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    Topic: Not everything that is learned is contained in books. Compare and contrastknowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?



    Everyone has their own preferred way to gain knowledge. I agree with statement that not everything learned is contained in books. I feel that way for two reasons which i will try to convince in the following paragraphs.
    First of all, we can find very personal advice from cyber source, such as blog, video log and beauty website, and from communication easily. Recently, it is been popular to share one's personal experience over social media which is practised and valued for that person. Also, you can see if things written in books are actually real from personal results. For instance, I saw many videos made for to check if some kind of home remedies and hacks are true. Some of those were total failures if I were to try for myself.
    Moreover, as an graduate striving to find very helpful but rare professional papers to gain knowledge, it is easy to find from internet. Depending on where one lives, studies or works, finding books from reliable source is hard. For example, I felt that way when I was in university and studied about rare earth elements, because that specialised field of study was not popular in my country. At that time all source I could search for scientific paper was internet, which was easy accessible. In addition, becoming cyber is environmentally friendly as we do not need to print on papers.
    For these reasons I presented, I believe the most important source to gain knowledge is internet which might also help environmental conservation.

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    Re: Toefl essay for evaluation

    Score 2.5 out of 5.
    In the introductory paragraph, the candidate did not clearly mention which source is more important to them.

    The reasoning was insufficient to support the candidates initial standing in the matter and the development of the topic was limited. Ideas were not connected adequately and overall organization is missing.

    With only 250 words, recommended length of 300 words not satisfied. The essay also shows accurate but limited range of lexical and structural range.

    Conclusive paragraph is not addressing the topic appropriately. The topic asks to pick knowledge from experience or from books, but the candidate’s preference was irrelevant to the topic.

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    Quote Originally Posted by otgoo View Post
    Topic: Not everything that is learned is contained in books. Compare and contrastknowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?



    Everyone has their own preferred way to gain knowledge. I agree with statement that not everything learned is contained in books. I feel that way for two reasons which i will try to convince in the following paragraphs.
    First of all, we can find very personal advice from cyber source, such as blog, video log and beauty website, and from communication easily. Recently, it is been popular to share one's personal experience over social media which is practised and valued for that person. Also, you can see if things written in books are actually real from personal results. For instance, I saw many videos made for to check if some kind of home remedies and hacks are true. Some of those were total failures if I were to try for myself.
    Moreover, as an graduate striving to find very helpful but rare professional papers to gain knowledge, it is easy to find from internet. Depending on where one lives, studies or works, finding books from reliable source is hard. For example, I felt that way when I was in university and studied about rare earth elements, because that specialised field of study was not popular in my country. At that time all source I could search for scientific paper was internet, which was easy accessible. In addition, becoming cyber is environmentally friendly as we do not need to print on papers.
    For these reasons I presented, I believe the most important source to gain knowledge is internet which might also help environmental conservation.

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    Re: Toefl essay for evaluation

    Overall poor response. TOEFL iBT raw Score: 2.5 out of 5.0
    The essay does not address the task accurately and has limited development. Connection of ideas/arguments are occasionally obscured, and there is also an inconsistency in sentence formation and word choice. Conclusive paragraph is too short, and does not address the question in the prompt. (question is to choose a proffered way of learning: learning through experience, v. learning though books; the internet WAS NOT an option).


    Quote Originally Posted by otgoo View Post
    Topic: Not everything that is learned is contained in books. Compare and contrastknowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?



    Everyone has their own preferred way to gain knowledge. I agree with statement that not everything learned is contained in books. I feel that way for two reasons which i will try to convince in the following paragraphs.
    First of all, we can find very personal advice from cyber source, such as blog, video log and beauty website, and from communication easily. Recently, it is been popular to share one's personal experience over social media which is practised and valued for that person. Also, you can see if things written in books are actually real from personal results. For instance, I saw many videos made for to check if some kind of home remedies and hacks are true. Some of those were total failures if I were to try for myself.
    Moreover, as an graduate striving to find very helpful but rare professional papers to gain knowledge, it is easy to find from internet. Depending on where one lives, studies or works, finding books from reliable source is hard. For example, I felt that way when I was in university and studied about rare earth elements, because that specialised field of study was not popular in my country. At that time all source I could search for scientific paper was internet, which was easy accessible. In addition, becoming cyber is environmentally friendly as we do not need to print on papers.
    For these reasons I presented, I believe the most important source to gain knowledge is internet which might also help environmental conservation.

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