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  1. The statement: ""A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college" My Response: The statement of requiring students of a nation to study a national curriculum until they enter college is in response to an maxamize the level of education a society develops. The theory behind this takes on an assumption far too broad to have a successful implentation as each nation varies accross the globe in multiple facets such as environments, resources available to students region dependent, and teacher expertise. In this retort to a national curriculum, we will use Japan as an example, as Japan has a national curriculum already in place. Japan is a country that is about the size of California, which is only 1 state out of 51 in the USA, hence it will act as only a sample size of what a national curriculum would mean in a geographically larger country such as the USA for example. Japan, as small as it is, contains a variety of ecosystems and variances in regional economic productivity which calls for a diverse educational model which is able to meet the needs of regions and specific populations. However, the national curriculum, is arguably failing it's country side and agricultural economics as students flock from rural communities into already dense and highly competitive technological and material hubs such as Tokyo, Osaka, and Sapporo. This is leading to a society in constant competition in the same labor markets where only the best will succeed as others dwindle economically and psychologically.A national curriculum meets only basic needs of a population with a lackluster potential of mediocrity. The national curriculum of Japan requires students whom live thousands of miles, multiple islands, and economies so different fron one another, to study the same topics and same theories day in and day out. The most northern island is Hokkaido which has an economy dominated by agricultural production whereas the main land of Honshu consists of international hubs such as Tokyo, Kyoto, and Osaka. The students in the agricultura land of Hokkaido would benefit from a greater focus on agricultural sciences as they are more likely to have job opportunities in this field. Whereas the students in the international hubs would greatly benefit through honing in on international economics, business, and culture. The rural student is at a disadvantage if they complete their high school education with a lack of knowledge in the immediate job opportunities of their area. The national curriculum takes away the time a student has to take apprenticeship to learn a local trade thus when it comes time to make the decision to become a contributing member to their local economy post-graduation, their skills are not up to par. This then creates a gap between the local economy and the labor force. The student then feels the best option is to move to the nearest metropolitan area and take their chances of success competing against students born in the metropolitan area who have had access and consistent interactions with said economy, business, and culture. This is not to undermine the importance of a diverse educational model, however a region specific model is much better served to strengthen a student bodies chances of success. The rural student may actually have no interest or ability to become a farmer for various reasons, hence one would argue that a region specific educational model is only holding the student down from reaching success in the metropolitan economic system. This may hold true were the teaching approach left only to agricultural studies. However, it is the responsibility of the local teacher and board of education to recognize an approach and implentation of a curriculum which goes above and beyond the local economy through using the local economy. For example, agriculture is the most abundant learning tool available to said student and their peers, thus, it is agriculture which may be used as the foundation of how the students learn and apply their knowledge for immediate feedback. The next step is to take the apprenticeship level of these students and connect them to the technological advancements, the marketing, the reality and potentail for global interconnectivity, and further developments implementing STEM subjects and an interdisciplinary arts. A student who is a master of their local economy, ecosystem, and culture will be able to not only connect to what is beyond but they will be able to innovate what is currently available. The idea of a student mastering what inhabits their daily life has proven to work throughout Japan's history. For example agricultural practices, local crafts, blacksmiths and so on have seen successful throughout generations. So why is it now that these regional specific practices have given way to a national curriculum? The answer is not clear, the answer is muddled with confusion and an economy, culture, and way of life which now lacks diversity. The consequence of this is a population now flocking to large cities and a dwindling countryside population with too small of a labor force. Japan however has a very competent association of teachers who would surely be able to turn this problem around were they given the liberty to create a curriculum, based on an agreable set of standards for the sake of helping a younger generation of teachers learning to maximize the potential of their students. To require a national curricul undermines the brilliance of teachers to adapt to students, current events, local economies, and varience in regions. To potential of non-national curriculums far outweighs the mediocrity of national curriculums. Students who want to have immersive educational experiences will leave the public school system as even the United States experiences with just Statewide curriculums. To have a national curriculum is to funner students into a thinning funnel. The ideal regional and diverse model of education relying on students to be immersed in their surroundings and teachers to apply their expertise is the future of education and an educated society.
