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Universities should require students to take courses only within those fields they are interested in studying.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

 

 

Students who enter university are usually at a young age and possess high levels of curiosity in learning. Allowing such students to take the courses within the fields they are interested in studying is likely to encourage high levels of engagement in classes and assignments. This is because inherent motivation may be assumed within such students. As one is allowed to pursue his/her interest, the student is likely to take extraneous measures to perform in the courses. This allows a delightful atmosphere for teachers who would know students are learning to master concepts, rather than to merely pass a course.

 

Cultivating one's interest from a young age by studying only relevant courses is also highly beneficial in allowing development of talent in that field. This is because of the sharp focus that results from such efforts. For example, a student determined to excel in Computer Science, who is allowed to take all the relevant courses in university, will have a higher chance at becoming a great software engineer. This is because he/she would have been afforded the time to build upon layers conceptual knowledge as well as practice. Thus, allowing students to take courses within the fields of interest cultivates talent in those particular areas and is highly useful in pursuing a future career in the field.

 

However, if a student has been studying only a certain set of subjects, he/she would face difficulties interacting with people from other fields due to lack of understanding about their work. This is where taking courses only within those fields they are interested in studying is dangerous. As the world becomes more interconnected and requirements at the workplace dictate cross-functional collaboration, we need students who are well-rounded in their education. Hence, people who are educated in just their field of interest would not be successful in the modern environment where their specialized knowledge would be a handicap if they do not possess other relevant skills to interact with others. Besides being detrimental to their own career, the economy would also suffer as a result if entire generations of workers are unable to participate in it when shifts occur resulting in new times where current skill sets become obsolete.

 

Moreover, few people know what their true interest is at a young age, as these are likely to evolve over time. Students who are exposed to a variety of subjects are likely to discover new interests which their current world view may not have been able to afford. For these students, studying only courses within those fields they are interested in is a precarious venture because a few semesters later, their interest may change entirely. As a result, possessing basic knowledge which they can leverage upon to pursue their evolving interests would be a better state. University students likely already possess such basic knowledge such as reading, writing, performing mathematical calculations and understanding scientific and humanities concepts. For anyone found lacking in these areas, they should be required to complete pre-requisite courses so that they not only can pivot their interests in the future, but also learn advanced material in desired fields more easily.

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Dear Qual,

 

I think your essay sounds very good, you use precise language and you completely address the question asked.

 

Additionally, you might want to use one small paragraph each (2-3 sentences max.) for an introduction and a conclusion. In the introduction you would make an opening statement concerning the relevance of the topic discussed and then foreshadow your opinion on the topic (in this case it would be "ambiguous" right?). In the conclusion you should simply restate and summarize your points and thereby reaffirm your position. Do not introduce new thoughts here.

 

One sentence was "Allowing such students to take the courses within the fields they are interested in studying is likely to encourage high levels of engagement in classes and assignments." While an elaborate language is appreciated, it should at the same time be compact and concise. This sentence could be shortened to "Allowing such students to take the courses they are interested in is likely to encourage their engagement in class." and it would, in my opinion, still convey the same information.

 

I like your third paragraph very much. In the second paragraph you used a real world example of a computer scientist and using another real world example in the third paragraph would make it absolutely delicious (say, an economy major who has no knowledge of biology might fail in the world of business in 2043 when genetic engineering is the main global business).

 

Keep up the good work!

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Dear Qual,

 

I think your essay sounds very good, you use precise language and you completely address the question asked.

 

Additionally, you might want to use one small paragraph each (2-3 sentences max.) for an introduction and a conclusion. In the introduction you would make an opening statement concerning the relevance of the topic discussed and then foreshadow your opinion on the topic (in this case it would be "ambiguous" right?). In the conclusion you should simply restate and summarize your points and thereby reaffirm your position. Do not introduce new thoughts here.

 

One sentence was "Allowing such students to take the courses within the fields they are interested in studying is likely to encourage high levels of engagement in classes and assignments." While an elaborate language is appreciated, it should at the same time be compact and concise. This sentence could be shortened to "Allowing such students to take the courses they are interested in is likely to encourage their engagement in class." and it would, in my opinion, still convey the same information.

 

I like your third paragraph very much. In the second paragraph you used a real world example of a computer scientist and using another real world example in the third paragraph would make it absolutely delicious (say, an economy major who has no knowledge of biology might fail in the world of business in 2043 when genetic engineering is the main global business).

 

Keep up the good work!

 

 

Thanks Romanlwa, really appreciate your feedback.

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