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My question: Does essay like this, containing lots of technical terms, okay for TWE? TWE question: Some items (Such clothes or furniture) can be made by hand or machine, which do you prefer? Entering the industrial age, we are familiar with goods produced by industrial processes more and more. I think that eighty percent of products in the markets nowadays are manufactured, or fabricated by machines. I also prefer those products of this type because it is generally cheaper; it offers me less defected items; and it is more convenient to buy as well. To begin with, most machine-made products are cheaper. They are the derivatives of the sophisticated mass production systems. As the manufacturers produce in mass, they can take advantages of economy of scale. For instances, they can buy cheaper raw materials, they are able to hire experts to optimize their processes and also minimize costs. Therefore, the products will be more cost-effective for me and I can save lots of money when I choose to buy this type of products. Moreover, comparing those products made from traditional and industrialized processes, the latter have less chance to be defected. Normally, when we buy one thousands pieces of goods from markets, perhaps few pieces are defected. If they are dishes, there may be some pores on them. If they are bottles of sweeten milk, some may be a bit sour. As the products are manufactured in well-defined processes and standardized systems, they are produced identically with less deviation factors. As a result, the industrial-made products offer me less frustration on those defected items. Furthermore, it is more convenient to buy those derivative-of-industrial-revolution products. Because mass productions means produce in large quantity, may be millions a day. Also, lots of legacy manufacturers have turned to mechanized systems. Together with, there are more acceptances among wholesalers as they can predict the quantity of outputs accurately in order to make marketing plans. Then, the goods are more widespread in the markets and finally make them need less effort to buy. When I can save time on buying such goods, I can spend more time on my education. Last but not least, I confirm that I prefer industrial-made product to those from the traditional processes. We have entered new era, it also makes our lives easier, and it, therefore, is a good idea to follow.

I think one of the most severe problems in TWE is how to initiate ideas. For example, "Do you agree with 'Never, Never give up' ?", I really do not have any idea to answer such this question. Memorizing all answer is also not practical, there are above 180 questions to do and we have to memorize a minimum of 180*3=540 ideas. Is there any hint on this ? I have only some ideas to share here. For some questions that ask about impacts on people's lives, I usually organize my ideas into some seperated view such as economical, sociological, medical, or engineering aspects. For examples, if I think automobiles is one of the most influential machines of human kinds, these will be my answers:- In sociological view - allow our cities bigger - family members are more closer In economical view - bring lots of businesses - bring lots of career In Medical view - longer life span - doctors are able to come faster Anyway, it can help me in only some questions, not all. HELP ME AND ALL OF US WITH YOUR COMMENTS WILL BE APPRECIATED!!!

I do not have sufficient knowledge to give you a score. Also, I do not know whether this style is more preferable. I, however, really like your writing style above.

That's it. Thank you very much awhig, finally i know what is to do. I will continue practicing more and more as I'll take the test in next 2 weeks.

A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice. Although some people believe that those moderns sophisticated toys, such as Playstations and Computers, are better for their sons’ and daughters’ developments, I think soccer balls, a more economical choice, have more benefits. Perhaps, there are several reasons involved. To begin with, children are in growing age. In order to grow up well, they need supports in many aspects, for instance, education, emotion, and physical strength. Most parents are focusing on only education and neglect the others. Therefore, soccer balls are regarded as a good solution to fulfill the children’s needs. By playing soccer, they have to run fast, to jump, to head, and to kick the ball, this allow them getting stronger. Together with, the more strength they gain; the less chance they get sick. This is an indirect effect but also help they study more well. Moreover, since soccer is a game, there are chances to win, to lose, or to draw. The kids are able to learn the athletic heart that is whenever the competition results are, they have to accept and will not give up. In addition, they can learn to deal with the situations when they are lost. These effects improve their ability to cope with hard situations in the future. This is one more reason that explains why soccer balls are quite intriguing gifts. Furthermore, as children play soccer, they are able to socialize. Soccer is a game of socialization. They players have to communicate and work as teams in order to compete with the oppositions. Obviously, collaboration skill is also concerned as another advantage. Both social and collaborating skills are essential for children when they become adults. In summary, I select soccer balls. They are one of the best presents that can be given to the children. I suggest that it is a good idea for parents to consider this as gifts for their kids on Christmas day next year.