  2. Hi all, Could you please help me grade and provide some feedback for my first attempt of an issue essay? Thanks a lot ! The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. -------------------------- Education is an integral component of a student’s successful career. Though each individual learns differently, there is always a question being raised about the best way of teaching. Over the years, many consider the most effective way for an individual to learn is to applause every positive steps he takes while place minimum emphasis on the negative ones. Even though it is natural to think that way, I cannot 100% champion this idea – I consider some positive actions needs to encouraged, but all negative ones needs to be handled with care rather than plainly ignored. Students always wants to achieve for more successes, but there are cases that they are achieving them by utilizing the wrong practices – and those actions cannot be left alone. To be more specific, a student who wants to get a high mark on his assignments may choose to plagiarize the model or sample assignments. While plagiarizing is a serious fault, the student might just not realize it, or doing this on purpose just to beautify his results. Nevertheless, ignoring his plagiarism would be absurd and irresponsible. Now since ignoring the negative actions can allow the negativity to persist, leading to even more severe faults in the future. Just because those negative actions were never stopped, the student can easily treat bullying another student as “acceptable” since they never were instructed to realize the consequences. Instead, for an educator, these negative behaviors need to be terminated since inception to preclude further damages. The educator should patiently talk to the student who committed the fault, make him realize the consequences and work closely in helping him correct those negative actions. I do believe majority, but not all, positive actions and results deserve a round-of-applause. Some spurs on the students will also result in a better performance in the future. As far as praises provide students more confidence and motivation to keep up the good work, constant embellishment will prevent students from realizing the room of improvements. For instance, a student who was able to crown over the school wide math competition can have his moment of fame, and being praised by his classmates, parents and teachers. However, overly endorse him, such as calling him “the best mathematician in the country” can just do more harm than good. Depending on the level of competition, simply winning the competition in school cannot imply his superiority over other candidates if they are to participate in a nation-wide math competition. Instead, I consider some tough love the best way to response to this student. The educator needs to focus assisting the student to revisit the competition and mark down the student’s strengths and weaknesses for future reference. The student should also work diligently on improving those areas. By doing so, the most effective teaching is achieved. The student’s potential is indeed maximized. In short, even though praising is necessary for a student to build confidence, constantly praising is not the best way of teaching. Instead, a combination of praise and spur, even warnings, should be applied depends on specific situations. By praising the actions that truly deserves a praise, offer tough loves to the ones that has further potential to realize, while warning those severe negative actions, the educators have conducted their due diligence and utilized the full effect of teaching
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    hi , this is my first post can anyone review this argument essay The following opinion was provided in a letter to the editor of a national aeronautics magazine:“Manned space flight is costly and dangerous. Moreover, the recent success of a series of unmanned space probes and satellites has demonstrated that a great deal of useful information can be gathered without the costs and risks associated with sending men and women into space. Therefore, we should invest our resources in unmanned space flight." RESPONSE :- The magazine article claims that as manned spacecrafts are more costly and dangerous , future investments should be made on unmanned flights . The writer proposes a opinion taking into the dangers involved in manned flights . however the writer fails to propose a cogent argument to support the case . The article mentions that quote 'manned flights are costly and dangerous ' While this may be true , the writer does noit mention how costly , a clear data backing this assertion is needed . what is cost difference between the manned and unmanned flights ? Is it too much ?It is possible that it may of negligent amount . The article also discusses the safety of the manned space flights . However there is no specific details on the the plausible hazard of the flight . Has there been any recent incident where the safety of the astronaut was jeopardy ? Has there been any virtual simulations that prove manned flights are dangerous ? Thus the assertion of the writer is incomplete . further , the article mentions the recent success of the unmanned probes . But what was so successful about the unmanned probe . Was the data collected more accurate and precise than the manned space craft . or is it just a compromise between security and accuracy . Author maintains that a series of unmanned satellites have been successful . Considering this as true , there is no information on where and how many space probes were sent . Isn't it possible that all the space probes were sent to the same space destination for eg to the moon . While this might marka successful unmanned probe to the moon , nothing can be inferred about the success these unmanned probes might have on other planets and on their other ventures . . A unmaaed space probe which is allegedly so successful on the moon might prove to be futile when sent to mars What was the complexity of the missions . Was the mission as convoluted and conundrum as the human missions . was it easier than than ? No comparison has been made .. Without the clear distinctions and accolades of unmanned space crafts , the argument is based on incomplete reasoning and can be considered to be naive at best . On of the most important advantage of man over algorithm run machines is intelligence and ability to thinbk . A computer is more accurate than human but it cannot be considered wiser than humans . the ability to improvise is non existent in machines . If the idea of the writer of unmanned space probe is to be accepted , We\ need 'thinking' machines . Has ehe technology been implemented ? was it successful ? We need clear answers to these questions before reaching to any conclusion .
