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    Please comment on my essay, thanks a lot!

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    Question: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
    Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which
    of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples
    to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use
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    I believe it is better for young adults to live with their parents for a longer time, instead of rushing out as soon possible. First, because I think moving out is not a decision that should be made on a whim, it should happen when you are ready, as long as that is agreed with your family. And second, as I feel that young adults often underestimate the importance of those last years living with their family and I believe they should be appreciated.


    It is common to see young adults who canít wait to get out of their parents houses. Theyíre looking for freedom and independence, but a lot of the time they donít have the faintest idea of how to survive by themselves. As long as the family has the means and the will to have the young adult living in for a longer period of time, I believe they should only leave ďthe nestĒ when they are ready, both financially and psychologically. It can be hard to deal with the pressures of living by oneself, jobs are only getting harder to find, pay is getting lower, and being on your own can take its toll on someone whoís just starting out your professional and adult life. Itís better to pace oneself than to end up needing the safety and stability of your parentís home and being too ashamed to go back.

    Another important point to make is that those first few years of adulthood are very likely going to be the last you spend so close to your family. As siblings grow up and start moving out and maybe getting their own families, the tendency is to see less and less of each other. Parents will start getting older and after you move out you wonít be able to enjoy their company as much. As exciting as it seems to be by yourself, the company of family, that feel of home, is something most will miss a lot further down the road, which is why I think it should be enjoyed while itís possible.

    Of course, Iím not in favor of staying home and living with your parents forever. I believe the time comes when that is clearly the healthiest option. However, I think the points made above are good reasons for taking some time, pondering things well, and enjoying being with your family before you go out to face lifeís adventures on your own.

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