if you're lucky 4.5 Your English seems to be good enough to achieve a 5 if you adapt your essay structure to what ETS likes to see. Browse around the forum a bit to find tips on essay structure. The links in my signature point to some posts on essay structure.
  4. 4.5 In my opinion, the only thing about the structure that could be improved is that at the end of the introduction, you should quickly list the points you are going to write about in the body of the essay. The English is really quite good. You could try using a larger variety of vocabulary (on the other hand you shouldn't use words you aren't comfortable with; it's a delicate balance). To make the essay easier to read, it would be a good idea to separate the paragraphs by one empty line (as I've done above). Good luck.
  5. A good attempt. I believe "Compare" topics are always a bit harder than the more frequent "Take a point of view" topics. Look up the proper structure for a compare essay. One of the links in my signature should lead you to some useful information. Did you mean "planning"? I would guess in the topic source it is spelled correctly. If you're not sure about the spelling of a word and it is mentioned in the topic, there is no reason to make a mistake. I would give this essay 3.5 - 4 The structure could definitely be improved. The conclusion is a bit weak. I don't believe you showed that people always benefit from planning. There are a lot of mistakes (especially spelling) that you could easily avoid. Keep practising. Good Luck! I just realised, for whatever reason my signature (and the links in it) is not showing. Tips on essay structure and strategy | More tips on essay structure and strategy | Essay simulator
  6. 6 for the structure 4.5 for the English. Most of your sentences are ok; some sound a bit funny though. I'm not sure if you should rather be writing in conditional all the time ("I could raise my children in a peaceful place which is our house and I could also save the money I would otherwise use...") You could also use some more linking words (TOEFL "experts" seem to like them), especially to start a new paragraph. Look up how to use "to worry" properly. Two more things that are easy to pay attention to: 1. Don't use short forms: don't do not, can't cannot, won't would not, etc. 2. Don't use colloquial terms: kids children (I think you only did it with that one word, but it's good to keep in mind anyway.) Over all this is quite a good essay. Good luck!
  7. Score: 4 The basic structure is not too bad. But In the introduction paragraph you should also shortly introduce all of your arguments that are going to follow. The body paragraphs have good arguments but seem somewhat short. Maybe try to stick with 3 body paragraphs instead of four and write a bit more in each. One thing you definitely have to avoid is colloqial style and abbreviations like: "..." (all of these can be replaced by a proper full stop), "which would u prefer y?" or "no. of students". Another thing to avoid (although probably less dramatic than the forms above) are short forms of negations ("don't", "doesn't", "won't", "can't" and so on). Write out the complete words instead. In this essay you are supposed to show your English proficiency, that means you should write proper English as perfectly as you possibly can! Follow the link in my signature to view a discussion about essay structure and strategies. You should be able to find a few useful things in there. Good luck!
  8. I don't think there is a maximum length. As long as you keep a good structure (you should find some good posts on structure in this forum) it shouldn't be a problem if you manage to write a lot. I would say the typical (good) TOEFL essay is 400-600 words long. It's always an advantage if you have some time left in the end, though. That way you can reread your essay and correct typos.
  9. Even though I believe ETS prefers American English, I do not think they will deduct any points for proper British English.
  10. Assay: An assay is a procedure where the concentration of a component part of a mixture is determined. (wikipedia) Essay: a short work that treats of a topic from an author's personal point of view, often taking into account subjective experiences and personal reflections upon them. (wikipedia)
  11. 6.0 Sounds like perfect English to me. Very good arguments and very neat style. I don't think you'll have anything to worry about.
  12. All in all a good essay. The introduction could be improved by shortly preparing the reader for the three body paragraphs. In my opinion, the body paragraphs could be better separated. In the first one you talk about the ozone layer. In the second paragraph you bring up the ozone layer again when you actually want to talk about global warming. The third paragraph includes pollution of land, pollution of water and deforestation. You start the conclusion with "In conclusion,..." and then continue with a question. I don't think you can do that. "In conclusion" has to be followed by an opinion or a fact. The examples and ideas you have are good! You will just have to try to organise them a bit better. Maybe try writing this essay again (not even using much different argumentation). Good luck
  13. 4-4.5 Good structure. Good use of linking words. (Don't overdo it, duplication and pleonasms will lead to a lower mark. Always be careful when it's about your opinion.) Some grammar problems (some easily avoidable... pay attention to singular and plural) Please use a spell checker (even though there are not that many spelling errors.) Good luck
  14. Please reread my comments on your earlier essay. Assume, the reader does not know what your essay topic is. You have to rephrase the essay question in the first sentence of your essay. Sorry, for being so short. I'll be back with more comments if I have time. Good luck
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