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I think it is well-organized essay with strong supporting arguments. I wish I could right like this. The following is a sample essay written by myself. Feel free to send me your comments and revision which is very useful for me. Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. Some people might say that students should not waste their time pursuing fields of study in which they cannot succeed, instead they should focus in a specific field of study in which they can succeed. However, the close examination of the issue reveals that teachers at schools and universities should not discourage student from learning. No one, even teachers at schools and universities cannot say that who is likely to succeed in which field and who is unlikely to succeed in which field, because success is a result of hardwork and traineeship. If they discourage students from doing the things they are interested in, it will lead students to lose their confidence and motivation. There is a saying that a success is a combination of 1 per cent talent and 99 per cent hard work. No one, even teachers at schools and universities could tell that one student can succeed in that field. At school, a student might have been performed worse than their classmates. However, who knows if that children can succeed in real life pursuing the same field of study. There are a lot of successful stories that someone who were bad at maths at school became a good accountant. In contrast, someone who had an inherent talent at doing something failed in later life. If a child can sing very well, it does not mean he or she have to be a singer. If a child cannot speak clearly, it does not mean that he or she cannot become a lector. Furthermore, educational institutions, such as schools and universities are a place where students can learn. They should not discriminate their students depending on their ability and skills. They should grant their students the same treatment and provide an equal opportunities to their students. If student wants to pursue a field of study in which he or she is not good at, there should be a chance for him or her to do that. Life is not just a success, it is a satisfaction. If people satisfy doing what they want without any remarkable achievement, that is a real success. If teachers discourage them to follow their interest, it will lead students to lose their confidence and motivation. At that time, teachers would not know that he or she killed the future president. In conclusion, students should not be discouraged from learning due to their lack of ability and talent. Educational institutions should provide an equal opportunity to their students to pursue all the fields of study. Life is rich, anything could happen. Just let the students to learn.

Hi, guys, Please find my draft essay below. It would be much appreciated if you could send me your comments on it. A statement: To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. A Society can be determined by its people, their way of life, culture, language, history, politics, and economy and so on as a whole. The more you get to know such basic elements of a society, the better you can understand a society. In fact, an exploration of a society is a time-consuming and life-long learning process for expatriates and visitors. Nowadays, people tend to be busier day by day so that studying its big cities could be a best and efficient way to understand a society, since a metropolis is (i) a place where political, cultural and commercial centres are located; (ii) a place where national identities are placed for tourism; and (iii) a place where representatives from almost every parts of a society are gathered together. The big cities can allow you take an overall glance of must-know items of a society. First and foremost, a metropolis is a place where political, cultural and commercial centres are located. As we know, the government, parliament, and ministries of any country are normally located in its capital cities. Besides, main concert halls, opera house, theatre, museums and other cultural centres are located in the big cities where they can reach to many people at once. Similarly, there are big shopping centres where items with traditional elements are sold in the populous cities which are a big market for businessmen. In this context, the big cities can allow you to visit all these places and understand a society better. The important thing you should know about a society is its national identities, including national heros, traditional masterpieces, national animals and so on. The capital city is the right a place where you can find about knowledge and information about those things. Generally speaking, the countries tend to build a monuments of its national heros, run a museum holding its masterpieces and unique things, and a zoo showing off its national animals and animals in danger of disappearing. For instance, if you go to France, you must visit a museum of Louvre in Paris to see a Mona Lisa which is an symbol of Paris and the palace of Versailles where you can find out the lifestyles of the kings who ruled France in the past. Last but not least, you can meet different kind of people from all around a country and experience its culture. People and their way of life is an essential part of a society. People are a reflection of their society. You would never have been to out of the capital city of a country, however, you would have seen a person from the countryside which helps you to learn their way of life and language dialect in that part of a society. Some people might argue that there are other important sources to learn about a society, however studying its big cities are the most efficient way as explained above. Visiting its big cities can help you to grab the most important features of a society in a timely and efficiently manner. You can learn its politics taking a tour to its Government building; its culture and history visiting the museums; and its people and language interacting with inhabitants from all around a country.

My name is Nergui. I`m from Mongolia, preparing for the GRE test, hopefully in September this year. I found this site very useful and would love to share my draft essays for your valuable comments. Wish you all a great success.