Gounoce Posted February 14, 2009 Share Posted February 14, 2009 Thanks! Click Pictures To Zoom. http://img440.imageshack.us/img440/9520/1008644wa2.jpg http://img177.imageshack.us/img177/8498/33046773mp9.jpg http://img25.imageshack.us/img25/521/47655518jf6.jpg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Erin Posted February 15, 2009 Share Posted February 15, 2009 Are you Chinese? This essay looks like the essays of my Chinese students. Well, the essay has a lot of grammar mistakes, many that impede understanding, in fact. There are numerous word form and verb tense errors. I actually have a hard time following the essay, which is never a good sign. But I really like your ideas. I like the story (that I think) you're telling. It's a good one. Your essay has the elements to score perhaps a 4 out of 6. With the mistakes the way it is, it would probably get a 2 or 3 out of 6. I suggest that you rewrite this, trying to correct all of your mistakes. Don't worry about how long it takes, just do it. Trust me, it's really, really important. :grad: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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