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Hi friends I have just got my offcial score. I got 5.5 in the essay and the total score is 250. Thanks for your helps so far on my practice essay.

Conglatulations!

You are very helpful. Thanks very much. Best wishes for you, alaa

Formula = ((listening+(structure+essay*3)+reading)/3)*10 If the formular likes this, I must get 4 in essay to reach 237. Someone can help me? Thanks!

I am the one who must thank to Alaa :D So, thanks u very much for your calculation. To bruno: not good as your score. However, I am satisfying :) I am glad if you tell us about your plan. To awig: Iam Seattle, WA now. So, hope we can keep contact since cell phone call in US is free after 8pm and weekend;) To Ish:cause your avatar look very mysterious, I wonder... u male or girl ( U do not have to answer because that kind of question is illegal in US ;) )

I would like to know essay score I need to get 237. Thanks.

Thanks swatikaran, Obelixous, Chiris, Awig. SMART COMMENT FOR SMART POINT WRITTEN BY SMART PEOPLE...:D (absolutely, completely, extremely :D ) So, here is my thoughts: Listening: Short and long conversations are easy and I think U do not have to practise much on this section. 1 of 3 lectures is really difficult and I possible lost points here. Grammar: easier than PP Reading: it is longer than practice tests I used to prepare. However, I have 21 minutes to revise my answers. I may lose 1 point in the last question since I do not click confirm button while I want to come back previous questions to revise I have a question that if i lost that point when I only blacken the oval without confirmation. Essay: about hard work and luck. Agree or disagree. I think the most importance is concentration. One more, please give back my nickname Red_heat, my friends! Awig, I am happy to know you got Visa. Where are u going to study and what is your plan?

I have just finished the test today. Listening: 23 :tup: Grammar: 12-29 :D Reading: 24:grad: Range: ... 253 ( I don't remember the minimum score in my range) I am really happy with this range because that is what I hope before the test. I do the essay not so good. I need 237. Anyway, If I get somewhat like 234 or 235, can I still have change to apply successful for my university. Some hours after the test is not late to thank to my friends, isn't it? Thanks to all my friend helping me in all the time I prepared for the test, especially to: Ish: I like your new avatar (Avril, right?). Hope you continue your great help for other friends in forum. Awig: you have smart comments. I like your word " jackpot" U use Louislin ( hope u will have a great score) Bruno ( U did have great great score;) ) And Erin with very nice web. I did overcome my limited ability though it is not really a good range, so I.... :tup:

That is great range, Bruno. Conglatulations!

In my opinion, u had the best easay so far, Louis. It is very valid and convincing while your grammar and structure are considerably improved. Adding very nice Awig's correction, I think you could get a good result in essay.

I myself are fighting for 237 Toefl. My YM: nguyenhuyquan. Waiting for your next essay, dcychanh.

Hi, dcychanhk. Actually, I do not have enough time to double check the essay. The same cause that I did a short conclusion. I am from VietNam. I need 237 to apply for Seattle university. Thanks for your detail correction.

You should work on grammar and work usage. A few grammar structure is repeated through your essay and it is not much convincing.

May you correct the grammar mistakes and any other comments to improve? Also, I have not seen your new essays recently, manwiththemission2005?

Some people think governments should decide which classes should be taught in high school. Others think that business and industry should decide the curriculum. Still others think that parents should decide what should be taught. What is your position? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. That government decides which classes should be taught in high school is the dominant modern today. However, a lot of opinions opt for other decisions which made by business and industry or children's parents. Each choice has its own advantages directly affecting school youngsters. Because student are trained in the purpose of serving for business and industry, the idea that lets the industry to choose the curriculum is strongly advocated by many people. It is the people who work in the specific industry know the requirement they need from a educated student. This idea seem enormously practical and can play a important role in improving the working effectiveness of graduated school because of the feasible prevention of student from unnecessary subjects taught in high school but useless in workplace. However, the tendency to educate student some needed subjects and neglect others may not develop them perfectly. The opinion to get the parents' advice in curriculum decision in high school has many benefits but including drawbacks. It can not be denied that parents are the ones who clearly comprehend the strength and delibition of their children's ability so that they can make suitable decision to effectively enhance children's knowledge. However, due to that restricted background in general education, they may make mistakes leading to adverse way to educate high school. For example, they find their children's talented ability in music, and they decide to choose unbalanced curriculum that is only focus on music. It not only badly affects their children's natural development but also other pupil's as well. After cautiously considering the advantages of each choice, I strongly support the decision made by government. They may have the best decision according to the good overview on country's education and possible development trends. To decide the classes that will be taught in high school is the extremely important issue. Hence, this decision should be considered and chosen by government, the highest authority of the country. Completed in 30 mintues.

