joy_mookerji

Great feedback....... You are right switching P2 and P3 makes more sense. Regards Joy

Right ho,the implications are abstract in my extract. Regards Joy

Hi kiwiz, Your essay is excellent. However I disagree one of your points: "By electing for Obama as President, the American people have demonstrated that taking risks and keeping an open mind are actually more important than the so called reassuring certainty that a McCain legislation might provide." People were more driven by the failure of the previous government which to my judgment was determinant of the outcome of the 44th Presidential Election.On the contradictory note of your argument,I will add McCain gave emphasis on being a maverick, and rather than the traditional republican approach asserted on his bipartisan methodology. :) That is my outlook. Thanks and Regards Joy

Hi Jtrader, I appreciate your courage.Age does not matter if you have the zeal to succeed and you should not be diffident about pursuing a PHD if you feel it's the right thing to do for you. Me,I am planning to pursue my Masters in Information Systems from University Of Maryland summer 2009 at the age of 34. I have the advantage of being a US resident and have 11 yrs of experience in Information Systems, so I got a GRE waiver from the University.I could have let go this opportunity since I have a Bachelors degree from the best Indian University (IIT,Indian Institute Of Technology) the MIT equivalent. However I still decided to pursue my Masters driven solely by my prudence and urge for higher education. I totally understand the hardship and dedication one has to have to pursue a higher education at a mid career level,and encourage you my friend to continue to be steadfast towards your goal. Thanks and Regards Joy

FYI - "crave (great desire for)" is a nice word which has similar implication. Regards Joy

Great essay,liked it very much. Your articulation is nice. One thing I noticed: "Given the aforementioned reasons, it is clear that the continuously desire of executives to maximize profits" - This should be "it is clear that the continuous desire". I am 100% sure its a typo , just wanted to make your aware of it :) Have a nice day my friend...... Joy

Success, whether academic or professional, involves an ability to survive in a new environment and, eventually, to change it. The author of this line has reiterated one of the great quote by Bernard Shaw – “The people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for the circumstances they want, and, if they can't find them, make them.” I strongly agree with the author’s practical view of success. In a pithy sentence he had articulated the most important fact about success. This world is not a place for diffident people lacking in self confidence, it’s the place that Darwin implied through his theory of “Survival Of The Fittest”, the cruel civilized jungle. Thus it is imperative that we cannot be complacent and meander without having definitive targets to achieve. There will be impediments in our life, however we have to be undaunted by any trepidation. New environment, whether it is in academic or professional won’t be laid by flowers. There will be people to be dealt with, who will be strong opponents or even obstacles and make life miserable for any person, how much educated or pugnacious he/she may be. However the sweet price of success doesn’t come without a price to pay. In order to be successful we have to constantly win over the whim and even nefarious ploy of co-workers, subordinates and superiors. The first challenge in a new environment is to understand the mechanics of it, i.e. how it operates, who are the primary leaders and who are the followers, to be precise the challenge is to understand the stake holders. This being done is the next big leap, to mould the stake holders. This may not be done easily or without some negative consequences. This process involves understanding human psychology and the more apt we are to understand our fellow human being, the easy will be our effort to mould them according to our benefit. However there will be some individual who will be mulish and contumacious and these individuals are our toughest challenges. Their ideology will be incongruent to our own and to wean them from their ideology will be the greatest challenge in our carrier. However in these cases most pragmatic and candid approach will be to come to a settlement in between so that it will be a win-win for all parties. Thus the adroit person will always be successful to shape his environment to his advantage and be the beneficiary. Instead of harrowing over tough circumstances one should be bold and intrepid to shape the circumstances like a conjurer and if he is successful in his venture his life will reach the pinnacle of success. We should never brood on our failures and instead of self-reproach we should jump start our effort with a new vigor to mould and shape the world as we like it to be.

Thanks for your diligent feedback friend. You are right,words used in the wrong context surely have a negative impact. However as you said,I was not showing off my vocabulary or being ostentatious in the forum. I was trying to put my thoughts into words and get some feedback from other people and at the same time I was trying to help others preparing for the test. I have a strong affinity for words and its not a recent endeavor of mine to enrich my vocabulary;I have been meticulously doing it for a long time. I apologize to you and all the forum members if I have put up a wrong message while expressing my thoughts. However I appreciate your comments and look forward for your unbiased criticism about my essays. Thanks and Regards Joy

