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Topic- Many lives could be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas were disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person may die as a result of inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author in his argument claims that, cow flu is widely spread in some areas. This fatal flu, can be treated by providing inoculatuons against cow flu to the people who are affected by it. But there is a small posibility that if the inoculations itself might result in killing a person. Hence the regular provision of inoculations should not be permitted. While the author is correct in saying that if the inoculations themselves are fatal, they should not be administered routinely; but since the flu itself is fatal and can lead to death of many more people when inoculations are not administered. Without further evidence, the claim is not justified. The evidence required are- 1:- Number of deaths due to inoculations vs number of deaths when inoculations are not administered, 2:- Till how many doses, is the inoculations not fatal, 3:- Is there any other mode of fighting the disease other than inoculation?
The first evidence is the most crucial evidence in this argument. It considers the number of deaths when inoculation is administered due to overuse of it and the number of death that take place when they are not administered. In other words, it is comparing the number of people saved by inoculation with the the number of people died due to over adminstration of it. Although the author is his claim explicits mentions that more people are dying when not adminstered, it is helpful to have a more confound statistic of the same. As the number of people dying without it is much more higher then those due to the vaccine, the authors claim is unjustified and hence should not be implemented.
The second evidence is regarding the number of doses till which the vaccine is not fatal. All the inoculations are not fatal from the beginning. If there is overuse of it, then it is fatal. Hence it is imperative to know the maximum doses till which it is not fatal. Also how regulalry should the inoculation should be administered should be found. A survey of doctors who are treating the disease and the researchers examinig the virus should be undertaken for this evidence. The third evidence is related to the future of treating the disease. If any new discovery is made which is not fatal and is as good in treating the disease as the current one, trails should begin at the earliest.
Thus without these evidence, the authors claim is unwarranted and should not be implemented. The people suffering from the disease should be treated with inoculation till any new discovery is made. The treatment should be such that it is not excessive, but is just enough to fend off the disease.