jkiarash Posted January 27, 2011 Share Posted January 27, 2011 Topic: In many countries traditional food is changed to international fast food. This has negative effect on Families and societies as well. Do you agree or disagree provide reasons for your opinion. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- In recent years, the debate over whether or not fast foods have influenced our life badly has sparked a great deal of controversy among people and nutrition specialists. In spite of some beliefs that these modern foods are more advantageous for our life, many are of the opinion that we should change our new habits in this field. A very convincing argument in favor of restricting modern foods is that they have negative effects on people's health. It is widely believed that fast food might be the main cause of some new increasing disease like fatness, blood pressure, Heart problems and some kinds of cancers. In addition, scientists claim that the high amount of fat and calorie in these kinds of foods are not appropriate for our modern life. Similarly, it is often said that the variety of fast foods are limited and it can lead to some problems due to the lack of vitamins and other essential elements. What is more, it is generally argued that fast foods might lead to several health problems owing to the fact hat the process of production of them often is not healthy. Another common point supporting conserving the traditional foods is that they can illustrate the culture of each nation. It is commonly suggested that it is necessary for all people entire the world to look after their previous traditions. Also, most people believe that our previous generations' food might be one of our cultural heritages. Furthermore, sociologists are of the claim that our future generations will need to utilize their fathers' experiences in each field. Besides, it is often argued that we can analyze so many different nations' behaviors and culture by studying their traditional skills like the ways that they have had for making food. On the other hand, it could be acceptable for people to prefer fast food than traditional ones owing to the fact that it can have some economical advantages. It is usually said that traditional food in most countries need more time and more money too. Moreover, many people state that nowadays they can not spend more than half an hour in preparing food for themselves or their families due to their busy jobs. Likewise, it could be claimed that fast food are available everywhere such as work places, schools, universities, underground railways, and shopping centers and etc. In a nutshell. Considering what has been discussed, it would be quite fair to state that the overall negative effects of fast foods overcome its advantages. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ielts2u Posted January 28, 2011 Share Posted January 28, 2011 You should get an 8.0 for this. Your English is obviously excellent, so let me just list the errors and you will see the problem. The main problem is the conclusion:"the overall negative effects of fast foods overcome its advantages." is poorly expressed. There are grammar/vocabulary errors:"calorie ; entire ; previous ;are of the claim ;prefer fast food than ;economical ;need ;In a nutshell. ; ...and words that could be more formal: "fatness; some ; look after; so many;more time and more money too; and etc; ...and words/phrases that should be changed for clarity: "people ; new habits in this field; increasing disease;process of production of them;entire ;in each field; I hope this helps. Mike ielts2u an IELTS writing help website Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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