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Please give me suggestions to improve my IELTS essay, i'm going to take the IELTS exam on March 15 2014. (Time: 25 mins)
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Topic": Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think that this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Some professions weave the very fabric of society but it is widely known that sports professionals earn more than them. Although others think that this is justifiable, some believe that it is unjust.
Teachers, doctors, nurses, scientists and some others play a significant role in the continuing functioning and development of our society. Despite this, they are poorly compensated. These professionals undergo rigorous training and long hours to achieve their current state. In order to qualify for these positions, there are certain criteria that must be met that are endowed only to few. Without them, society is helpless. It is undeniable that community cannot function without schools and hospitals. Access to healthcare and good education are both essential to the population.
On the other hand, entertainment has a significant part in the society as well. Sports is one of the most common form of entertainment for people of different walks of life. Being a sports professional is not easy. A great deal of talent and years of dedication to a chosen sport is needed to acquire the status quo like that of Michael Phelps or Manny Pacquiao. These athletes are able to generate a lot of income from sponsorship and money from the crowd that are willing to watch them play. They have a larger audience compared to that of a surgeon. They influence millions of people while doctors save one life at a time.
It is justifiable that sports professionals earn more since they affect the world in a larger scale.
