my teacher corrected this essay very terribly. I want to see your opinion:)
There are many things that I wish to change about my neighborhood. The most important thing that needs changing is traffic jams. Its consequence of accidents, dirt, time-consuming is unacceptable and effective to our daily life.
A lot of problems cause accidents on the road and traffic jams are one of those. Along with the development of our town, there are many changes and especially the transportations which are increasing with a large number. The streets are narrow but still have to cope with a lot of heavy traffics such as Lorries, container-trucks, etc. Each time we stop by the traffic light, there must be some cars or motorbikes crashing each others.
Another reason for that change is air pollution. Traffic jams occurs almost everyday in rush hour. It’s also means that tons of dirt, smoke that comes from cars, buses… blow out. People just stand there and cannot move in any direction. As a result, they breathe the dirty air and may get cancer.
Finally, standing in one place for a long time while there are many other things which need solving will affect a lot of people. For instance, an ambulance is taking a dying-person to the hospital and of course it has its own right to overlook many rules. But what can it do when there are a lot of traffics among it? We all can image how seriously traffic jams cause to people.
The former reasons explain why I want to improve our town’s traffic jams. I believe that this problem does not exist only in our town and also in others. I hope someday we can change our traffic systems and make our hometown develop better.