  4. I know I need to work a bit of work in this area and I'd appreciate any feedback (and a grade) for my practice argument essay. Thank you in advance! Here's the question.... Several charitable organizations in Pleasantville provide opportunities for teenagers to engage in community service. These organizations have a great need for volunteers, but in recent years, the number of teenage volunteers has significantly declined. The Pleasantville School Board should take measures to increase the number of volunteers. Teachers, parents, and other community members agree that it is important for young people to learn the value of community service. Requiring high school students to engage in community service would provide much-needed assistance to worthy local charities and would also help young people understand the importance of giving back to their community. For this reason, the Pleasantville School Board should institute a program requiring students of Pleasantville High School to complete 40 hours of community service prior to graduation. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted. And my response... There are many assumptions associated with this argument for mandatory high school community service. One leap in logic concerns the statement that teachers and parents agree on the importance of learning the value of community service. It is possible that there is research to support the statement and that parent and teacher really do know best for the youth involved (although neither of those things are mentioned here). However, completing required community service does not necessarily teach the volunteers anything about the value of what they are doing. Instead, it is entirely possible that the requirement would be viewed as another homework assignment or worse, a chore to be completed without much thought. If this is the case, students would not be learning anything about the importance of volunteering and giving back to the community. Additionally, a required task may be approached in a lackluster way. If students are forced to complete the task of community service hours and there is no work quality check (and no associated classroom discussion group or introspective aspect), not all the students will necessarily "give their 100%." If this is the case, the assumption that the high schoolers would provide much-needed assistance would not necessarily remain true; some of the high schoolers would be providing less-than-valuable assistance, and they might actually get in the way of passionate volunteers or take up space that could be filled by more helpful workers. If both the above assumptions prove unwarranted, it would seem that instituting a community service requirement could potentially lead to a bunch of disinterested teenagers taking up volunteer spots and learning nothing from the experience. If the assumptions were to prove warranted and the high schoolers and charities would actually benefit from this policy, an additional assumption to address involves the number of required community service hours. How was the number 40 chosen? It is assumed that 40 hours over a student's high school career is enough time to learn the value of community work and have an enriching experience. If the Pleasantville high school is a standard 4-year high school, this means only 10 hours of service are required per year. Training is required for some community service organizations, and consistent help is often harder to come by than the occasional volunteer day. Therefore, those ten tiny hours (less than one hour per month) may not be enough time to provide any real valuable assistance to the charities, and it certainly doesn't seem like enough time for students to gain any real understanding of giving back to the community through volunteer work.
  5. ISSUE : Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. The author asserts that the luxories actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.i agree partially to the given arguement.According to me luxories are meant for easing our lives.It is the person himself who is responisible for his her own deeds and later blame on the luxories which are provided to him. Luxories can be defined as anthying that eases human work and does the work in less time hence saving time. If we observe the influence of luxories in our lifes we may notice that they are an intricate part of our lives from an ironing press to televisions cars laptops air conditioners etc.We as humans have become so much dependent on them that we feel unsafe or uncomfortable in thier absence.Some of the people are so addicted to thier mobine phones that they start feeling insecure in thier absense. We should not let ourselves be slaves to these luxories. Man has invented these luxories. Luxories havent invented man. On the other hand , if we consider the automobiles, it makes going from one place to another a very facile task. The geographical boundries have shortened. The people living on the outskirts now can easily look up for jobs in the main city as they can easily up down without much difficulty using their vehicles.This helps them become them strong and confident individuals with financial stability. Hence it can be shown that these technologies can prove to be of immense importance in shaping up our lives. Admittedly , owning a automobile has become a status symbol. People flaunt them and get a sense of pride in it. The more bigger and costlier the automobile is the more bigger is the stature of the person owing it. In my opinion one must not let the luxories affect you they are just there to ease your work we shouldnt completely rely on them. An apt example would be how we become so dependent on the autombiles that we cant go without them even to the nearby grocery shop. In conclusion, luxories are just meant for easing our lives. It is the person himself who is responsible for his her own deeds and later blame on the luxories which are provided to him. If we dont let luxories rule us they can be of immense importance in shaping up a traits of the individuals personality else we ll become slaves to these luxories hindering our independence.