24 Topic: A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. I live in Bangkok, the metropolitan capital of Thailand. There are lots of things I prefer here. Also, there are some things that I hate. I believe one that is coming here may appreciate the same things I love and also dislike the same things I hate. To begin with, my city offers variety of foods. Most people enjoy eating so most people will enjoy foods in my hometown. Because Bangkok is located in the center of South East Asia, people from different races and regions live here. Therefore, abundance choices of foods are available. One that prefers spicy meals can eat Thai and Indian menus. One that love noodles can has the Chinese dishes. In my point of view, eating is the most concerned issue while we are relocating into new place thus one that is moving to this city will appreciate much for the sumptuous meals here. Furthermore, there are so many educational opportunities here. Universities, colleges, schools, tutor schools, book stores are all available. It is conceivably that ones that move to my town will finally find the appropriate studying chances for them here. He can attend wherever college that he want. He can buy books that he needs which cannot be found in other cities. He is also able to admit to the tutor school to raise his TOEFL score in order to apply better universities. This is one more thing that he will like. However, in contrast, my city was ranked in the top ten of the most-facing-severe-transportation-problem cities. A place that is only five kilometers away takes around one hour to reach. The buses are lack of disciplines, sometimes they do not park in the right places so that cause more traffic jams. Also, the buses' engines are very old so their exhaust is very poisonous. No one in the world likes this. Everyone will dislike this traffic situation as well as a coming person definitely does. Last but not least, I think a person that is relocating to my hometown will love foods and educational opportunities here but he absolutely does not prefer the traffic problems. Nevertheless, he will love my city as well as lots of people do.

Thank you, Arhig!! You helped me again. Your comments always clarify me.

Are the very hard sentences that show off lots of language proficiency required for scoring higher? I think frequently these sentences is hard to understand and make the whole paragraph not smooth. However, it is a good way to express the proficiency of sentence-making via them. Any one know? which is better for scoring in TWE?

If I wrote "This is very interesting and I appreciate it" Is this break the parallel structure constrain? Sometime I think this type of sentence is more smooth than the parallel one.

65 Topic: Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. To preserve or destroy history buildings are vastly criticised. Some people said that they preserve these constructions to study the humans in ancient times but the oppositions said that they are useless buildings therefore replacing them is better. I believe that replace the old ones is the best for us. First of all, modern buildings are more useful. In economical view, they bring more money circulations. For old buildings, they can be only history places that the attending people only pay very cheap for tickets to enter. If only we substitute with the modern buildings such as department stores, there would entice more people that each spend more money to the areas and also cause higher hiring rate locally. As a consequence, this indicate that substituting old buildings with modern buildings is more interesting. Secondly, old structures have more chance to currupt. This is very dangerous for tourists. Considering the Pisa Leaning Tower, although it is an important history tower, someday it may collapse and smash people below like ants. Hence, it is more safe to replace these out-of-date structures and build new ones. Furthermore, old buildings may contain lots of unusual bacterias or viruses. As we know, some diseases cannot be found today because they are all exterminated since the old time. But anyone know? the exterminated disease may still be alive inside old structures. It may live well under cellars, beds or any strange places in the structures. People in last century did not have proper medical treatments so they did not prepare for fighting against these diseases. One may died and left his house as a history building today. I am scared of this and it encourages me to support to destroy these old sites. Last but not least, we do not need old buildings, what we need are looking into the future and do well. On the other hand, we do not need to preserve old buildings because they are absolutely not neccesary and also they are too dangerous.

