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I am appreciate for your comments. Please let me know when you update any new essay needing my reviewing. ---My Signature Message--- * my planed date to take GRE: Oct 19, 13' * want me to comment more on your essays?! Comment on mine, and I will respond to one of your essay where others' essays of the same topic have not yet been commented by me, in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could wonder if a comment is for your essay or mine. * Comments on another one's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument responding to your essays. * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize with ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * Here are my posts: View Profile: neateditor - Urch Forums neateditor * Here are the core guides to your writing as well as commenting: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

---Issue Topic--- Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Reason: The surest indicator of a great nation is actually the welfare of all its people. ---Prompt--- Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. ---My Response Essay--- Welfare of all people of a nation could not be the surest indicator of a great country. Although the achievement of the capable talents in the nation is as well an indicator, this or even the welfare are both too narrow to be the best index. Surely, welfare demonstrates certain scenes how people in the nation live. However, it is a concurrent status, which could not last long. For example, Canada used to provide unaffordable social welfare and end in dramatically shouting down some services in a rush. Leaving a great debit for the next generation of people should not be consider as "great". A great nation could be great in many aspect such as giving births to all human beings, holding long history, helping other countries in disasters, or generating rich human culture, but none of these are of its welfare. For example, my country whose citizens donate highest in average to Japan in FukuShima event is highly respected by its surrounding countries. Many more measures need to be took into concern to form a surest indicator while welfare merely is not representative. ---my signature--- * my planed date to take GRE: Oct 19, 13' * want me to comment on another of your essays?! Comment on mine and, in a deserved way worth how you revise mine, I will repond to one of your essay where other essays of the same topic have not yet commented by me. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could wonder if a comment is for your essay or mine. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument responding to your essays. * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize with ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * Here are my posts: View Profile: neateditor - Urch Forums

---Argument Topic--- "We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café." ---Prompt--- Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. ---My Response Essay--- Firstly, there has better to be an evaluation comparing the impacts by allowing readers to bring books unpaid to the cafe and its reverse. This change could erupt or enlarge bookstore's revenue. Will customers tend to buy the book not been finished reading in the cafe, or will they tend read in the cafe instead of buying home? Secondly, side effect by reducing area for children is unknown. Will the children beg their parents to come home earlier for so? Is there an experiment outcome of removing 1 shelf of children' books? Thirdly, how is the customer base here related to national-wide population? The local based predication should be more accurate. Fourth, if the child customers are fewer, they are rather valuable as future loyal customer. Some alternative compensation need to be figured out to keep them visiting the bookstore or the cafe and even prompt them to spend more. As well, there must be other candidates of areas to be cut. Which are they? Fifth, Regal Books is a good one to observe. How does it suffer from impact of its new cafe? To close up, still too much information in the original argument is skipped to come out a desirable recommendation. ---my signature--- * my planed date to take GRE: Oct 19, 13' * want me to comment on another of your essays?! Comment on mine and, in a deserved way worth how you revise mine, I will repond to one of your essay where other essays of the same topic have not yet commented by me. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could wonder if a comment is for your essay or mine. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument responding to your essays. * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize with ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * Here are my posts: View Profile: neateditor - Urch Forums

I as well as most liberal people around the world, like my friends, will not agree any of your arguments. It is only a subjective definition without supports and groundings. All my previous posts and arguing are with undeniable logic and expressive organization, and so does my correction comments on your or other’s post. I will like to help criticize the irrational or misused reasons from any of your words.

I as well as most liberal people around the world, like my friends, will not agree any of your arguments. It is only a subjective definition without supports and groundings. All my previous posts and arguing are with undeniable logic and expressive organization, and so does my correction comments on your or other’s post. I will like to help criticize the irrational or misused reasons from any of your words.