  6. Please help grade my essay below. I basically have no idea whether what I wrote makes sense in the English-speaking grader's eyes. Help ~any comments are welcomed :D ARGUMENT 1 (New Indexing) Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument. WORDS: 633 TIME: 00:57:00 DATE: 08/25/2011 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- In this argument, the author comes to the conclusion that the “Palean” baskets were not uniquely Palean. To justify the claim, the author points out that a recent discovery of a “Palean” basket in Lithos is not made by Paleans due to the deep and broad Brim River which the author believes isolates Village Lithos from Paleans. To support his intermediate claim of the Brim River blockade, the author assumes that the only way for the Paleans to cross the Brim River is by boats, the transportation equipment that have never been found. Close scrutiny of this argument, however, reveals that it is unconvincing in several aspects. First and formost, the mere fact that no Pelean boats have been found amounts to scant evidence that the Paleans do not have boat fabrication ability. It is quite possible that the Paleans were indeed cabable of making boats, but their boat remains are not found yet, or perhaps the boat remains have all decayed that it would be impossible to find any traces of Paleans boats nowadays. Moreover, even if the Paleans themselves were unable to make boats, it does not prove that the Paleans could not obtain some boats from other group of people, either by trading or renting. Since the author does not provide clear evidence to prove the inability of Palean’s boat making at their time and the impossibility of Palean’s alternative way of boat acquisition, the author can not safely claim that the Palean’s could not cross the Brim River by boats. Secondly, even if the Paleans were not able to make or obtain boats during their time, the author unfairly assumes that the Paleans can arrive at Village Lithos only by boats. After all, there are many ways for the Paleans to cross a river, no matter how deep or broad it is. For example, the ancient Paleans could simply utilize some large wood pieces to cross the Brim River. Or they might cross the river during the winter when the water was low or even disappeared at certain locations along the Brim River. Without ruling out all these and other possible methods of crossing Brim River, the author can not convince me that the Paleans have to cross the Brim river by boats. Finally, the author’s hidden assumption that if the “Palean” basket lies somewhere it must be brought there by the Paleans otherwise it is not made by the Paleans is not supported by any evidence. Perhaps it’s the Lithos people that brought the “Palean” baskets made by the Paleans to their village. Even if the Paleans were incapable of making their own boats and they are unable to cross the Brim river, it does not indicate that the Lithos people could not. The Lithos people might well have adequate boats for them to trade with the Paleans on the other side of the Brim River, and they might well exchange their products with the Paleans for the “Palean” baskets and brought them back to Lithos, which were discovered by archaeologists recently. The author’s failure of ruling out the non-Palean basket-delivering scenario renders his conclusion based upon it highly suspect. In sum, the conclusion reached in this argument is invalid and misleading. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer would have to substantiate that the Paleans were indeed unable to make boats nor could they obtain boats from other groups and that using boats is the only way for the Paleans to cross the Brim River. Moreover, I would suspend my judgement about the credibility of this argument until the author can provide further information about whether it is the Lithos people who brought the “Palean” basket to their village, even though the “Palean” basket was still made the by Paleans uniquely.
  7. This is my first argument, written without time limitation. Please comment on the defects and problems and any thing that I should improve on my essay. Thanks a lot for you guys help! TOPIC: ARGUMENT 1 Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age. Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted. WORDS: 827 TIME: 01:24:00 DATE: 08-24-2011 ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- In this argument the author comes to the conclusion that the next opening of Nature's Way in Plainsville should be very successful. To justify the claim, the author points out that Nature's Way's profit success are most significant in areas where residents lead healthy lives and that Plainsville is such an area due to its local health club popularity. The author also cites Plainsville's fitness-for-life program at schools, which represents a new generation of potential customers. Close scrutiny of this argument, however, reveals that the argument is unconvincing as it relies on several suspicious assumptions. First and foremost, the author unfairly assumes that Nature's Way's profit success is the result of the healthy lives lead by an area's residents rather than some other phenomenon. The arguer ignores a host of other possible reasons for the success of Nature's Way. Perhaps the residents in those areas are financially capable of purchasing more expensive and healthful food and products; or perhaps there are fewer competition stores similar as Nature's Way in those areas. Without ruling out all other possible explanations for the business success of Nature's Way, the author can not convince me that by opening a franchise in another town where people lead healthy lives would guarantee the success of Nature's Way. Secondly, the author's poor assumption that good sales report of running shoes and exercise clothing at Plainsville is the indication of the Plainsville resident's healthy lives is unsupported. The author fails to consider other possible reasons for the good sales of sport apparels. Perhaps they purchase those types of clothes simply because of the refreshing and cool style which they believe would make them look younger and more energetic; or perhaps they order those clothes because of the apparel's comfort material and reasonable price. Similarly, the popularity of Plainsville's local health club might