Aladdin

Dear friends, I really appreciate any of your comments. Weather is one of the factors that affect human life. Some people prefer to live in places that have the same weather or climate all year long. Others like to live in areas where the weather changes several times a year. Both cases have their specific advantages. For one thing, places with stable weather, when the temperature fluctuates around 20 C, are very comfortable to live at. There is no need to check the weather every day, no bad mood because of a rainy day, no shoveling after snowfall. In addition, swimming in outdoor pools or in any other natural reservoir is available all year long. As a parent, I can tell you it is a real fun for kids! Besides, such a climate reminds us a paradise and, therefore, makes us feel even better. For another thing, places with four-season weather make our life more interesting. Weather changes introduce the feel of something new in our lives. Moreover, every season normally has not only its mood but also its own colors. It is a real fun for me to see how colors change with the weather. Besides, I am quite sure there are people who enjoy shoveling snow! As for me, I prefer the weather with all for seasons, because I need to feel the warmth of July Sun in summer as much as the cold of Christmas snowfall in winter. I love to watch maple-trees colored in fiery red in fall, and bright green color of young grass in spring. This kind of weather we enjoy in Canada!

Thank you, kalaga, for your comments. >First: The essay topic has a question in it, did you notice ? I did, but what is your point? >Second: The very first sentence has some of the answers to the question. I would say too broad answer, and I tried to develop it further. Probably, I would better rewrite it. >1. you essay seems to be a "collection" of your opinions, on why people attend educational institutions. For example, Of course, everything I wrote is my personal opinion, or "collection of them, if you like. Dont you write your personal opinion? Or maybe you know the answer?:) Everyting you marked was my exlanations of my statements in the first sentences in each paragraph: >So I expect you to discuss three major points, right? So, you want me to ,actualy, count all my points? >These two phrases are used when you have two points to discuss. "This is one , and that is another ".But I found one more paragraph. I do not think it is a big crime to add another or more points. Do you? I am not trying to be sarcastic, I would really like to know if there are such restrictions in using these phrases. >you DID present three reasons, but then the phrases "For one ...For another" , don't offer you the flexibility to introduce a third, or may be a fourth point. Again, I appreciate anybody else to comment this. >Take a look at the closing sentence. quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- In my personal opinion, colleges and universities play a very important role in human society. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- >Can your closing sentence be an answer to the question Did not I explain above in wich way they do? (help people get a job, make life interesting) >While writing an essay, the problems usually encountered is either the author finds himself indulging in highly verbose style (using too many words than is required) or highly compact style (using too few words than is required) By being more verbose and creative in forming sentences, your essay will be really good, because you have identified various reasons (which is half the problem solved), apart from those given in the question itself. That is why I posted my essay on tis web site. I am learning how to do all that. :) Do you think it is too easy? Not for me, obviously.:D >All you have to do now is to join these points in a beautiful sentence, and also, maintain the structure and flow of the essay.Explore the various possibilities of constructing a sentence.Let the sentences be long. STUDY the stucture of the essay: how it starts?...how it ends?Don't jumble the points incoherently. para1 : what should it be ? ( did you notice the question ?) para2 ...para 3 ... and so on. I would say all the above is a collection of NOT YOUR opinions.:p >Essay is not about how many points you can squeeze out, but how you present them, after you have squeezed them out. So, you prefer less point in longer sentences? >(And yes, maintaining good grammer and punctuation is equally important.) Any mistakes in my essay? >Aladin, why don't you try this essay again.!!! I surely will!!!!!!!:cool: Thank you for your time.

Hi to all, Thank nu nam 2001 >(I do not sure if the words "for one thing and for another thing" are formally used but I have never seen them before. Is it better to use such simple words as first, moreover, etc..) I just tried to use something new. :) >(Actually, in my personal opinion, I do not agree with your idea. Do you mean only people who want to be a teacher would go to school? How about others who what to do other jobs? Do not they need to study in universities?) Of course, they do! That was the point. It was just an example. I could have used another one. Apparently, you do not like teachers, do you?:D What about police officer? >(Again, I also do not agree with what your 2nd paragraph said.) You can agree or dissagree, but you cannot say it is a lie. Maybe you know the actual reasons? Can you tell me, please?;) >(This paragraph is okey.) (Your conclusion is also good.) Your gramatical structure is good Appreciate this.:D >what I wrote is only my personal idea. I am probably not correct. Of course, it is!! I asked for comments, I thank you for your time.:)

hi to all. Here is my essay. Any comments? 10ks. --------------------------------------------------------------------- Colleges and universities help people to get new knowledge. People attend them for many different reasons. I think there are three major ones. For one thing, people want to learn to get a new, very often the very first, job. They learn what to do, how to do and how to find a job. For instance, if I wanted to be a teacher, I would go to university, learn what to teach, what the teaching methods are and what is important to get a job as a teacher. For another thing, people want to know how to do the job they already have, more efficiently and more effectively. They learn modern tools or update their working skills. For example, an engineer would probably study a new technology, accountant new software. Finally, people go to school to make their life interesting, make new friends. They study languages, get knowledge on their hobbies, develop their aptitudes and improve themselves. If someone has a pet, he will probably take a pet care course. For the reasons discussed, people attend colleges and universities to get knowledge to get a new or the first job, to upgrade themselves professionally and to make their lives interesting. In my personal opinion, colleges and universities play a very important role in human society.