danny411

you have some general terms. Maybe define what population you are talking about ? What people ? in what situation? Maybe say in business people are overestimated or underestimated?

ye your on the right path. failure can be a learning experience ? Why ? I read a perfect score and they just had the thesis more fleshed out. Learning from mistakes is a sure route to success. then 2 examples. they used ab lincoln. to show personal experiences are learning experiences.Lincoln failed 7 times before winning the presidency. The author used google to show that you can learn from other peoples mistakes and then tailor your business approach. Then, he rapped it up with most people are afraid of making mistakes. But, successful people use mistakes as a to learn. pretty simple ? flesh out the thesis and ask yourself why are using the examples your providing ? to show what?

maybe just stick to the second paragraph to show how it effects them in school? ie. competitveness, selfishness? you still need to discuss the opposite opinion? jealousy is a negative emotion why? It causes people to do bad things. thesis: Jealous is one of the worst human qualities, it causes friends to fight. brainstorm: 3 examples othelo--iago is jealous of cassio's promotion so he plots to get even against his friends and trusted friends, it cause friends to fight each other, and even to kill. you could provide three examples or just talk about how it brought out the worst in you ie. made you mad, made you do evil things, how it made you feel? or just provide 3 examples to show how it brings out the worst in people? Othelo Iago is very jealous of cassio's promotion so he causes havoc. He tells Rodrigo that his wife is cheating with Cassio. This leads to a fight. And causes Cassios demotion. So you can show that jealousy causes people to do bad things. The, he steals Desdemonas handkerchief and plants it on Cassio. when othelo finds it he tells iago to kill Cassio--his best friend and loyal buddy--it shows it can lead to harm of other people Othelo kills desomona--even to kill-- conclusion, jealously screws up rationale thought. thats it 5 mins.

1) yes, they should since everyone can contribute--i was thinkng we should take more responsibility for the homeless. I always see them around. And everyone just walks by. I asked someone once and they said they don't know what to do with them. 2) yes, of course. first p is really good. If you like your work you will do it much better. also they will stick with it longer if they like it in the intro part just define fullfillment? Job sat, being good at your job etc. If your good at your job stuff happens? You like it better and you do it better so in the end you will make alot more money-- thats my approach to any question with a vague word--define it

why do you guys all right like that? you go no one like beings underrated then go but overrated is worse ? just say being underrated sucks. Many people underrate people based on first impressions. But most often they surprise them. conclusion first impressions are limiting. This is why when you make a decision its important to have multiple dimensions to make a proper evaluation. I don't know what your talking about but the topic s related to judgement We underrate a person based on first impression. does two minutes really tell you about the character and qualities that a person brings? Overrating is based on a glorified resume. This is why they often dont live up to expectations.

Good writing but maybe stick to an easy topic. your saying religion should be seperate from government intervention? or influence ? It might be hard since government policies and laws are influenced so much. Then what types of govs are influenced ? Some are more than other? .... That seems pretty difficult for such a short essay. As can be seen with your excellent essay. You have lots of ideas flowing. Simplify to meet the reqs? Liberty might be easier? I mean since the 911 and all the terrorist stuff there has been an increase in government intervention over citizens in democractic countries? Ie. airport screening, border, bars---everyone is searching you. So maybe you could argue that terrorist is responsible for limiting freedom in democratic countries? Then 3 examples random police searches, screening and more invasive searches of property...

Should i use a rebuttal? Seems like alot of people don't and still get good marks. Also, doesn't seem to be enough room for a full rebuttal paragraph. So how should i structure it? usually i write my intro like this prompt do u like sports I love competiting in sports. (rebuttal part of intro) Some people hate the win at no cost attitude of sports. They dont like it. I have had the opposite experience. Sports brings out my best qualities. I love to compete for the following 3 reasons.... Doesnt seem to flow naturally like this. If i use the other method most people use it flows better. Ever since i was a kid my competitive natural has been harnessed. I had three older brother so playing sports was a good outlet. The games we played were very serious. It didn't matter if it was marbles, kick the can or throwing hockey cards there was always an argument over some minute detail. lead right into what im going to talk about in the body....three examples shows how not sure how to use this program its difficult but it should say competitive nature