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please let me know my mistakes. u r welcome with any comments. Do you agree or disagree to the statement Dissatisfaction leads to progress. " Dissatisfaction leads to progress." I strongly agree to the above statement because I believe that dissatisfaction leads to learning, and learning leads to progress. Not being satisfied will lead to hard work, perfection, and gaining knowledge. Many people will work hard, if they are not satisfied. For example, if I feel dissatisfied about my English skills. I would try to put more effort and work hard to get good grammar and good written English. So, I would read many books about English grammar and about the English written skills and also get information to follow and improve my skills in English. By working hard in the subject one can become perfect that area. Coming to the above example, by improving my English. I will become more perfect in that subject and there is a possibility that i might master it also. Then i can teach other and also help them with English. Once we are not satisfied, we tend to read many book and gather information. In this way one can get good knowledge about the subject or in which they weak. For example, If I am not strongly in the area of computers in office. I would try to learn and gain experience in computer. They way I can also gain knowledge about computer. In conclusion, based on the reasons of getting prefect, gaining knowledge and trying to improve oneself I would absolutely agree to the statement that Dissatisfaction leads to progress.

Please evaluate my version of essay. Any kinds of comments are welcome ! :) Topic 156 You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. If I have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. I would choose Italy. Italy is famous for its museums, architectures, paintings, and gardens. It is also famous for its delicious Italian pasta, pizza and wine. Firstly, I don't know much about Italy or know about many places in Italy. I heard about Venice and Rome, which are beautiful cities in Italy. Venice is called " the romantic city in the world ". Whole city of Venice has been built on water and as grand canals, where they use boats instead of cars. People travel in boats to go to office, shopping and so on. Many of them own boats like cars in the city. Which makes me wonder how beautiful is the city and I am also curious to know, how they built a city on water. The oldest city in present day Italy is Rome. It is well know for rich ancient architecture and history. In school they used to teach us about the Roman Empire, Latin civilization, about the king Julius Caesar and about the Emperor Napoleon. Since, I have watched movies about the gladiators. I want to visit the place where the gladiators used fight with wild beasts. Last but not least, Italy is well known for its gemstones like sapphire, coral and many other stones. So, I would like to shop and see those stones and also investigate why do they say that stones from Italy are higher in quality. In conclusion, by visiting Italy I will learn about their culture and also about their history.

Hi, everyone. please evaluate my essay. I earnestly hope my writing skill have improved. You are welcome with any kind of comments. :) #149: Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this land? Use specific details to explain your answer. Land is a great resource and we can utilise an empty land merely for anything. If I would receive some land to use as I wish. I would build a place for elderly people, where they can live with peace and happiness without paying any bills and taking care of each other. Today, many people are suffering from stress because of their insurance bills, medical bills and so on; living without peace of mind even though, they have reach the age of retirement. So, I want to build a place in suburbs, where there will be complete countryside environment without much pollution, cars and so on. For example, In the movie "Patch Adams", where he will build a place and all people living in that building would take care of others and understand each other. People living in this place can do any thing that interests them without any restrictions. They can paint, they can do gardening and so on. For example, if a group of people like to garden they can garden whole place. When the place is full of green trees and with different colored flowers. It looks beautiful and it would bring joy and happy feeling in everyone living in that vicinity. On the other hand, they can also sell the flowers from the garden to raise funds. For example, if people, who are interested, grow all kinds of flowers then skilled persons can start a business on flowers and plantations and sell them to florists. People would love to buy flowers and the money earned can be the funds to help others. In conclusion, if I would receive land and can use it as I wish. I would like to establish this kind of place where there would be peace and happiness. It would be an escape from the busy life style and stress.

Please comment on my version. welcome with any comments. Please let me know my mistakes. :) In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details. I strongly agree to the statement that teenagers have jobs while they are still students because they will learn to be independent, will again experience, will be exposed to real world, and value money. Firstly, students will learn to be independent in their early life. For example, when it comes to take an extra class that interests me. I will not depend financially on my parents. If I work and earn money, I will take my own decision and register for class. At the same time, I will also think twice to take the decision whether to join the class and how it would help my career. In my opinion, by being independent we will also be responsible. Coming to pervious example, by taking up the course that I like, I would try to complete it and I will be paying the fees. So I will put my maximum effort to get good grades in that course which I choose. Secondly, students will be experienced in job market. For example, if I post my resume recruiters would ask me for experience and most of the employer's don't like to hire the person who is a fresher in job market. And student will also learn, to be in time to his work place because others at work will be dependent on him. If he doesn't perform well or if he is always late to his work place will lose his job. Thirdly, student can learn to manage his finance and he will understand the value of money. For example, working as a waiter in a restaurant. I would think twice to purchase designer clothes or cell phone because I need to pay other bills too. Instead of spending money on other fancy items I would be spending on necessary items. In conclusion, based on the above reasons. I strongly support that student should work in order to get responsible and experienced. He will again confidence being independent, by living his own life and will be ready to face the world.

