Search the Community

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Personally, I believe that young adults should live with their families even If they are able to live on their own. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, staying together with families saves cost of living, which allows young adults to utilise their money in a more sophisticated way. Nowadays, cost of living is high especially when we talk about buying a new house. By staying with parents, young adults do not have to buy a new house which further burden their financial problem. For instance, about ten years ago, when my elder brother got married, he chose to stay with my parents as he knew he would not be able to buy a new house as soon as after the wedding party since the wedding ceremony took a lot from his savings. This saves his cost of living because he did not have to pay for rentals or loans. After that, he put his savings in fixed deposit account and invested trustable financial products with stable returns. Eventually, he was able to earn fair amount of money for future through these investments. This would not be possible without staying together with families. Secondly, staying together with families maintains and strengthens lovely family relationship. Parents have more chance to get in touch with their children. If young adults choose to stay outside, it limits the amount of time for parents to meet their children face to face. This eventually weakens the family relationship and as time goes on, young adults tend to leave their parents alone. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About three years ago, I chose to live in a hostel in my university instead of staying with families. At first, I go back to my parent’s house once per week. After a few months, I did not really go back to the house, providing excuses like assignments and exams. I realised that our family relationship become not as lovely as before. We tend to behave like a stranger for quite a while. Fortunately, I decided to live with my families after I graduated and now, I get my lovely family back! In conclusion, I am of the opinion that young adults should live with their families for a longer time. This is because it saves cost of living and because it maintains good family relationship.

Hi! Could someone please give me some feedback on my essay? It's Official Guide's First Practice. Prompt: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. My response: As our society develops, more and more young adults are seeking independence from their parents, believing that moving out is the only way to do this. However, I oppose this view and believe that this action actually does more harm than good. To start with, many of these young adults are not prepared to live alone. They are not equipped with the skillset to do household chores, and when they live alone, doing them becomes a necessity. When they have to mop the floor or make their own meals without knowing how, they would usually utilize incorrect or less efficient methods, resulting in a longer time doing work around the house instead of studying. Hence, their grades may deteriorate significantly. Also, the young adults are often too immature to be put in charge of their own financial resources. They tend to spend their money too quickly without thinking twice. Moving out intensifies this situation as there will be no supervising parents or guardians. As a result, the young adults living alone are more prone to poor financial management. Also, moving out worsens the relationship between the young adults and their family members, which can de devastating to both parties. Once, I had to move away from my family on an exchange program at another city. And my parents and I rarely communicated during that period. Soon, we discovered that we began to feel quite distant about each other, and our intimate relationship did not restore until a few months after the end of the program. I believe that the situation can be worse for those living alone for a longer period of time. Imagine an 18-year-old teenager who needs emotional stability the most: What will happen if he or she lives alone for 1 or several years? The result would be disastrous, and moving away is just irrational. Another reason for not moving out is that contrary to popular belief, young adults can actually develop their independence when living with their parents. By making them do certain household chores like cleaning the tables and washing the dishes from time to time, they can learn to do these things without parental guidance; by ensuring a certain degree of financial freedom, the young adults can learn to manage their money without the risk of making poor financial decisions. It is apparently a better way to foster their independence than throwing teenagers into the cruel world without any guidance. It is due to these three reasons listed above that I argue that young adults should postpone their agendas of moving out to a later date at which they can manage themselves. Doing so briskly will only cause unnecessary hassles for both the young adults and their family members. Therefore, I believe that it is more reasonable for them to stay longer with their families - their safe harbors. Thank you very much!!!

Question: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples. I believe it is better for young adults to live with their parents for a longer time, instead of rushing out as soon possible. First, because I think moving out is not a decision that should be made on a whim, it should happen when you are ready, as long as that is agreed with your family. And second, as I feel that young adults often underestimate the importance of those last years living with their family and I believe they should be appreciated. It is common to see young adults who can’t wait to get out of their parents houses. They’re looking for freedom and independence, but a lot of the time they don’t have the faintest idea of how to survive by themselves. As long as the family has the means and the will to have the young adult living in for a longer period of time, I believe they should only leave “the nest” when they are ready, both financially and psychologically. It can be hard to deal with the pressures of living by oneself, jobs are only getting harder to find, pay is getting lower, and being on your own can take its toll on someone who’s just starting out your professional and adult life. It’s better to pace oneself than to end up needing the safety and stability of your parent’s home and being too ashamed to go back. Another important point to make is that those first few years of adulthood are very likely going to be the last you spend so close to your family. As siblings grow up and start moving out and maybe getting their own families, the tendency is to see less and less of each other. Parents will start getting older and after you move out you won’t be able to enjoy their company as much. As exciting as it seems to be by yourself, the company of family, that feel of home, is something most will miss a lot further down the road, which is why I think it should be enjoyed while it’s possible. Of course, I’m not in favor of staying home and living with your parents forever. I believe the time comes when that is clearly the healthiest option. However, I think the points made above are good reasons for taking some time, pondering things well, and enjoying being with your family before you go out to face life’s adventures on your own. 408 words 22 minutes I would really appreciate comments/rating as I have no ideia where I stand in terms of Writing scores. Thank you so much!

