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    This is my appeal letter to UCSB

    Dear Committee Members,

    I am writing to appeal my admission decision Thank you for your careful decisions on the admissions. However, UCSB has always been on of my top choices for few reasons. UCSB has one of the most excellent biology and pre-med programs in undergraduate department and I believe by being able to attend to this school, I would be able to gain a significant knowledge and interest towards the major which I wish to major in.
    Throughout high school, I have always believed in taking on difficult challenges to be interesting. Aside from the positive reason, I spent my freshman year to junior year filled with advancement placement and honors courses due to selfish reasons such as appearing to be intelligent. This thought process clearly turned out to be ineffective and negatively affected me as a student. The pressure I received from courses which I was not capable of taking turned into unwillingness to work, thus leading to procrastination and lower grades.
    Realizing what my limits were, I decided to spend the senior year continually doing extracurricular activities while taking courses which I could manage. The courses remained just as hard with less amount of work, but aside from the academics, one of the awards which I received was for being the most active person in the volunteering club. Due to constant volunteering, I was unable to attend to more than half of the Science Olympiad meeting. But this has turned out to be one of my biggest accomplishments. After spending the time which I had left on preparing for Science Olympiad competition, I was able to win second place in the Science Olympiad team. I have also continued to be involved in the track and filed team at school. Some of the major accomplishments which I have made in the team this year were becoming part of the varsity team and becoming the team captain of my particular event. I have also been taking in part of the physics bowl team, which is planned to compete at a national rank.
    A minor mistake which I had made on the acclimation was the English course which I had failed during freshman year, which does not satisfy the a g requirement. I have been taking an online course from BYU in order to satisfy this requirement and will be testing to bring the failed grades higher to a passing grade.
    Although I have spent most of my high school years under my selfish reasons, my selfishness has further allowed me to realize what my limitations were act according to it. With all respect, I would like to ask you to reconsider my application once more.

    Any grammatical error as well as content suggestions are what I'm looking for. Thanks in advance to anybody who will be commenting.

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    Quote Originally Posted by gchoi363 View Post
    This is my appeal letter to UCSB

    Dear Committee Members,

    I am writing to appeal my admission decision Thank you for your careful decisions on the admissions. However, UCSB has always been on of my top choices for few reasons. UCSB has one of the most excellent biology and pre-med programs in undergraduate department and I believe by being able to attend to this school, I would be able to gain a significant knowledge and interest towards the major which I wish to major in.
    Throughout high school, I have always believed in taking on difficult challenges to be interesting. Aside from the positive reason, I spent my freshman year to junior year filled with advancement placement and honors courses due to selfish reasons such as appearing to be intelligent. This thought process clearly turned out to be ineffective and negatively affected me as a student. The pressure I received from courses which I was not capable of taking turned into unwillingness to work, thus leading to procrastination and lower grades.
    Realizing what my limits were, I decided to spend the senior year continually doing extracurricular activities while taking courses which I could manage. The courses remained just as hard with less amount of work, but aside from the academics, one of the awards which I received was for being the most active person in the volunteering club. Due to constant volunteering, I was unable to attend to more than half of the Science Olympiad meeting. But this has turned out to be one of my biggest accomplishments. After spending the time which I had left on preparing for Science Olympiad competition, I was able to win second place in the Science Olympiad team. I have also continued to be involved in the track and filed team at school. Some of the major accomplishments which I have made in the team this year were becoming part of the varsity team and becoming the team captain of my particular event. I have also been taking in part of the physics bowl team, which is planned to compete at a national rank.
    A minor mistake which I had made on the acclimation was the English course which I had failed during freshman year, which does not satisfy the a g requirement. I have been taking an online course from BYU in order to satisfy this requirement and will be testing to bring the failed grades higher to a passing grade.
    Although I have spent most of my high school years under my selfish reasons, my selfishness has further allowed me to realize what my limitations were act according to it. With all respect, I would like to ask you to reconsider my application once more.

    Any grammatical error as well as content suggestions are what I'm looking for. Thanks in advance to anybody who will be commenting.
    You need to come up with a good reason why you really need to go to UCSB rather than to whatever other schools you got into. It was a really, really difficult year (again), so chances are most likely going to be slim.

    This is a good start, but make it clear why UCSB is good for you. And if you can highlight some concrete, demonstrable reasons (for example, you live near UCSB and will return home on the weekends to help your family with their business), that should help.

    Just to clarify--you're a California resident? What schools did you get into?
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