Thanks Hoper, its nice to know my mistakes. i will try to improve.

Please comment on version. You are welcome with any kind of comments. 158# when famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. People such as actors, athletes, political leaders and rock stars or not only famous, but also they have influence on the people. They are the role models in the society. In my opinion, we should pay attention to their opinion. But at the same time, we need give a thought, whether it is worthy enough to listen their opinions. Generally, famous people opinions are given out their experience and also with good knowledge. At times, which seems to be beneficial in certain situations. For example, this statement by Lincoln said " think what you did your country rather than what country did to you." always reminds me to do some thing for my country. Instead, blaming my country for unemployment. We have our own choice whether to listen to the opinions or not. we may not listen to the opinions which is not worthy enough like some rock star gave the statement to enjoy life and do what u enjoy. Instead, wasting time in school and college. These kind of opinions need to be thrown into the thrash-can. Sometimes the opinions given by the famous personalities are for their own good for example, some actor gave her opinion to use particular beauty products for face. These kind of opinions need to be ignored. In conclusion, I agree that we need to listen to the opinions, which seems to be good for us, not all the opinions given by famous people. Thus, listening to the opinions will give us a good thoughts and ideas.

Hi, Please correct my version of essay. U are welcome with any comments and I want to know where my essay stands.:) #27 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. I strongly agree to the above statement that " People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing." According to me, following complex rule is not enjoyable but by following them, it proves to be beneficial in future. Circumstances also play a major role in doing thing that are not enjoyable. Mostly, many of us don't like to do things that are good for us. For example, children will never like to go to school in their childhood, but going to school would help them to build their career in future. They don't like to take medicine because it tastes bitter. That doesn’t mean that it is bad for them. In contrast, it is good for them to take medicine and it would cure their diseases. Generally, many people don't like to follow or obey rules and regulations. For example, everyone feels hard to follow regulations at school like morning schedules, cooperating with other student, which involves to following other students and sharing thoughts and projects, eating or order the same food and so on. On the other hand, people don't enjoy hard work. For example, I would enjoy giving party, but before giving party I need to do certain things that I don't enjoy cleaning house, decorating house for the party. But, I would enjoy being with friends and spending time with them. As a result, it keeps balance between pleasant and unpleasant, which is the best part of the life. Last but not least, sometimes circumstances also play a major role in doing thing that are not enjoyable. For example, due to high unemployment rate in our country, many qualified people would accept the job that they don't enjoy because they need to earn their lively hood. In conclusion, based on the reasons such as circumstances and following rule for our own benefit. I strongly agree that people should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing and I believe in hard work is key to success to achieve goals in life.

Please correct my mistakes and let me know what improve do i need to do. Your welcome with any kind of comments.:) Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay. Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. But I prefer to learn with a teacher because studying with teacher, we get good guidance like what to study and how to study, our doubts will be cleared and there is possibility of more information on the subject. Firstly, teacher is a person who guides in proper direction. He/she is professional in the filed of teaching with great knowledge and he is efficiently equipped with the methods to teach and make understood by the students in an easy way. For example, if few people are left in a jungle without a tourist guide. They may reach village or town. But they have to come across big ditches and animals on the way to village. On other the hand, if they are accompanied with tourist guide they will reach village or town safely and with much ease. Secondly, our queries will cleared then and there. We need not toil in search of answers to our queries or hang around with the question. For example, in a class, when teacher is teaching to his/her students. Students can ask question about the subject and get answers to their questions. Teacher will not ignore the questions about the subject and processed with the lecture. Therefore, all our doubts will be cleared at the end of the class. Last but not least, we get more information when we study with teacher because teachers study on the subject and try to get more information on the subject and give same to the students, many other students will arise their queries and sometimes there will be a discussion in the class. In conclusion, based on the reasons presented above, I firmly prefer that it is always better to have a teacher. It not only makes our lives easy but also helps us to understand and co-operate with other students.

