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  1. HI , I just took the IELTS and got 8 for writing , your writing deserves 6 , in order to enhance it you should use less common words and should not repeat your sentences. I hope you will find my comments useful, the words with red color should be omitted and instead read those in () .
  2. It is needless to say societies contain individuals without considering the role of people the word of society is meaningless. However, not all people are worth equally to communities. Some people argue that scientist have crucial role to play. Whereas, others strongly believe that artists are invaluable to their societies and without them communities would be dull and monotonous besides they have impacts on their fans. On the one hand, it is deemed that if a country lacks scientist, they are unlikely to make progress. The future of a country correlates the number of intelligent ones and scientist they own. A simple instance is comparing developed nations with developing ones. Developed countries such as Germany strive to absorb highly skilled people throughout the world because it is to the best interest of them. They state the more geniuses dwell in their countries, the more improvement they make. On the other hand, others firmly state that artist are worth more. They argue that artists are representatives of a community. For example, directors and movie makers can depict their culture to all over the world. Thus, it is neither sensible nor useful to neglect them. Take a well-liked actor for an instance. Clearly, they have substantial number of fans who consider that actor as their role model. These role models are imitated. Thereby, eventually their behavior will be accepted as a common behavior among people. They can easily set or change a norm in societies. They have such influential roles. To sum up, I stand for the latter opinion which means I do agree artists deserve more value. They should be supported and treated well by societies otherwise they would rebel against the community and the result can be a catastrophe owing to being popular. If they shun the mainstream their fans will ignore as well. Then we will end up living in a chaotic society. It is needless to say societies contain individuals without considering the role of people the word of society is meaningless. However, not all people are worth equally to communities. Some people argue that scientist have crucial role to play. Whereas, others strongly believe that artists are invaluable to their societies and without them communities would be dull and monotonous besides they have impacts on their fans. On the one hand, it is deemed that if a country lacks scientist, they are unlikely to make progress. The future of a country correlates the number of intelligent ones and scientist they own. A simple instance is comparing developed nations with developing ones. Developed countries such as Germany strive to absorb highly skilled people throughout the world because it is to the best interest of them. They state the more geniuses dwell in their countries, the more improvement they make. On the other hand, others firmly state that artist are worth more. They argue that artists are representatives of a community. For example, directors and movie makers can depict their culture to all over the world. Thus, it is neither sensible nor useful to neglect them. Take a well-liked actor for an instance. Clearly, they have substantial number of fans who consider that actor as their role model. These role models are imitated. Thereby, eventually their behavior will be accepted as a common behavior among people. They can easily set or change a norm in societies. They have such influential roles. To sum up, I stand for the latter opinion which means I do agree artists deserve more value. They should be supported and treated well by societies otherwise they would rebel against the community and the result can be a catastrophe owing to being popular. If they shun the mainstream their fans will ignore as well. Then we will end up living in a chaotic society.
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