gautam

Needs to improve a lot more. Seems like random talking to me. Reinstating the question is good but it should not look like a complete copy. Lots of grammatical mistakes. Lots of grammatical mistakes again. Do people really change friends ? Its not a commodity you use today, throw away tomorrow, use it the day after again. This para doesn't make sense at all. Lots of mistakes and the idea doesn't get through to the reader clearly.

I myself needed more info as I have been accepted into a few Australian Universities for a Masters degree of my choice.

On IRC - correct grammatical english is not a criteria. Being a IRC regular I got the point he was making. "I could post........." meaning he is yet to post. "when it was finished" incorrect but it does mean its not finished yet. Well in IRC everything works :)

Don't know about others - but I have a sister and my parents made no distinction about who they should educate - my sister and I - both are very well educated.

Bricks and Mortar school ? Can I know a little more about it please ? I am curious. Is it a regular private high school ?

Hi, Anyone here going to or have been accepted to Australian University ?

Well not all universities give transcripts. But when this deficit exists, I have heard/seen many take a photocopy and get it attested and sealed by principal of the college or vice chancellor of the university.

Hi, I actually mailed the university for more info when I was filling up the form. They asked me to make the best guess and enter the information.

Well if you really want to discuss philosophy, send me a message and I will gladly discuss it at length. However when it comes to a TOEFL essay, the ideas need to be clear and concise. They don't want to see your debating skills, they would like to see your writing skills.

Well organization is ok, but too much use of "This approach", "The approach" etc. Too many scentences starting with "This." And ofcourse I think you can cut down on the usage of the word "change." Try to keep your scentences short. The longer they are, more are the chances of making a grammatical blunder.

I understood what you wanted to stay but I am strictly being the unassuming type while I read an essay. I try to close my background, culture and my roots before assessing it. That way I can do justice. I will use my background to write an essay but not judge one.

Well normally in India they state that "You are a prospective immigrant."

I am talking about forums to which one goes physically in the city. Not the online forums. For eg:- I had gone to speaking club once - where everyone gets a chance to speak. However you may interpret in a variety of ways.

Para 1 : Exterior and interior conditions ? Define them explicitly because the words seem out of place. In my dweling place - exterior is anything outside the door. Para 2 : You are trying to make a point -> avoid using "My point is that." It should be Gabriel Liiceanu said "......... ." In the english language if you have a period - quotes come after the period, not before, so it would be "blah blah blah." Those new conditions" I think should be "These new conditions." "Certain point of view" -> unecessary phrase - they want to hear your point of view only - infer it anyway you want. Nothing is incorrect. Para 3 : You could make it a lot more elegant - sounds to me like you are speaking rather than writing. " You could write this like -> "Change however is unavoidable but being conservative in nature, I have difficulty in handling such changes." Para 5 : Similar corrections could be made. Para 6 : What exactly do you mean by exterior and interior ?

Neither will you have one in TOEFL.