Please evaluate my eassy. you are welcome with any comments.:) # 10 “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” I disagree with the above statement. Even though it’s a known fact that success comes through hard work, but luck has its role to play. Success is the end product of long- term effort or struggle to reach our final goal accompanied with luck. In my view, hard work plays a major role to succeed. But still luck has its place. For example, getting a job. My friend got a job in a multi-national company. When he went for an interview, he was supposed to be interviewed by 4 people at the company. Because of some problem he was interviewed by only one person. He got selected for the position in spite of not doing well in the interview and being late to the interview. To be successful, hark work should be accompanied by intelligence, and of course luck. We can take an example of business. Business is profitable for some people and for some it proves to be loss in spite their effort. For example, my friend established a cafe shop, the business was in loss. Even though the shop was in good location. He provided good customer service and good deals with the menu and he opened the shop for 24 hours. "I believe truly in luck". Some people have good luck to succeed and reach goals. For example, one of my friend got the green card with in two years. That was a suprise to all green card applicants. Normally, green card processing takes at least three to four years. Another reason to say luck plays its own role. If student gets sick at the time of final exams. Generally, students put their effort in doing assignments, projects and so on, to get good score. For example, my friend was intelligent and high ranker in the school. When we had our final exam. She was sick and was not able to attend the exam. In conclusion, with the above reasons, I strongly support that luck has its role to play to reach our goal smoothly. Besides without hard work, one can be successful and there is no substitute for hard work.

hi, i am again confused with AFFECT and Effect. Can u please tell me the difference. thanks

HI, Please comment on my eassy. Your welcome with any comments. :cool: #154: In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to support your position. In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. In my view point, I think it is a good rule because its not good for the health, passive smokers will be effected with second hand diseases and it is not professional to smoke in office buildings. "Smoking is injurious to health", we see this statement on newspapers, TV channels, subways and buses. We also listen on radio. Smoking causes serious health problems such as lung cancer, throat cancer, heart diseases, and so on. People who do not smoke are also affected by these diseases because of inhaling the smoke of cigar or cigarette. For example, if my roommate smokes everyday, I will be inhaling the dangerous smoke, which will affect my health. If I continue passive smoking, I will end up with some disease. Passive smoking is more dangerous than smoking because the person is indirectly smoking the nicotine, which is not good for health this may not lead to throat cancer but this will lead to other diseases like heart disease or lung cancers. For example, my friend suffered from lung disease. All the time, he was around the friend who smoked, he was one to get effected first with smoking disease. Smoking in office vicinity is not professional. Even though, it is considered from ages that smoking is the way of social gathering for male pupil. But still smoking will pollute the air around the building and that will irritate the people who are allergic to smoking smell. In conclusion, considering the above reasons, It is a good idea to not to allow smoking in many public places and office buildings that would help people who do not smoke and we can find fresh air in public places.

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Hi, Can u please comment on my essay and let me know on which my essay stands. :) Any comments are welcome. :) Topic 9 : Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. I prefer to live in small town because there will be no pollution, cost of living is less and it is healthier and peaceful. Firstly, in big cities there will be pollution from automobiles, factories, loud sounds from automobiles and crowd. Where in small town there will be less pollution and more fresh air. Which is healthier and peaceful. Since it is healthy people in small town can live longer and healthier. Secondly, in small towns cost of living is less expensive. For example, the cost of renting an apartment is less than renting an apartment in big cities. Even restaurants are less expensive in small town. For example, if I want to have dinner every weekend with my family. It would be expensive in big cities and going to restaurant for every weekend is not possible. Thirdly, there will no traffic jams in small towns. Especially at office and school hours. For example in big cities there will be bumper-to-bumper traffic at office hours and school hours were traffic moves very slow. Fourthly, there will be fewer fashions in small town. Whereas in big cities, people will be fashionable. For example, if people around me are fashionable, even I need to buy fashionable clothes and be up to date with fashions. So, I need to spend more amount of money. If I am in small town I need not be buy fashionable clothes which are expensive. In conclusion, according to the above reasons, I would prefer living in small towns then in big cities. Where I can get fresh air and be healthy. It would be wonderful to live without noise and automobile pollution.

