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Hi, Here is my response on the same topic. What are you people doing for brain storming on a particular topic. Give me some tips. Also please give your feedback on this topic. Thankyou. 57. "The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience." I believe that we can gain knowledge from both books and direct experiences, however, they both are distinct in terms of the depth of the knowledge we get from them. First of all, knowledge is important in everyone's life to survive in this world. Starting from making living to facing worst case scenarios. Life is very short, in that period of time, we can not experience everything to know everything. Having bookish knowledge can help us survive in worst case scenarios like escapong from a drowning car. It is good to know if not must how to survive than to experience the breath taking problem when it hits. Now a days we can get deep, extensive knowledge on anything on internet books. Also when taking the knowledge of world's history, scientific inventions, medical advancements, books are the best. Talking of history, we can not experience past history in way possible but to read it extensively. I also believe in getting deep knowledge from direct experiences. Take a simple example of classroom science experiment. We get more and long lasting knowledge by doing experiment than knowing results by studying about it. Also, a medical student gets more information by dissecting a body than by reading about the body. The knowledge gained from experiences can be much more righer and broder than that of books in some cases. For example going on a field trip to go to see a historic places, museums, factories etc., help a lot to gain deep knowledge about the things than reading about them in books. So, one can live better by knowing more about life either by both reading extensively and experiencing things whenever possible.

Hi Sidharthbalaravi, Thanks for your sincere criticism. I am really bad at writing when I don't know about the topic much. I always mix up ideas in that case. I am practicing on structure. I will try to rewrite the topic. Please give me your input. Thanks once again.

Hi Sow1225, I like your essay. You have raised reasonable alternatives for the increase in passengers arrived.

Hi AmigoRo, Please rate my essay. I need some criticism and suggestions. Thankyou. 200. ------------------------------ Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. The argument above states that more male dental patients faint than female patients while visiting a dentist. So, the argument concludes that advertising should focus on male consumers and emphasize on good anesthetic techniques and sensitive treatment to attract patients. The argument seems reasonablebut did not take all different possibilities for the cause to draw conclusion. first of all, the argument does not give information about the type of treatment men and women in statistics have undergone. If women visited for minor treatment such as dental cleaning, there is less chance for them to get fainted. On the other hand, if men have undergone major treatments like extracting teeth, filling, treatment for plaque, there will be a greater chance for them to get fainted durig treatment due to the use of anesthesia or pain killers. So focusing only on men would not be a good idea to attract more consumers unless thre is evidence that statistics was focused on same type of dental patients. Statistics should not only consider male and female patients with same dental problems, but also with same other health problems, because, dental patients might have other complications like diabetese, heart disease which contribute to fainting during stressful treatments or activities. Assume that the statistics considered similar male and female patients and still men fainted are more than the female. Then, the advertising should not only focus on gentle treatment and anesthesia. There are other factors like hunger, fear of medical tools and blood and anxiety. So focusing only on those two factors will not help attract more patients because thpatients personally know what causes them faint. So they should focus on the other factors also. So, the author might be more convincing if information about statistics was elaborate and focus on various factors in advertising along with the two factors mentioned.

Hi Friends, Please critique my essay. Also Tell me where in the scale am I. Thanks. 214. ------------------------------ In each city in the region of Treehaven, the majority of the money spent on government-run public school education comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the value they place on public education. For example, Parson City typically budgets twice as much money per year as Blue City does for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. It seems clear, therefore, that Parson City residents care more about public school education than do Blue City residents. The author claims that Parson city residents care more about Public school education than those of Blue city just because they budget twice as much as Blue city residents. It sounds plausible, but, the seems to have overlooked all different aspects in reaching the conclusion. The fact that both the cities have same number of residents, does not mean they have the same number of public school students. If the public school students of Parson city are much more than those of Blue city, the relatively more budget of Parson city may not meet the standards. The author mentions that majority of the public school budget comes from the city taxes, but, there is no data given about the amount taxes. If the city taxes of the Parson city are more than that of Blue city, money contributed to public schools will be more though the residents may like it or not. There are so many other factors to be considered for the budget Public school budget along with the taxes of the city. Better schools with high passing rate, high GPA's, good extra curricular activities might attract funders and investors to raise money for the public schools. There is not enough data given in the argument about the rest of budget other than taxes whigh might have helped Parson city to rise its budget. So, finally, We can not say that Parson city's residents care more about Public schools than those of Blue city, unless there is information about number of students of public schools, and , information about the rest of the budget money.