be explained by other reasons as well. It is possible that people go there for fun and friends making rather than health building. And the reason why those weight training and aerobics courses are always full might be the lack of enough training teachers or enough health clubs in Plainsville. Moreover, the author does not provide any information about the geographical background of the customers for the good sale and the health club participants for the club popularity: whether the majority of the customers and participants come from Plainsville or from other places. In addition, even if the residents are fond of exercising, it does not guarantee that they are actually healthy; they might take those weighting classes just becuase they have health problems. Since the author does to account for alternative explanations for the good sale report and health club popularity and fails to provide the geographical background and exact health status of the buyers and health club class-takers, the author can not assume Plainsville's residents lead healthy lives. Finally, the author's assumption on the link between potential customers and the market success of Nature's Way is totally groundless. It is true that the schoolchildren are required to participate the fitness-for-life program, but how much percent of them are going to implement it? Even if these schoolchildren do have exercise at their early age, it does not necessarily imply that they would keep doing this after they grow up, nor does it imply that the same group of schoolchildren would necessarily stay in Plainsville after they graduate. Moreover, the gap between the opening of the next store of Nature's Way in Plainsville and the maturity of the potential customers would very likely leads to the economical failure of Nature's Way's business in Plainsville as there might not be enough customers for Nature's Way before those schoolchildren grow up. Since a store's financial success is a function of both profit and expense, it is also entirely possible that Nature's Way store's cost of obtaining high-quality, health food and other products, or of promoting the new store in PLainsville, might render it unprofitable despite its popularity. Without more information about supply, demand, production costs and revenue, and whether there are enough current customers before the potential customers become available, the author's expectance of potential customers' contribution to Nature's Way store's immediate success by its next opening in Plainsville is highly doubtable. In sum, the conclusion reached in this argument is invalid and misleading. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer would have to substantiate that an area's residents' health lives is the only reason for Nature's Way store's financial success, that Plainsville indeed has the majority of its residents leading healthy lives and that Nature's Way store does have enough customers before the potential customers become available. Moreover, I would suspend my judgement about the credibility of this argument until the author can provide further information about why Nature's Way stores have their most success in areas with healthy residents, whether Plainsville is indeed such a place and whether the Nature's Way can deal with issue of the gap before potential customers become available.
  8. People who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for the public good A person who pursues their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons is more likely to benefit the world because he commits himself for what he is interested in.Commitment leads to hardwork and perseverance through which many a dividends can be obtained that benefit the world. Many personalities,who are coeval or non-contemporary can be cited as an example who benefited world through the perserverence of their personal interests.For instance,take the example of Galileo,what made him discover that Sun is the centre of the universe and not earth?The world of that ethos, was so nonchalant and contemptious about such science knowledge.But that didn’t dissuade Galileo from pursuing his experiments and infer the truth about the solar system.It’s the personal and intellectual interests of Galileo that impelled him to pursue such experiments.Another example,Bill gates though he was a student of chemistry it’s his interest in computers that made him to come up with well renowned software windows for PC’s.Had he not had interest in computers he would have been ended up researching in a chemistry lab.Thousands of examples like these can be cited that bolster the statement that personal interests do more likely benefit the world compared to people who act according to public interests. Having quoted that,it’s not always the case that the world is benefited through the perseverance of one’s own interests.Take for instance,the incident of 911.Due to the orthodox and misanthropist interests of a contingency group many innocent people lost their life which had tremendous traumatic effect on the minds of people and relations of the world. It can be inferred from such incidents that sometimes if it’s not in the benefit of the rest of the world,it’s good to not pursue one’s own interests.Here we can feel the importance of giving up one’s own interests for the welfare of the world. There are such personalities in history of world,who abdicated their own personal interests and contributed for the benefit of the world.Gandhiji is one such personality,who renounced his barrister career and all comforts of life in order to fight for the freedom of India from Colonial rule.Mother Teresa is another such philanthropist who gave up everything and committed her whole life to serve the needy and oppressed.But,it requires a lot of commitment , endurance and compassion towards mankind to let go of one’s own personal interests for the welfare of the world.The proportion of such kind of personalities in today’s world is very scarp. Therefore,it can be summarized through the events of the history of the world that persuing of personal interests might not always contribute to the benefit of the rest of the world as is in the case who act for the public good.In any case,personal or public actions should confluence with the welfare of the world.
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