I do not familiar with writting in the fields that are out of technology and engineering so this essay is not really good as I expected. Anyway, please rate it and make some suggestions !!! 43 Topic: Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Sir Hillary Edmune, the first person that summited the Everest in 1961 is absolutely outstanding. I completely admire him. Some people think that one who plays dangerous sports is silly but still some people play this kind of sports. There must be some reasons that make these peril sports interesting. To begin with, almost all of the dangerous sports are more exciting, challenging than general sports that we see everyday. I am the one that also love dangerous sports. The main reason is that I was bored with common sports such as soccer, basketball, swimming, tennis or even the high-heel golf. Few years ago, I tried rocks climbing once and I felt very impressive because this really drove my adrenaline as all of my friends did also. This come from my own experience and certainly become one reason that clarifies me how extreme sports are more interesting than the common ones. Secondly, these risky sports are used to prove the players themselves that they are capable to do more than their businesses alone. Some successful persons tend to involve in these types of sports more. The reason is that when they found that they are already successful in business lives so they want to prove that they are better than only success in only one field. Being mountaineers may be more challenging than their occupations and also may increase their reputation in the other ways. I think this also become examples that show why risky sports are attractive. Moreover, I found that some people playing the extreme sports because they only want to find the meaning of life themselves. We still do not know the real meaning of it so it has not been stated in any book. Many people had tried many ways to find this meaning. The extreme sports also became one choice that they chose. This is more reason that supports why some people love the extreme sports. There are many reasons that make someone loves dangerous sports because everyone has his/her own ideas that we can not know. However, playing dangerous sports are good for us like other kind of sports because at least they can make us stronger but there is something to concern that is the security when playing.

174 Topic: Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents` generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. As new technology advancements arrive, they influence how people live and therefore alter the societies in which people live. This is unavoidable and this is the cause that makes my generation differs from my parents' generation. To begin with, the first difference to mention is communications. As everyone knows, recently we all faced a great revolution in how people communicate. In 50 years ago, the most popular communication method was a snail mail, also there were not many phones in almost houses that time. But today, everyone has his/her own mobile phone and the popular messaging mediums are emails and SMSs. Moreover, to talk about the changes in how people communicate, the unforgettable is the Internet that connects our lives together without frontier limitations. We see some people are Internet addicts in stead of drugs addicts in the past. Obviously, these examples show the changes in communications between now and past. Secondly, the improvements in electronic and computer fields better our lives. When we have high performance computers, we can use them to do anything that is too complicated to solve in the past. This brings us a chance to conquer new medical advancements that dramatically extend our life spans. As a sample, a genetic study came real with the use of very high performance computers. As a result, it will be used to match the best gene couples in me and my future wife. Our children will be clever, smart, strong, tall and also good looking in ones as I can select all of my son's attributes. In additional, the high freedom society today make the children have more confidence and are able to perform well than people in the past. We can see lots of singers today, compared to in my parents' generation that had only small group of people that dared to perform in front of lots of people. Also, the children today have more initiatives and ideas to do anything more than the people in old days, this may lead us to break into new boundary of knowledge in near future. We may see some great emerging ideas from the current generation people. Some may even bring us chances to get to the Uranus, maybe. At last but not least, I think the people in each generation always have their own lifestyle but it always alters when the time has changed. Anyway, the alternative ways the people live nowadays are making new opportunities for our better lives in the future for sure.

Maybe the end of Jan next year that I will attend the exam. I'm subscribing now. Thank for you two comments. Now I see my weaknesses and will improve them. I think my big problem in writing is that it has too limited time for me to revise. In the case that I avoid using complex sentences or passive voices by using only very simple present and past tenses, is this works? have anyone try?

After practicing all weeks long, now I dare to post my essay here. Please rate me and also give some suggestions for further improvements!!! thanx a lot. 7 Topic: How do movies or television influence people`s behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. Since the first television was invent. It gradually become more popular and influences on people's life on both positive and negative way. First of all, as increasing in its popularity, the new social problem emerges that is The Imitation Behavior from Televisions. Lots of people watching TV tend to do everything like their favorite stars do on the show. Some people buy clothes, accessories that resemble to those of people seen on TV. Besides, marketing activities also changed from the legacy wordy advertising on newspapers and magazines to the inventive ones on televisions in order to attract more customers. This obviously shows that movies and televisions alter people's life. Secondly, because movies make money, millions of people come to this business. There are many related occupations born to this field, for example, movies directors, castings, producers, movies stars and also critics. This is a really lucrative job so it magnet lots of people to work in and makes abundance of money circulation. Consequently, we can say that movies and televisions definitely influence our lives. In addition, broadcasting plays an important role in educational aspect as well. Most of academic institutes try to modernize themselves by having their own distance-learning systems that mean broadcasting their lectures on TV channels. Many student even prefer this creative learning method to that the legacy one. This example also proves that broadcasting affects how people live. At last but not least, the new technological advancement always affects our lives as movies and television do. Although they have two sides like coins, we cannot stay away from these incoming sophisticated improvements. I think the best way for us is learning to live with them well from now on.