"It is dangerous to trust only intelligence." This is a very realistic and pragmatic view which has been debated for decades. I am fully in accord with this statement. This statement was articulated with a different connotation by Thomas Edison: “Genius is 90% perspiration and 10% inspiration”. To reiterate on this lets take the example of Wall Street. The whole situation of this dismal economy was triggered by the fall of financial sector because of the idiosyncrasy of a very elite and esoteric group of financial pundits. A gamble was played based on intuition without having a futuristic outlook causing the tanking of the economy. To add fuel to the fire, risks were undertaken in the housing sector and resulted in the plummet of the entire economy. Thus actions devoid of due diligence started the sufferings and even indigence of hundreds and thousands of people. Then to supplement the conflagration started by the financial and the housing market appeared the auto industry with its own oversight of market trend and its own set of very intelligent people with their own fetishes. Soon health care got affected and the whole economy went into a vicious circle of deterioration and degradation, very difficult to be extricated from this turmoil. Thus to assert my opinion I would like to comprehend that only intelligence without any pragmatism is a sure sign of failure. If we depend only on our intelligence and don’t go the extra mile to assess the integrity of our intelligence with practical data we are bound to fail. If we are not diligent on our decision and don’t consolidate it with rationalism it is imperative we will fail. The implications of the failure maybe short term or long term depending on the impact caused by the failure. Only intelligence cannot be a determinant factor of a successful person. True application of intelligence lies in the fact, that it is applied with the situation in mind and enough research and effort has been put before any decision which involves the application of intelligence is taken. Subservience to intelligence only, falling slavishly to its ploy is not a true indication of superior quality, but it signifies temerity and finally hints towards imbecility.

Dude (I apologize if you are not) you have done great job :) Very nice essay with correct syntax and grammar garnished with the proper usage of words. Awesome , you should fly in your AWA. Best of luck...... Joy

I have accumulated my vocabulary and garnished it by listening to NPR (national public radio-USA) ,it's a very good place to listen to the articulation of writers,journalists and radio hosts and it also provides you with zillions of information about whats going on in the world.If you are in USA it's easy,just tune in your radio and you are all set.I hear the radio mostly during driving to work or while running my errands. If you are not in USA this is the link of their web-site. WNYC - New York Public Radio. Not only you will enhance your vocabulary but also you will get the idea of their usage in the correct context. By the way "disconcerting" is a very nice word to describe some ones mental condition of emotional disturbance and not the mot juste (verbiage) your are implying.I am not patronizing you;I am just trying to point you to the correct direction.Instead you can use instead "some what difficult to conceive or envisage or imagine". Thanks and Regards Joy

Your articulation is excellent and you gave very good examples to justify your opinion. However I feel the word "predisposition" is little misnomer in the context in which it is used. Instead disposition will be more befitting. Thanks and Regards Joy

"It is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation; the details may be worked out by a team, but true innovation results from the enterprise and unique perception of an individual." According to the foregoing sentence the author has emphasized that individual aptitude and excellence is the primary impetus of innovation. I am not entirely in consensus with this argument. It is a strong argument; however I don’t consider it unblemished. I comply with the fact that individual contribution and aptitude is very important but alone an individual cannot be successful without the help of the entire team who believe in the capability, dexterity and vision of the individual. There are a myriad of evidence which are pertinent to this reality. Google started as a small company by two graduates however it became an enterprise because of the contributions of group of people who shared the same vision as the founders. Same story is applicable for Microsoft, GE, IBM, APPLE and other enterprises which started as a small vision and gradually evolved as a pioneer in their respective field. This was possible because of the people who were pragmatic enough to nurture and grow the vision of their founders. This is true in all aspects of the society. The idea of “Micro Banking” was conceptualized by a single person but it became immensely popular because of the people who had faith in the idea and materialized the same. The idea along with its implementation was considered a noble venture and hence it won global recognition and even the “Nobel Prize”. Thus an individual, how much gifted he may be is prone to failure if his idea is not considered poignant by the people. The mechanics as a whole is very important for the metamorphosis of a theory to practical usability and without the support of the environment that is the followers to be precise theories remain as theories and they never see the dawn of the day. An individual can bloviate and contemplate with his genius mind for decades, but how fruitful or beneficial is a theory without its practical implementation. It remains as a brain child and gradually desiccates to oblivion. Thus to summarize my argument I would emphasize upon the fact, it important for a brilliant individual to come up with revolutionizing and mind boggling idea but it should be supplemented with the trust and belief of the people who are the eminent factor for making the idea a reality.

I would recommend "Wren and Martin".Its a good place to go over the basics.GRE demands correct English with proper punctuation and spelling.You don't have to ornate your essays with flamboyance,however correct articulation will keep you among the top scores in the writing section. Joy

Not at all. You have been diligently providing me with your feedback. I really appreciate your tenacity of reading through my essays and accept your feedback in good spirit. Joy