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People begin their life in the same way: cry, open their eyes, be fed by their mothers, but grow up in different ways: some become actors, some become writers, some are general and some are heroes. But what makes this difference? It is the way they live, the way they react with their environment. It is not only when they are forced into action. It is themselves. Still confused? Let's begin. A definition of "hero" has its scale: international, national or familial. Let begin with international. A good example of internaltional hero is Gagarin. Gagarin, the first person who came to the Moon, marked the new period of man: the period of universe. Did anyone force him to fly to the Moon? No one could if he didn't want. He fly to the Moon only because he wanted to do and he had tried hard to do. Let come with national hero. With vietnamese people, no one is greater than our Uncle Ho. He is not only our leader who devoted all his life to save vietnamese people from dependence, slavery and poverty, but also our uncle, who care much for vietnamese people, especially the children. In simple grey clothes and rubber sandals, he went everywhere to find a way to cure vietnamese. He learned everywhere and everywhen, did many works such as a cook, a sailor, or a writer to live and to rang about Vietnam to international community. He saved an apple for a little french girl. He asked even a solder about how he lived, about how is his work, about what he needed... He eated what the solders eated, drinked what the solders drinked. He lived simpler than a person. Vietnamese people love him and respect him forever. So sure about Gagarin and Ho Chi Minh. But how about an old blind woman who does needle work all day for her young daughter to pursue University? Needle work is more boring and tired than we can imagine: just sit and do the same thing, for all day, all month and all year, just because of her love for her daughter. She works hard, for her child's success. Who can say she is not an heroin? Remember, everything we try hard to het makes who we are. Heroes come from work everyday and everywhere. They do not need to be forced into action. They always try their best to live, to devote their lives for themselves, and for others. They know the worth of life, so they catch it. Want to mark yourself to life? Forcus into your work!

I strongly expect you check you essay in word before post it to this forum I think your view is poor. you only see prices they pay for their success. why don't you think about +what they do for us( fun, out of stress, make us fresh and effected in working) +what they do for our country(bring honor to our country ..) No one thinks about what we do.They attend how we do it and what it bring to.

I have just learned Toefl for only 2 months. So my commend may be not true. First, copy it to word to correct your grammar (eg: creat=>create; It’s is easy to see that human.. =>It is ..;conclution=>conclusion...) your essay is too short( 340 ) I think your examples supporting for your opinion are new, real and effect. (vietnamese is weak in real example) you essay is not bad, but it lack of something. I don not know exactly. Now you should wait for Mr Erin for a better comment. Do not shorten in writing. Eg: it's=>it is can't=>cannot

Why is "It’s is easy to see that human has benefited from outer space programs. Traveling in outer space is one of the most dangerous adventures. "? I think something is illogical in those sentences. In my opinion it should be: Traveling in outer space is one of the most dangerous adventures, but is the great honor.:p I like your conclusion the most:)

My extreme fear in the TOEFL test is TWE. Can anyone help me to check and rate my essay, especially the conclusion? Assignment: Some people think governments should spend as much as possible exploring outer space. Others disagree and think governments should spend this money for our basic needs on Earth. Which of these opinions do you agree with? Essay: Although food, water, health service, etc, are indispensable to people, I think exploring outer space is the most important characteristic to determine our Earth’s own existence. It is not my subjective opinion, but many convincing evidence have proved that. First, exploring outer space improves our knowledge of science and has gotten some worth achievement. Many useful products were invented: medicine, tiny food with great nutrition, artificial clean water from air, weather forecast equipment, etc. Those are all not minor problems. Without medicine, many patients may be killed by much serious disease. Tiny food with great nutrition can not only help people spare time and effort, but also supply energy for them to get more effect on working. Artificial clean water from air will decrease our dependence on natural clean water, which becomes more and more scarce on Earth. By weather forecasting, we can prepare a good schedule for some next days. Moreover, once we anticipate the coming hurricanes or earthquakes, we can evacuate our mob and our property in time. For example, if we had not foreseen Hurricanes Katrina and Rita, they would have been more horrible than disasters: not only millions dollar would have been swept away, but most of inhabitant in Louisiana would also have been killed. It would have been more terrible than now it is, which many people thought they could not bear their consequence. In addition, exploring outer space can solve the population problem. We cannot ignore the population boom. Now, more and more services care for our health, more and more people exist on here Earth. So that we need more places to live and work. But our Earth is not increasing its area. That gives us a difficult problem to solve. By exploring outer space, maybe one day, we will find a planet like our Earth, with air, water, sun, and creature. It is really not an unreality. No trying, no result. Before industrial epoch, no one could imagine the productivity now we can. If all of us had thought that it had been unnecessary to try to invent machines, just needed agriculture, all of us could have starved to death because of baby boom. Hence, although we have not found any live planet, we still must try hard to find them. Finally, exploring outer space can lead sciences in their correct way with the worth benefit. They can have an opportunity to discover their abilities in science research. Getting some results, they will love their life and forget to think about any bad idea. We must keep in mind that intelligence used for bad purpose is very dangerous. Therefore, exploring outer space is the best solution for this problem. Because if not, it will be waste of grey matter and may bring about some bad situation, for example, the terrorism. In conclusion, I affirm that exploring outer space is the worth choice of governments. But depending on the circumstance of each country, governments should decide how much percent they should spent on exploring outer space. It should be as much as possible, not the total money of the country.