Hi An Min, :) Thanks for suggesting me. I think i need to add the statment u suggested. I hope will do well in TOEFL. :o

Hi, all. Please give me some comments. Any kind of comment is welcomed. And please suggest me on my grammar. :) #104: It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer. In our society the development took place with the contributions of artists and scientists. Today our modern world thanks to the inventions and discovery made by scientists, without the technology we can imagine our modern life. So, I think scientific contribution is more valuable. Scientific inventions and discoveries have made our lives much easier. They also contributed to our life style. Today everyone make use of phones, cell phones, microwaves, computers etc, in their daily lives. For example, cell phones and phones are used to get connected from one place to anywhere in the world. Even computers are used in most places like offices, shopping centers etc. At the same time, scientific discoveries also plays and important role in our modern society. For example, discovery of penicillin and other antibiotics help us to survive from diseases. Discovery of DNA and other cells in human body also improved in avoiding diseases and human life. Now people are enjoying long life. Science had become so advanced that they can produce test tube babies and even cloning is made possible. On the other hand, artist’s contributed beautiful architectures, which is not possible for modern world to build such castles and artistic buildings. Artists contributed to our tourism that in turn will improve countries economy. For example, many people come from other countries to see great castles. When tourists go around the places, the income will be contributed to countries economy. Therefore, for reasons illustrated above I think scientific inventions are more valuable contributions my society has it improved survival rate and the quality of life. While, artisitis had contributed to society architecture and spiritually of life.

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hi, :D I didn’t know whether to write separate conclusion or not. The conclusion was too short. So thought of adding it to the para . Please suggest on my conclusion. I mean what all modification do i need to do. thanks:)

hi, please comment on my easy. :) What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. In my opinion, penicillin is the most beneficial discovery made in last 100 years. Even today doctors are using penicillin as antibiotic medicine to their patients. Alexander Flemming discovered penicillin in 1928. At that time importance of Alexander Flemming’s discovery was not known not until 1940. Penicillin is derived from the penicillium mold that acts as antibiotic agent. Antibiotics are natural substances that are released by bacteria and fungi into the earth. Flemming discovered penicillin proving that medicine can kill certain types of disease causing bacteria inside the body. Today in our country most doctors use penicillin as antibiotic to their patients. In general, this medicine is also used in whole world. For example, when people go to doctor with high fever. At first doctor would give penicillin to cure fever. Penicillin has proved to be good medicine, unless they are allergic to it. Later, taking penicillin as example many antibiotics had come and many researches have been conducted to find the compound that kills the bacteria that cause the disease. for example, sulphate is also used as antibiotic for certain type of diseases. In conclusion, penicillin was the best discovery made in last 100 years.

Please comment my essay. :) :):shy: What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important. Some important qualities of a good supervisor(boss) are responsibility, discipline, organisation skills and good understanding capabilities. Responsibility is the important quality that supervisor should possess because he will be responsible for many important things such as arranging meeting, status of the work done by the workers, due date of the projects to be completed. Generally, supervisor will be in charge for the projects. They are the people who will report to the head office about the project status, they are the first people to get all the instruction about the project specifications and designs. Supervisor is the one who will distribute the project among the workers. Discipline is also important quality because it will help supervisor to attain goals on time. It will also help him to maintain discipline among the employees working under him. At the same time, Organisations skills are also important. One needs to get organised to attain goals in time. For example, if supervisor organises a schedule about how and when to do the project and follow the schedule with discipline he can attain the goal on time. Supervisor should also have the quality of understanding and listening his workers. Without this ability supervisor cannot survive for long period in good companies. For example, in our office supervisor will help his employees to understand the project and also help them at time of difficult situations. Last but not least, supervisor should also have leadership qualities like selflessness, good communication skills. Otherwise employees will not listen to him. For example, through good communication skills supervisor can convey or explain properly about the project and can give maximum information about the project. He can also clear employees doubts about the project. In conclusion, responsibility, discipline, organisation skills, leadership and good understanding capabilities are important to be a supervisor. All these are important to attain successful company. I HOPE I WILL NOT GET MANY GRAMMER MISTAKES. [heartbeat] PLEASE KET ME KNOW MY GRAMMER MISTAKES AND CORRECT ME :D THANKS :):cool::)

