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In general, people are living stronger now.Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
Living longer! who don’t want to live for a long time.I think everyone would like to have a longer life span.But,this was not possible in earlier days.Thanks to new technologies,education and the medicines that have made impossible things possible.Thus,my paragraph contains the demonstration of these points.
I believe that precaution is better than cure.To know how and what to take precaution a proper education is needed.The education has created health awareness in the people.People are taking steps to stay healthy.For example,A study show that eating lot of oily food leads to heart disease.So people have made less consumption of oily food.Therefore,education has made people to think what is good and bad for the health.
In addition,technology is playing an important role in the longer span of people.The hospitals are using new technologies like scanning machine,etc to diagnose and treat a patient.These technologies are easy to operate ,and patient experience less pain.These technologies provide effective results.Hence,the invention of new technologies helped doctors to know the disease and cure it before it became serious.
Further,study of medicine is increasing all over the world.There are more number of people becoming researchers and doctors.Thus,there are medicines for every disease, and doctors provide good treatment for these diseases.However,for some disease there is no proper medicine to cure,and I hope researchers will be able to find it.Therefore, people live longer because they are treated early when they have any disease.
Finally,people can live long when they are given proper knowledge about the health and even new technologies and medicines are saving lives of people.Thus,people are living for longer age than the earlier people.