I would be highly obliged if you could read my essay and provide some valuable review for TOEFL. Qus: Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why? My Answer: Technology is always changing and has evolved from one form to another to make the human life much easier. When we talked about the Science and Technology, we sometimes criticized about its bad consequences in human lives too. Smartphone with the internet connection is one of the major advancement in recent technologies makes it the most discussing topic of this era. Some parents believe that it will create worse effects on young minds and should be unavailable to them until they are matured enough. Personally, I share the same space. The current trend in Smartphone industry is making the device with lure features that eventually attract the young minds. Definitely, students will less be concerned about their study, rather will focus more on video games, social networking, and others. As this is the most precious times for them to grow and learn, to stop them from wasting their valuable times, students should be barred from the Smartphone especially with the internet. Although, parents can still be connected with their child using the device without internet. When I was a child, there was lack of communication medium and had no or little internet connection, but still, parents were less worried as they could still be in touch with me via the telephone. So, parents can easily adopt with the pros and cons of the technology and should shape themselves for sake of their own child's. Moreover, recent studies have shown that the road accident is almost increased dramatically since after the mobile technology unveiled. Government is also trying to provoke the people not to use mobile while driving and traveling but still it doesn't make much of the awareness. As the young students are more reluctant on the side effects of mobile devices, it would become parents responsibility to make them understand the proper uses of mobile. I've seen many students nowadays using the cell phone with a headset on the road, and they are totally less concern about the surroundings traffic. Social networking is another important thing which makes a huge difference in the usages of the Smartphone. Rather than the physical connection, the student tends to believe or more comfortable on the virtual platform which eventually destroys their communication skill. For example, when students couldn't able to make process, they need to connect with their peers, friends, and professors to convey their problems. And, they are not feeling comfortable talking to them directly rather via the chat tool or could be some other virtual platform. Although, there are lot of tools or application readily available for parental control, however, still I could believe if you take the right decision about the Smartphone in early students age, then it will save them destroying the future careers.

Question: It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents jobs. Each person need to have job to continues his life either physical or psychological. Thus, every one must make decision for choosing job in some part of his life. Some people think that children should have same job as their parent While others people think conversely. The both groups have their reasons. It is wise that children select jobs that are different from parents job in the most cases. dissimilar jobs can help children, parents, and society. mainly, everyone has his own nature. In narrow condition, the nature of a child is not same with his parent. The features of one has directly relation with performance of job. Therefore the performance of a child in a job is not equal with the performance of his parent in same job. So if children want to have high performance, they must have dissimilar job. Moreover, parents usually want that their children have more success than their own self. Consequently they evaluate their child at all situation. Indeed one thing that all parent have high sensivity is their child's job. if their child has same a job, probably their mind is more busy with evaluating how their child do their job for two reasons. first reason is that they thing same job is equal success and not upper position. the second reason is that they completely now the job, so they can compare their self with their child easily. Last but not least, society need different job in different time. In during time, some jobs make useless and some job make useful. For example, horse keeper was a normal job and a lot of people work in this field; nowadays thinking for having this job is funny. therefore changing new job for child is reasonable. also some job are harmful for society. So it is wise that children select another job such as killer. To wrap it up, in the most position, difference job between parents and children is useful. Human nature, parent's expectation, and society condition make it necessity.

:question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. :idea: Learning process is a never ending process. As long as one lives, he/she always has to learn. In learning process, one needs mentors, tutors, teachers, or the like, who can give him/her guidance, examples, direction, instruction, etc. and can serve as role models. An interesting question then arises: who can teach the best? Many people find that their parents are their best teachers in their lifetime. I agree with them. Here are my reasons, based on my own experience. First, parents are the ones who love and care the most about their children, and thus, the former will always feel responsible for the latter’s future. Every parent intrinsically wants a better future for his/her children and accordingly, always makes the best effort to help them achieve success. Although teachers at schools are well educated and trained to love their pupils, teachers’ love will never be equal to parents’ love. Second, parents are the ones who are closest to their children. They both live in the same house and share the same ups and downs together. As the result, they interact with each other more intensively and more intimately than with any other people. Supposedly, parents know the best how their children behave and what their children want, need, or even feel. Subsequently, parents know the best how to treat and educate their children in various conditions or situations. They can decide wisely what their children should or shouldn’t do. In conclusion, parents are the best nurturers of their children. No one else can assume parents’ position because the bond between parents and their children is unique and stronger than any other interpersonal bonds.