The following was written by a group of developers in the city of Monroe., Argument 164(related to 25, 100, 102), Analytical writing, New GRE "A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money." The statement shows many clues a new jazz pub could be profitable, yet such information needs still more supplemental materials to be confirmed solid. Firstly, are the 100,000 people local based? If they are from somewhere else, they may not come for the jazz pub. Secondly, the ranking and the paying are two individual matters, and the base of voting may be relatively small to invalid the investigation. The voting amounts to Jazz Nightly and others, which is not shown, can draw a clearer picture about the audiences' preferences. Thirdly, does the program sponsor to lift up the ranking as a promotion tactic? The reputation of this ranking system is not revealed. Lastly, is $1000 per year in this area an affordable expense? If the data about annual expense on jazz is categorized by smaller area, the number reflecting city of Monroe is a better reference. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of a company that specializes in the delivery of heating oil., Analytical writing, New GRE "Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season, that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we can safely predict that this region will experience an increased demand for heating oil during the next five years." Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction. In this memo, annual market shares by oil in heating are not attached. In fact, traditional fashion of using oil could accelerate to go off the trend. More and more competitive replacement solutions are showing up. If the supplying price goes up along with the demanding as this memo predicts, how could the trading amount keep the same as now while many customers try apply for other replacements? Thereafter, merely the last heating season is not representative enough since it could be an out-bound value, a special case. Even with historical data sets for time series analysis, the coming trend is still unpredictable, unable to be guaranteed at accurate numeric figures. It will be better if a perspective prices in the option market is also offered. In addition, the description, "below-normal temperatures", is too vague. It does not indicate a percentage how many families will start heating once that point is reached. As well, the wording, "several more years" and "many new homes", is too fuzzy. If a statistic table or chart is presented, the overall impact can be more precisely determine. Based on these, 5 year must not be a calculated number. How it comes out need to be illustrated. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition., Analytical writing, New GRE Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position. Government should not fully sponsor admitted students unable to afford the college expenses. Despite financial aids have help a great number of students, and some countries ensure colleges free to students, the following disadvantages of this policy overweight the strengths. Surely, as they are in many countries, various public colleges such as military colleges and police colleges are free of charge. Already, they provide sufficient opportunities for entrancing low-cost higher education. For another extreme situation, if government fully sponsor private colleges, they are no more private college. Once there is no more private colleges, higher education become totally ruled by the authority, and there is no more academic freedom. On the other way, if the government pays everything for the poor students, private schools could dare to over charge them. Moreover, many colleges could offers less student loan to not poor enough students and tend to admit more poor students but prompt them to postpone graduation for making more money. Government should at a certain degree sponsor both the colleges and the students, but not to pay for the poor students by too much. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

This title in not in the Pool of Issue Topics, New GRE. You could try practice on the topics I wrote and exchange with me. To receive more comments, please reference my essay on the same topic and comment on it. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

This title in not in the Pool of Issue Topics, New GRE. You could try practice on the topics I wrote and exchange with me. To receive more comments, please reference my essay on the same topic and comment on it. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

Why not reference my essay on the same topic and comment on it, that we can exchange with discussion? http://www.www.urch.com/forums/gre-analysis-issue/149436-i-can-help-review-your-issue-essay-educational-institutions-have-responsibility.html ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models. Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals. , Issue 22(related to 2 & 122), Analytical writing, New GRE Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. The best way to understand the character of a society will never be examining its heroes or its role models. Although focusing on the heroes and the models is efficient, they are not representatives of a society nor can this way be the best for many reasons. Initially, taking shortcut on understanding only heroes and models is extremely biased. Concluding based on only these is so dangerous because they could be what a society wants but not what a society is. Further, the highest ideal part is not typical composition of a society. Even, they are the outstanding ones instead of the statistical mode of a society. Indeed, heroes and models could be promoted or be make-upped to become what they appear like now. Examining these is merely a research limited on surface of a society. Understanding heroes and models is an aspect observing a society, but not a best way to look through it. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

This title in not in the Pool of Issue Topics, New GRE. You can try practice on the topics I wrote and exchange with me. Too know more, please reference my essay on the same topic and comment on it. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

This title is not in the pool of issue topics, New GRE. You can practice the topics I wrote and exchange with me. Too know more, please reference my essay and comment on it. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours on the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument GRE issue ?_?? GRE_Argument_??

For the first paragraph, there seem some untrue statements. "Most students make the mistake" is exaggerated because many enough students know what they are doing and what they want to do exactly. Even, parents' and peers' opinions are too valuable references to deny. to be continue... Too know more, please reference my essay on the same topic and comment on it. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------- my planed date to take GRE: undecided * don't know how to write for a higher grade?! don't know why your writing earned a low grade?! You need to empathize ETS human raters' considerations when rating. Reading and rating many essays samples here illustrate the bad ways and the good ways when writing. Go beyond writing theories! Go practical! Write your response even if it is short or in Chinese. * want me to comment on another of your essay?! Comment on my one and I will response yours of the same topic in a deserved way worth how you revise mine. If possible, please post your essay to be reviewed in a new thread; else you could have hardships figuring out which comment is for your essay. * Writing comments exchange is a cool game. Why not try leaving any response to my essay and see what's back. * Comments on another's essay is itself an argument essay. I will formalize all my comments as an argument writing to your essays. * Rating and criticizing is that easy: GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Argument Task Scoring Guide GRE: For Institutions: Analytical Writing Issue Task Scoring Guide GRE Revised General Test: Score Level Descriptions http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Issue GRE Revised General Test: Analyze an Argument wenku.baidu.com/view/62813b8e680203d8ce2f2468.html wenku.baidu.com/view/2dadce553c1ec5da50e270ae.html