Please comment on my version . [dance] #145: Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. In my viewpoint, advertisements tell us about new products available in the market. Advertising is a concept of introducing new products and encourages people to buy better quality products. Advertising brings competition among the sellers and satisfies buyer’s expectation with less price and good quality products. People will hear and watch different types of advertisements through media like TV, radio, computers etc, by which they come know about new products and decided whether to buy that product or not. For example, when I want to buy a car, I would watch all the advertisements on cars and know newest information about the car models and then decided what type of a car would best suits me. If there are no advertisements then people will not know about the new models in the product. They end up with buying old models. For example, now there are many models in cell phones like the cell with PDA feature, cell with photo pictures where I can show my picture while talk to other person. If I don't know the latest model in cell phones then I will end up buying regular old model. Advertising gives a chance to analyze the quality of different brand products. It’s like " best quality for less price". For example, in some advertisements they compare their products with other products. Stating that their product is less in price and good in quality. Some times we can rely on such ads and can get good quality products for less price like laundry detergent, cleaning products etc. In conclusion, Advertisements help people to make decision about the product and also give latest model information and a chance to compare different product brands. We can also know about the latest fashions in city.:)

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Hi, Can please correct and evaluate this essay. Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. Some people prefer to work for a small company. Others prefer to work for a large company. I prefer to work for a small company because working for a small company I can learn about how the company works and also learn many other tasks in the company. Even though, large companies have good benefit packages for their employee's. The employee's don't have much scope to learn all the work in the company. They will be doing the work that is assigned to them, but working for a small company the employee’s will be exposed to many other work apart from the assigned work. There will be an efficient communication system in a small company. Generally, small companies have small working teams, in which there will be no communication gap. All the team members will be well informed about the assignment. This will make an individual learn more about the co-workers and work with co-operation. In the small companies, the promotions are easy to earn because the work u do will be recognized. This can enhance the working ability and also help to switch with good companies in future. Last but not least, working with small companies brings satisfaction. There will be no big politics played in the company. Which is a healthy environment. Therefore I would like to work with the small company. [tm]

hi, Can please correct and evaluate the level of this eassy? :) You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice. If I have enough money to buy a house or a business. I would prefer business on house, because business is challenging, I can obtain profits, and I can be my own boss. Buying a house is also good idea. But there will be a gradual increase in the property value and some times selling house will not be bring great profits. Even though, we may face loss or break-even at first in business. Later in long run, we can gain profits. Sometimes, we can gain great profits depending on how good business is running. For example, one of my friend started with a small business like a coffee place. Later, when he attain profits. The coffee place was changed into restaurant. If business is running at loss, there is always a chance of selling at profit. Business give an opportunity to learn how to manage, market the products and also how to do accounting. It is also challenging and we can be our own boss. There will be no one to tell us to do this or that. For example, owner of the coffee shop will take care to promote his product and also takes care of service provided to customers. He need to take care of the accounts and also manage finance. In short, It is also challenging, profitable, and owning a business of myself is good for me. It can give me different experiences in my career, opportunity to achieve my career goal and personal dream. Therefore, I would rather have such an opportunity than only have a new house

Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. "Human beings are social animal". In my opinion, two reasons are accountable to live in groups or organizations, the human nature and human development of society. In past, people used to live in groups in order to be safe from predators. That’s how formation of tribes came into being. For example, in primitive ages, human didn't know what to do when they were attacked by their predators or from natural disaster like floods and forest fires. They realized that being separate is miserable and slowly groups took place. As time goes on, from primitive to modern society, society has been classified into many aspects like political attitudes, languages, religions, careers etc,. People have found their position in the society and they can give their opinions and Governments are formed on the vote of the people, which mean it is the opinion of the people. Even there are some organizations like Red Cross and UNICF. Which would extend there helping hand to the poor sick people, at the time of war and at starvation of the people. In short, it is important for people to live in groups and organizations that is how the development of society takes place.

You need to travel from your home to a place 40 miles (64 kilometers) away. Compare the different kinds of transportation you could use. Tell which method of travel you would choose. Give specific reasons for your choice. If need to travel 40 miles away from my home. I can take different kinds of transportation like bus, subway, taxi or my car/vehicle. Taking subway is more comfortable because it is quick and I will not get tried driving and it’s less expansive. It is best to take subway as it saves my time and money. Even, if I take my vehicle like car, I need to drive on highway. Where I need to stop at stop signs. There will be traffic on highways, which may cause waste of time. On other hand, I need to concentrate on driving. which is tiresome by the time I reach particular place, I will be tried. By taking bus service, it takes long time because of the signals on the road and I need to change number of buses. Even though I don't drive or get tried, by the time I get to the actual location. I will not have any patience to do things. In conclusion, I would prefer traveling in subway, which is cheap and faster to travel. Taking a taxi is expensive fair. By not taking my vehicle, I need not concentrate on driving, get tried or loss my tolerance by changing number of buses, which is slow because of, signals on the highway.