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I am preparing for IELTS, and since all centers are closed due to COVID-19 I can not get my writings assessed (I do not find online teaching comfortable). I have written this essay and I wonder if someone here who has experience in IELTS can assess it for me: QUESTION: Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? MY ANSWER: Celebrities are being widely well-known all around the globe. They gain their reputation essentially from being prosperous and chic. This essay will discuss whether they deserve their publicity or not, in addition, it will debate the influence of celebrities on young people. ------------------------------------------------- It is no arguing that lights are being shed on celebrities such as actors and singers more than any other group of people, even scientists, and writers, although they do have a great impact on our lives. So, celebrities may have a greater role in forming young people personalities. Hence, young people may grow up believing that it no problem to judge a book by its cover. Since they always see famous people being treated well due to the cars, jewelry, and the money they own, regardless of their ethics and moral values. Despite some celebrities are good and do purposeful work, others do not have a message to work for, which makes it hard for families to persuade their children that living without a target is a bad thing. ----------------------------------------------------- Looking at our society nowadays leads us to an obvious result, in youth society, the former is working hard in science-related fields but have a fear of not achieving what the celebrities have, the latter is taking famous people as their models without realizing how they affected our society. Not only do young people take them as examples, but also, they simulate what is being shown in movies no matter how bad it is. For example, if an adolescent watched their best actor in a scene that contains violence, he or she will imitate it unthinking of it. Because they believe that their model is good and do not do bad activities. ------------------------------------------------------- To sum up, this essay outlined the position of celebrities in our community today and showed up what they represent in young people lives. In my opinion, there should be rules and principles to organize the work and the appearance of celebrities. This would help us create a conscious generation that can contribute to helping our world to progress. (343 words) Thanks!!

Dear Friends, Hope you will accept me as a new member in this forum. I have recently/just joined this forum to learn from the experienced members. I am Rajat Sharma from New Delhi, India and am preparing for IELTS Academic Test. I need to score minimum 8 in my writings for my education cum migration purpose. Therefore, I kindly request you to help me by providing feedback to my essay below. The essay is written by myself by creating exam conditions (On Paper) within the time limit of 40 minutes. Thanks! ********** You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Sending criminals to the prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training more are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience. From the time immemorial, it has been a matter of debate how a criminal be punished. Of course, there are people who advocate one way or the other but in my view, we need to find a middle path to make sure that the punishment on the one hand, deters the potential criminal and on the other, it helps to reform the people involved in illegal activities. First of all, we need to differentiate between the crimes which shock our conscience and the minor ones. I strongly believe that punishment and in some cases, severe punishment is the only way out to deter the people committing crimes which are against life, liberty and humanity. What I mean by this is that we should adequately punish the wrongdoers when they are involved in heinous crimes such as gory killing, cold blooded murder, rape, arsons out of vengeance etc. In contrast to such views, I hold a slightly different opinion when the crimes are petty and born out of compulsion or some grave circumstances. That’s why I believe that the minor crimes like pick pocketing, thefts where the motive of commission of such crimes is to sustain one’s family should be treated differently. An opportunity to reform should be given to such person committing such minor offences. We cannot change our society by crowding our prison cells. Imparting education and providing quality jobs are prerequisites of reforming such people. Therefore, in my conclusion, I would like to summarise my viewpoint that education alone can help to move people away from the criminal world. The punitive measures should be adopted only in case of serious offences. (Total 273 words)

It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience. It is a common debate that families are not much connected now as they used to be some years ago. Many things have attributed to this change that we see in this modern era. Let us establish the reasons why this change has occurred and what can be done to develop the strong bonding between the families. To begin with, talking about the reasons which led to this issue. Mainly, its the technology and specifically the mobile phones and the computers. People are so much connected virtually now that they forget the presence of people around them especially at homes. Most of their free time is spent either watching television, surfing on the internet or chatting with their friends. In addition to that, because of the long working hours, parents are at work whole day. They get back home so tired that they prefer to sleep rather than giving time to their families. There are a number of solutions which can solve this problem. First of all, the major responsibility lies with the parents. They should educate their children about the importance of strong bonding with their family members because it is your family that stands with you through thick and thin. Secondly, they need to take time out of their busy work routines to spend time with their children. This will help in developing the bonding between the family members. To sum up all of the above, being distant from your family emotionally is bringing more negative outcomes instead of positive. We need to take appropriate measures to overcome this problem because family is a source of strength in our lives.

Q) Being a celebrity such as famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or problems? Ans) Celebrities are most popular icons in the world. Getting a celebrity status is not an easy job. The person who achieves highest level among all people by hard work known as celebrity. Undoubtedly, the famous people have gained lots of benefits that common man doesn’t gain. Although, some society individuals think that famousness brings lot of downsides to the people, I believe that it brings innumerable number if benefits such as money and social status. Celebrities are gaining lots of money in and around the work. They can earn lots of money with less amount of period compared to common people who are living in community. For example, Dhoni, A famous and popular Indian cricketer has gained 20000000 dollars money for an advertisement that he acted for a famous worldwide company. This was happened because of his fame in sports. This amount is not equivalent to a common school teacher whose pay is far less than him. It is clear that being a celebrity would have positive effect in their life and this is one of the two reasons that person can get as a celebrity. High level social status, the celebrities has acquired than a normal people. Celebrities are role models, they can motivate the people towards their success. For Instance, Amitabh Bachan, A famous well known person and popular Indian star has gained high status, by administrating a lot of shows and involved in many social activities. In conclusion, celebrities such as famous people have a lot of benefits such as economically sound and high level status. Therefore, I strongly believe that, being a famous personality people has got immense amount of advantages than a drawbacks. It is better said that if celebrity spends the money towards society growth.

TOPIC: The use of illegal drugs, such as heroin and cocaine, are becoming more and more common in many countries. What are some of the problems associated with drug abuse, and what are some of the possible solutions? ANSWER: In some nations, more and more people are using illegal addictions like heroin and cocain. The following paragraphs look at some of the risky problems caused by those drugs and recommend some attainable solutions to those issues. Using illegal drugs, especially heroin and cocaine, can result in many perilous social applications. Some of them are: health problem, high crime and poverty ratio, low proportion in generations of the workforce and many more. For instance, if mentioned medicines are used too much, the users will probadly be suffered from illness, cough, cancer or even death and so on. As a result, the rate in generational workforce can be decreased, this can make the country's economy in critical condition. Furthermore, people addicted to those addictions will soon have no money to pay for the costs of drugs. This leads to high poverty and crime rate as poor ones can become thieves or murderers. Thus, employing those medicines above can lead to unexpected subsequences to societies. However, there are many steps which can be taken to tackle those problems caused by illegal drugs. Firstly, the governments should ban the use as well as the production and business of those dangerous drugs. Secondly, people using them should be isolated from others or put in prisons. Moreover, medical treatments for consequent deseases should be made so that the users can certainly be in healthy condition. In conclusion, drug abuse is seriously a perilous issue as it has negative impacts on human. Hence, societies should do something possible to prevent and diminish this problem. Words: 258

Question: Public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree? Answer: Public libraries are the best source for knowledge enhancement.There is heated debate going on regarding whether public libraries should provide only books or in addition to that they can furnish expensive hi-tech media such as DVD and computer software .Personally I believe that it will be good to shape our knowledge better if public libraries provide high tech media. Question: Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. Answer: Every Children will have different abilities .some people argue that it is undesirable to distinct students according to their abilities .Personally I believe that it is healthier to differentiate students with respect to their abillity.