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Hi, this is another essay I wrote last week. Any comments are welcome and please estimate my score. Thank you.[heartbeat] In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details. Teenage students in some countries are more interested in having jobs. I do extremely agree with this good idea because this makes teenagers realize the value of money, they have beneficial activities in their spare time and they have more mature vision. Having a part time job of teenagers is a good choice when their schools closed at the end of semester. I have seen that some of them work as a waiter/waitress in a fast food stand such as KFC or Mc Donald while others are merchants selling their handicrafts such as postcards, necklace, earrings, clothes etc. Those are some examples of legal jobs which are popular in teenage students now. I once have a job while I was a student, selling my second hand stuffs such as clothes and books. Advantages from having job make me understand how hard of getting money because I spent much time to persuade customer to buy my stuffs but it failed and I have experienced with different kinds of customers who are rude and not polite. Although I gained a little of money from my business, I was proud of this benefit. After that I realize the value of money and I always think of the most benefit before buying anything. Furthermore, I have more tolerance and a service mind when I participated in activities with a lot of people at schools. It seems that my vision is widely opened and grower as a result of real experience taught me to be responsible, to be on time and to know where the optimistic point of negotiation is. Additionally, working provides more advantages than go shopping or drug addicted in spare time. To conclude, it is a good idea and we should sponsor teenagers to have a job while they are still students as of all reasons I indicated above. However, it should not impact on the education of students including they should manage time properly.

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comment my essay please......[heartbeat] Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. There are 2 choices of traveling by vehicles. The first one is traveling by private transportation such as cars and motorcycles. The second one is traveling by public transportation such as buses, trains and subways. In my opinion, the governments should sponsor and spend more money on improving public transportation because it will decrease the problems of traffic jam, air pollution and economic failed. I am a Thai living in Bangkok, the capital city of Thailand. Bangkok is notorious for the traffic jam and the air pollution caused by the discharges from many cars on roads and highways. Consequently, money people pay for importable cars including oils is so high that brings the inside money went out to abroad. These problems increase continually because of the increment of personal cars, the low standard of controlling the smoke from exhaust pipes and the limited public transportation. If the public transportation was improved, citizen will turn to travel by buses, sky trains or subways higher. As we know, at the same distances, traveling by sky trains is faster than by cars so, traveling by sky trains is a better option. After the public transportation is more popular, the increment of private cars will be decreased resulting in the flowing traffic and cleaner atmosphere. Additionally, the money paid for importable cars and oils is reduced that will make better economic growth. Until now, Thai government has been spending money on improving more public transportation for example, the latest success one is sky train called “BTS”. I have found that it helped people comfortably travel in crowded areas. And in the next couple years, Thailand will have a subway which is under constructed now. In conclusion, governments should spend more money on improving public transportation because it will decrease the problems of traffic jam, air pollution and economic failed.

topic #10 “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” From this quotation, I do agree with this statement but not all especially luck that do not concern with the success. In my point of view, I believe that luck helps people succeed but a little. The significant factors for being a successful person are such as intelligence, diligence and honesty. No one can be successful if he doing nothing to develop himself or waiting for only fortune coming. It can be said that nearly all of people’s success result from their abilities. However, luck is a supporter of people success. It is reasonable to say that luck is quite similar to a chance thus, a good chance certainly helps people in their career. For instance, Coco Lee, a Chinese famous singer, comes to be a greatly popular singer because her producer accidentally heard her melodious song composed by herself from the department store’s speakers. Accordingly, she has an opportunity to join with a celebrated company. I believe that luck is a minute part of a person’s success. Therefore the way of being a successful person is mostly came from the abilities and behavior. Thanks :D

Could you pleas estimate score and comment my essay? This is my first essay in limited time and my English is not good so, I would like to improve. Any comments are welcome. Thank you in advance A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position. Building a large factory should be considerably regarded because it affects both advantages and disadvantages to many surrounding lives. In my point of view, I do extremely oppose building a large factory near my community as following reasons. In developing countries, where the economy widely grows, the coming of the foreign investors and capital makes those countries accept more advanced technology and new invention. Moreover, the emergence of a small and large factory tends to be continually higher. It helps greatly stimulate economy through the regions because a large number of unemployed is required for industry. In contrast, this progress is directly influence on the living things and environment. Discharges from factory cause air pollution and putrid river that result in the worse health of people and the wholly death of aquatic animals. Accordingly, the noise of mechanical instruments disturbs the people living around. Under those circumstances, if there is a large factory building near the community, the population there will undergo the problems of mental and physical health. In conclusion, it would be greatly regarded how affective before building a factory and I would against this action if it occurs near my community.