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Thank you sir I will keep that in my mind. I will rewrite some senteces with my own words for practice. Can you tell me is it good enoughfor 6 ?

Mike could you grade my essay ? Convenience foods will become increasigly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditioanal methods of food prepration. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. Some people think that the convenience foods will become prevalent more and more everyday and eventually they will replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. I am going to discuss that is unlikely to happen. After the Industrial revolation, time became the new instrument for measuring the productivty and it become more important in people's daily life. Becasue of lack of time, people have started to have less spare time than they used to, sleep less than they used to and spend less time for their eating habits than they used to. Today convenience foods are the great time savers for the people and because of this, convenience foods become more prevalent than they had never been before. People who are working and studying usually don't have enough time and energy to prepare a traditional breakfast or a dinner and convenience foods are very effective for them. The best example for how convenience foods change our eating habits is breakfast serials. In last 20 years the consumption of breakfast serial per person in a day in USA rose from 12 grams to 25 grams. That shows us people don't spent time for eating and preparing breakfasts like they used to. On the other hand, food is the biggest part of many cultures and leaving behind the old habits is not easy as it seems. Even the convenience foods are great time savers if a convenience food is not fit a country's cuisine it will probably have a limited effect on changing the eating habits. For example in Italy, some international companies have started to sell Korean noodles and ramens which artifically modified with italian tastes. Even though they are cheaper and more easy to prepare than the italian pasta, traditional italian pasta is still the market's leader. Another reason which stops the convenience foods replacing traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation is the health issues. As a well known fact, most of the convenience foods are unhealty and consuming that type of food for a long period can couse many disesaes like diabetesi obesity or cardiovasculer diseases. Overall because of the traditional eating and food preparation habits based on the culture in many countries and obvious health concerns, even though the convenience foods are very easy to prepare and artifically teasty, it is not seem to be possible to have a great impact on people's eating and food preparation habits. Thanks.

Convenience foods will become increasigly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditioanal methods of food prepration. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. Some people think that the convenience foods will become prevalent more and more everyday and eventually they will replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. I am going to discuss that is unlikely to happen. After the Industrial revolation, time became the new instrument for measuring the productivty and it become more important in people's daily life. Becasue of lack of time, people have started to have less spare time than they used to, sleep less than they used to and spend less time for their eating habits than they used to. Today convenience foods are the great time savers for the people and because of this, convenience foods become more prevalent than they had never been before. People who are working and studying usually don't have enough time and energy to prepare a traditional breakfast or a dinner and convenience foods are very effective for them. The best example for how convenience foods change our eating habits is breakfast serials. In last 20 years the consumption of breakfast serial per person in a day in USA rose from 12 grams to 25 grams. That shows us people don't spent time for eating and preparing breakfasts like they used to. On the other hand, food is the biggest part of many cultures and leaving behind the old habits is not easy as it seems. Even the convenience foods are great time savers if a convenience food is not fit a country's cuisine it will probably have a limited effect on changing the eating habits. For example in Italy, some international companies have started to sell Korean noodles and ramens which artifically modified with italian tastes. Even though they are cheaper and more easy to prepare than the italian pasta, traditional italian pasta is still the market's leader. Another reason which stops the convenience foods replacing traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation is the health issues. As a well known fact, most of the convenience foods are unhealty and consuming that type of food for a long period can cause many disesaes like diabetes, obesity or cardiovasculer diseases. Overall, because of the traditional eating and food preparation habits based on the culture in many countries and obvious health concerns, even though the convenience foods are very easy to prepare and artifically teasty, it is not seem to be possible to have a great impact on people's eating and food preparation habits.

Thanks Mike. Your advices are very helpful. I'll keep that in mind.

Hi folks,could anyone check and grade my essay. This is my first attempt. Thanks in advance In spite of the many advences women have made in education and employment, they continue to be at a discdvantage when it comes to pay and promotion. İn your view, what should be done to promote equality of opportunity for men and women in the workplace. During and after the World War II, lots of coutries need more labour force to keep their economy alive. So they started to employ women employees . This was the begining of an era. After 60’s and 70’s women popıulation in labour pool keep groving. At the same time women started to have more education for having better job positions and many countries support that act. Today in many countries, men and women have equal oppotunities in education and employment. On the other hand, when it comes to payment and promotion in bussiness life, women still being at a disadvantage. Statisticly in most of the workplace at many countries men get more payment and easy to get promotion then women. Today in the USA and European states are trying to eleminate this disadvantages. Most of the states have legislated some rules for punishing the gender discrimination in workplace and some countries like Turkey have commissions for establishing the men-women equailty and investigating the discrimination in govermental workplaces. Despite the improvements in last fifty years, there is still a very long way to go for establishing the men-women equailty in business life. If we want a permenent solution for this problem. Governments have to take serious actions. They have to make regulations to force and encourage the companies to be fair and responsible when promoting and paying the women employees. They also have to change their education systems and teach the idea that there is no differeces between men and women in the business life.