Hi AmogoRo, You don't need to apologize. I got your point about surveys. Thanks.

Hi Friends, I would like some sincere input on my argument. Please tell me where I am on the scale 1 to 6. Thankyou. 48. ------------------------------ The following appeared in a newspaper article published in the country of Corpora. "Twenty years ago, one half of all citizens in Corpora met the standards for adequate physical fitness as then defined by the national advisory board on physical fitness. Today, the board says that only one quarter of all citizens are adequately fit and suggests that spending too much time using computers may be the reason. But since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does." The writers conclusion is in no relation to the causes he mentioned. First of all we can not say if there is a decrease in the number of people meeting fitness standard in 20 years, because, the writer did not mention anywhere if the standards used in testing the fitness are same as 20 years ago. Actually, we can say that they may be different because the writer mentioned the standards used 20 years ago as then defined. So, there is a chance that they are redefined twenty years later. If the standards used now are tougher than those 20 years ago, there is a chance of decrease in the number of fitness people. Moreover there may be increse in population growth and decrease in death rate over 20 years which certainly might decrease the number of fitness people. Secondly, it is claimed that since areas of computer ownership have highest fitness levels, using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. We can not say that computer ownership has not made citizens less physically fit just because those areas have highest fitness levels. We do not know the population of computer ownership areas, and, we do not know the number of people with highest fitness levels in those areas, and, we donot know if people with highest fitness levels in those areas are using computers or not. So, without having clear measures of above, we can not conclude that computers has not made citizens less fit. The writer said fitness levels decreased because expenditure on fitness products decreased. This is not completely acceptable because, now a days, so many fitness programs are coming like yoga, meditation, karate which require no additional fitness equipment. Also there is a chance that people already have equipment for aerobic type exercises and are trying to reach the fitness level or not doing exercises. The writer is criticising economy for people not buying equipment and not being fit. There are several reasons for not buying equipment such as above. Finally I would like to say that the writer might be more convincing if he considered different statistics like population change, chage of food eating habits, effect of economy on their fitness programs.

Hi AmigoRo, Thanks for your feedback. From next time I will try to focus on critiquing on survey faults more. About that spelling mistakes, I did not proofread the essay. AmigoRO, I have one question. Pl, clarify it. I am not good at fast typing and when typing I am not good at thinking. I want to write essays on paper, but also I am afraid I might not be able to write on paper neat and tidy without any crossings and cuttings. Please help me on this issue. Thank you.

