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Dear Friends and GRE Experts,

 

I am preparing for GRE and this is my 6th attempt to write a GRE essay (different topics each time). This is an issue topic given on official GRE website. I would request you to have a look on the essay and grade it upon convenience and availability of time.

 

Thank You.

Sincerely,

NickyGRE.

 

 

Actual GRE Issue Prompt:

As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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In this issue, the author presents a very interesting present-world scenario in which the ease of technology engenders concern of lack of natural human capability of thinking and logical rasoning. Although there are few possible exceptions to the issue presented, I agree with the statement in general. The supportive examples are described in following paragraphs.

 

As an analogy, industrial revolution took place in around 1850. The work of human workers and human labour was delegated to machines. The majority of hand-woven cloths were gradually started being made by automated machines and as a result, the human skills and proficiency in woving clothes got deteriorated. Today, despite the fact that some clothes are still woven by hand, it is really hard to find a skillful worker in that profession. Same holds true for manufacturing pottery, writing books with calligraphy and so on and so forth.

 

Similarly, the 20th and 21st centuries witnessed some break-through technological innovations, starting right from the invention of first computer, the 'Eniac'. Today, the computers are used just not to solve complex mathematical and astronomical problems, but also to simulate human brain and its thinking process. In past two decades, the cutting edge developmment in the field of artifical intelligence and machine learning has proved that the days are not far away when computers, just like every other business they are employed into, would also think on behalf of their creators or mankind in general. Computers would employ logical reasoning and arrive to a conclusion for every given problem they would encounter. This of course, will have a detrimental effect on humans as humans would prefer more and more intellectual burden to be given to the computers and they (humans), instead of taking any iniciative to apply their own brains, would simply live a dull life.

 

However, there is one unavoidable compulsion that stays even after unbelievable technological innovations is that, there is always a demand for the creator himself. In other words, there is always someone required to develop these technologies, to innovate new and more complex arithmetic algorithms that can be dumped into computers and to remove possible errors in algorithms already fed into them. This would also give lucrative professional scope to possible computer engineers given that most of other humans will tend to avoid such intellectual burden. Hence, this field of developing new technology to make computers think more logically would indeed demand more intellectual contribution from humans and in that way, it would prevent the situation that entire humankind gets badly affected by lack of the ability to think.

 

In conclusion, except for such few exceptions, as people rely more and more on technological innovations to solve their daily problems and think on their behalf, the ability of humans will gradually deteriorate in general. We, as a responsible and aware individuals, must act consciously to indulge overselves into bare minimum intellectual tasks to avoid such scenario at individual level.

 

 

Above is response typed in actual test conditions: 487 words

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