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  1. 60sec, thank you very much. Since i am not an English native speaker, I really appreciate your revisions in language and usage.
  2. After commenting on other's essays, I think it's time to post my own essay. Please help me rate my first essay. Any comments will be appreciated. 14 Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. Attending classes plays an important role in a student's learning process. By going to a class, a student can not only acquire specific knowledge and skills, but also learn a lot from the teacher's way of thinking. But the importance of classes doesn't mean that students should be required to attend all the classes. I support the idea that students should go to classes on a voluntary basis. I will give the following reasons to substantiate my point of view. First things first, going to classes is not always the most effective way of learning. Some students may find that things taught in class are too easy for them. For these students, they may achieve more academic progress if they study by their own. In another case, a student may find that he couldn't catch up with the teacher. In this case it is better for him to review the past lessons than going to classes. If we take into account for all these individual discrepancies, we will reach at the conclusion that taking class is not always the best choice for students. Some people may argue that "If going to classes are optional, what can guarantee the students' academic performance?" That comes my second point. As grown-ups, college students have the right to decide what they do. They should learn to be responsible for their behaviors. They will force themselves to go to important classes in order to do well in the exam. So there is no need to worry about this issue. Moreover, going to classes is not what university is all about. University is a community full of interesting and meaningful events. Sometimes these events may conflict with classes. In this case, students should have their freedom to choose. Take me as an example, my university is a prestigious one in my country and there are always celebrities or famous professors going to my school to deliver lectures. Some lectures are great opportunities for me. So when it conflicts with my classes, I always choose to attend those great lectures. I am not to say that we should always choose other events over classes, but at least we should have a choice. And learning to choose is also an important lesson both of universities and of life. Therefore, going to classes shouldn't be a must for students. From the discussion above, students should be free to decide going to classes or not, just like they are free to decide other things in their lives.
  3. Good job. The highlight of the essay is the use of relevant and vivid examples. I will rate 5.0
  4. You wrote a good essay. I just give some tips on how to understand the topic: I think "games" are not limited to the scope of "role playing game". A variety types of games, such as chess, cards, crossword games etc. can be illuminative and inspirational to our lives. I will take chess for example: In my native country there is a saying "Life is just like chess". I think that makes sense, life and chess game have so many in common: 1 once you make a move, you can't change it, in real life there is no "regret pills". 2 if you don't move, you'll lose, in real life you have to be active and make things happen, don't just wait. 3 you have to lose a rook to save a queen, in real life you have to give up something in order to achieve something. 4 you have to watch the board carefully and make a move accordingly, in real life you have to study the situation thoroughly and making your plan, "look before you leap" ....
  5. neves

    plz. rate my essay

    4.5, I think. But the ideas and arguments in your essay might worth 5+, if the language being polished.
  6. neves

    plz. rate my essay

    A nice essay, ur points are very good. btw, in the last para, " and situation becomes more worst when ...." should be "becomes worse...." or "becomes even worse...."
  7. neves

    essay writing problem

    it is ok bless ^_^
  8. A very impressive essay. The three main reasons are well supported and the first two of them are demonstrated with your own experiences. I think you can get 5+
  9. neves

    plz. rate my essay

    I think your arguments (third para) are mainly focused on "what if there is no teacher". Maybe you should discuss more about "what would the teacher give us", thus develop your fourth paragraph, just as Ziyod suggested.
  10. neves

    Rate The Essay

    An impressive essay with clear structure and cogent reasoning. I think it's advisable to describe your town in the first paragraph. It sets a background for the following discussion. But the third point in your essay(the fourth paragraph) seems not well supported. p.s. I am new here and this is my first post. Very glad to join this forum.
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