Hi Sri, Please give me your input with scoring. Thankyou. 55. ------------------------------ The following appeared in a Letter to the Editor of the Shady Village newspaper. "Commuters are complaining that the rush hour traffic on Blue Highway between Shady Village and Bright City has doubled their commuting time. Some commuters have asked that an additional traffic lane be built, but the recent creation of such a lane on nearby Green Highway apparently attracted more commuters, judging from the fact that rush-hour traffic jams actually increased there this past winter. To reduce rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway, a bicycle lane should be added instead of a traffic lane. This approach will succeed because many citizens of Shady Village are avid bicyclists; 75 percent of respondents to a recent questionnaire distributed there said they would like to bicycle more hours per week than they currently do." There are some real flaws in the letter sent to the editor of the Shady village news paper. The idea of not building another lane on Blue Highway depending on the fact that Green Highway has a lot of traffic jams past winter is ridiculous. Obviously winter has nasty weather conditions such as snow, poor visibility, and slick roads. It is mentioned that Green Highway attracted more commuters after new lane was built, so, it might have added to the winter conditions to cause traffic jams. No data has given to compare the traffic of green highway and blue Highway, so, we can not say that another lane on Blue Highway also causes jams. There is no information given about the commuters on Blue Highway such as number of commuters from Shady village to Bright City or vice versa. By the name of the city or village we can nto say that there is more number of commuters from village to city. If the number of commuters from bright city to shady vilage are far more than from shady village to bright city, building bicycle lane may not decrease the rush hour traffic. Here is another important factor which weakens the idea of building bicycle lane for only shady village commuters. If the increse in rush hour traffic is due to increse in commuters from another cities connecting these two cities, we may not at all decrese the rush hour traffic. Even the questionnaire responses of shady village are not reliable because there is no mention of number and type of citizens the questionnaire was given. If the questionnaire was given to a few and if they are not commuters between these two cities, the information is entirely useless. Moreover we have to consider the distance between the two cities, for considering the bicycle lane which is not given. If the distance is more than 10miles, nobody wants to go by bicycle because it takes more time to ride bicycle than the automobile time including the complained time being wasted due to rush hour traffic. It is also not possible to ride a bicycle through all weather conditions. So the idea of building bicycle lane rather than automobile lane would be convincing if data like distance between the cities, the contribution of Shady village commuters to the rush hour traffic, the poll of real commuters of shady village and their inclination of bicycle riding through all weather conditions.

Hi Nish, I also started writing 4 days ago. I am not good at judging other essays. But I think you are very good at developing essay even without examples. I really like your essay. The idea 'govt. people are elected by people' is very simple, but I could not get that idea. I am not good at getting ideas on some topics fast. I think I have to practice. Good luck for your Exam.

Hi AmigoRo, Thanks for the input. I try to improve my summary. Its just that I don't get good ideas sometimes. I am also not good at drawing conclusion. Any suggestions?

Hi Sri, Thank you very much for your input. This is the second essay I have written. I started writing after two years of break. I really could not come up with much ideas. I did not think much also. You gave your feedback on my 3rd essay. you said you liked it. I think I did better on that one. I try to braistorm from next time. I was really bad on this essay. Thanks again very much.

Hi Sri, Thanks for your input. I really needed that. I did not proofread my essay so I got some mistakes. From next time I will proofread them before posting. Thanks for pointing out that I may not want to criticise terrorists about their background. Pl, keep giving me some input. Thanks for wishing me luck.

Hi Please give me feedback on this essay. This is my 4th essay. I did not receive any input for any of my essays. Erin, please help me. I have my GRE in December. 130 How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society I agree with the speaker in the sence that destiny of society is determined by the way children socialize. I believe adult's character and behaviour is shaped by the childhood experiences and influences. How children socialize today with their parents, friends, relatives, and, society will shape their character. according to "Dr. Phil" show on CBS television channel in US each and every individual has defining moments in their life which shape as who they are today. I also with the speaker when he say that most of parents do not know how to raise their children in proper way. I would like to explain it with an example. Recently, a single mother in Indiana, USA, was caught on tape beating her child in her car in a parking lot. She was arrested. But after this incident had happened, so many TV shows are being held. It is very sad to hear that almost all of the audience appeared in these shows agreed that they always spank their children. I believe spanking children hurts their feelings. They lose the sesne of individuality, confidence in themselves which hinders their good social behaviour. Parents should help socialise thier children in proper way. even simple ways like saying 'please', 'thankyou' go a long way in building their social behaviour. we have help children to be friendly, responsible, honest, kind, and, truthful. We also have to teach them how to stay away from strangers. Take the example of Al-queda terrorista, serial killers. if all these people had beem brought up well and good, 9.11.2001 might have been prevented and so many lives might have been saved. After all, today's children are tomorrow's adults. So I would like to conclude by saying that good social behaviour helps to build safe and good society. So, parents have to participate in bulding good social behaviour in the lives of their children.

Hi Erin, My name is Nagalakshmi_k. I am new to TestMagic. I have posted 3 essays on issue topics. Why haven't they been approved? Please let me know.