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Hi thanks for your comments. Will you point out to me my grammar mistakes? Thanks will greatly appreciate your effort.

I think health conscious would be appropriate, instead of invention of fridge. It is just my opinion.

The thought you have in your sentences are incomplete. In my opinion reading novels gives ____(me?)more enjoyment than any other_______(what?) .I used to read novels because it (does?) not only gives (me?) enjoyment and excitement , but also enhances our (my?) reading skill. Some times (sometimes) novels show a great change in our (What do you mean novel does?) life.After novels I would prefer to read magazines and news papers.Because those are helpful to stay our contact with the outside world.I can conceive that magazines would be of any use regarding to knowledge. (You need to follow a pattern on writing your essay!) Hope my comments help. Break a leg!!!!!

Hi I am not so sure about the invention of refrigerator could be right, because health is the issue. In my opinion refrigerator will relate to preserving food. Just want to let you know and see what you think. Break a leg!!!!!

not all serious movies are true stories, so maybe you could say serious movies are interesting because some of the stories are based on real happenings.

Hi there is a pattern for essays. I think you better check on it. Hope my comment helps.

Hi you have good ideas, but my comments are: 1. You don't start a paragraph with although. 2. The reasons for your thesis should be organize, like you mentioned true stories, moral lessons and think sensibly. I think they should be on one sentence. 3. In the conclusion you had like ; I am not for sure why you included it, because i think they should be connected and the conjunction "and" is there so I don't think the colon should be there. They are all just my opinion, with my own understanding. Hope my comment helps.

It is indisputable that teachers play an (a) pivotal role in teaching and guidancing(guiding) students in classes. They provide students +with a lot of precious knowledge which is(are) very necessary for them in the future.However, should teacher(s) show their social or political viewpoints to students? Each person has their own opinion toward this question. Some people approve it but others hace(?) the opposite one. In my opinion, i(I) strongy agree with the latter that teachers shoud not make their social or political point of views in classes because it can reduce studying efficacy and influence viewpoints of students

I don't know the question, but I am just giving my honest opinion. Its quite hard to follow too.

Hi you have a good essay, grammar is good. It seems like you don't have a thesis statement.

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1. What are the characteristics of a good parent? (Word Count 351) Parents play a major role in the life of a child. Although, the invention of so many toys and the influence of peers have greatly affected children’s behavior of modern time, parents with good traits can use these influences to mold the personality and behavior of a child for the good. I believe that ideal parents should be of good moral character, good listener and patience. Parents should have good moral character, because they are the role models of children. It has been known that children are the reflection of their parent’s trait. For instance, my parents do not smoke, gamble or drink. They express virtue in all their actions. They taught us how to respect to elders, and be sensitive to other people’s feelings all the time. They have been my idol all my life, because they were able to raised six children so well and none of us went astray. Furthermore, being a good listener is very important. When parents have time to listen to their children, the communication is open between parties. To illustrate, my brother failed his science subject in school. My parents did not judge or scold him, instead they talked to him and listened to his concerns. They found out that he did not understand his lesson well because of his assigned seat. He was sitting next to an air conditioner, and it bothered him. Having patience has a lot to do with parenting. Although children behavior gets out of hand sometimes due to certain issues like mood, parents exert extra mile of patience to comfort them with love and care. For example, my sister when she was in her elementary years, she refused to attend school. My mother was always late for work, because of my sister’s action. She would always try to bribe her with something so she would go into class. Parenting is a tough job comes with big responsibility. Therefore it is crucial that parents should have outstanding character, a good listener and patience, so that they would have wonderful children.

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Comments: I. Transition words are missing. II. Lack of Organization III. Essay pattern 2. Introduction should have topic statement. a. Made bad decision, Impatient and being stubborn. 3. Subtopic a. bad decision.......for instance Moved in with grandma......... b. Impatient...........for example Moved into an apartment....... c. Being stubborn irresponsible.....for example Missing classes... 4. Conclusion....Summary and recommendations Check tenses Writing English - Proofreading and Copyediting Services

You have good fillings for your essay, but it is not organize. You need to organize you essay using a pattern. To be honest I am totally lost with what you are saying in your essay. Comments: Organize them using a pattern with an introduction paragraph talking about your main topic. Next paragraph talk about your subtopic then elaborate. Maybe another 3 to 4 paragraphs. Then conclusion, summarize overall. And you need to space out each paragraph, so it will not confuse the reader. I hope my honest comments will help.