Bruno, I would like your respond to my corrections.

Very good comments. Thanks bruno and hope for your correction in my next essays.

ou have just received money which would enable you to travel for one year or to buy a house. Which would you choose to do? Give specific reasons to explain your choice. Everybody would hesitate to choose whether to travel for one year or to buy a house because of their enormous given benefits. People can completely enjoy life with full of relaxation, energy and fantastic mood after such a wonderful trip. However, with a wise and thoughtful consideration for long term plans, many, myself included, would rather the later choice. The first trouble posed is that how you handle your life in such a long trip lasting one year because your work, ordinary life and daily activities will be adversely affected. But the significant present may become beneficial as a heritage or a valuable thing that you can reverse for your lifetime and many next generations. It really changes and boosts your life standard! Would you agree to move to a bigger, more modern house and live there for your whole life or remain living in your small and lack of basic facilities after an exhausting trip in one year? It can not be denied that you can gain a lot of knowledge about numerous cultures of different regions all over the world, and you family will have the most wonderful trip ever, but certainly it does not directly influence your life. In fact, you will have more choice to improve your current life standard with a new house. For example, you are able to move to the new house and enjoy a life with sufficient facilities effectively serving for your work, or you can sell it to get a huge amount of money and invest on long term business and your family life's expense. Therefore, your children can afford the best school requiring a considerable tuition. Your family does not have to argue and conflict as a result of money shortage. Few people would choose a wonderful life but short instead of a long living with full of stability. Therefore, a house is more appealing to me because of its distribution of brighter future.

nice essay, Louislin. But your third reason is not very persuasive. That seems a rare conflict of only children, today. I have not witnessed or heard of such kind of conflict leading to so called " diaster" in family.

Yout essay seem an answer to " discuss the advantage and disadvantage of internet. so, you should support the only good side of internet.

I really like your supporting views, your flexible format, and your word choice!

Yes, I should have done that way. Thank your question!

Actually, I think this is a poor one while i can not develop my idea well partially because I did it in a actual time. Most people agree that society benefits from the work of its members. Compare the contributions of doctors to society with the contributions of teachers. Which type of contribution do you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer. Doctor and teacher both are highly-appreciated jobs in many societies because of their direct influence on human physical and mental aspects. However, in my society, the employment as doctor career that requires a relatively considerable time in training, huge investments and skills are often more valued. Firstly, doctor is the field that needs careful training before initiating the practical work. A student to get a bachelor degree in pharmacy has to spend at least 6 years in university before additional ample time to practice in hospital. Because long-time training associated with a large amount of money expense, a doctor, especially skillful and experienced ones earn a higher salary than other job. Hence, they often easily gain success and appreciation in the society rather than teacher. Secondly, the government and local authorities tend to offer more care in this field by spending an enormous proportion on the budget. It is no doubtful that modern people highly realize the importance of health; as a result, doctors are always valued because the intense need of their contribution to the whole society. For example, in my society, doctor, especially private doctor, is regarded as a member of every family because every people need them whenever they get troubles refers to heath. This makes the difference to teachers because school is merely considered as a kind of services, in which, people pay more money to get the best caliber without a necessary close relationship. To conclude, It is the direct and crucial effect of doctor on a majority of people that makes doctor valued in my society.

Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Actually, I do not like the topic because everything can not be said to be always good or bad, even progress. The discovery of nucleus offers modern people with its huge potential like the immense source of electricity and its contribution to the progress in scientific fields. But millions of people were killed in World War 2 due to the advent of atomic bomb based on the nucleus theory. It is also the big threat for human future while such countries as American and Russia own a number of this lethal weapon. Should this progress be considered good? In similarity, the invention of transportation vehicles enables people to rapidly travel one place to another instead of walking in long hours. People satisfy with the good side, but what about the pollution, environment damage, and traffic jam this progress offers to human. The change to democratic politics of many countries is supposed to be a turning point in their history because everyone has same rights to do what they want. But it also enlarges the rich-poor gap. While many people do not know what to use their money for, hundred people are dying of starvation. Also, the progress in work and study is often strongly acclaimed. A pupil get a much better score than the previous exam but it is the progress that may make him over proud, and neglect in his study, as a consequence because he might think he can get better in study whenever he wants. Similarly, an employee gets a promotion but he would spend less time for family and relaxation due the work load of new position. These examples are to say that everything has two sides, good and bad. Hence, we can not allege that “progress is always good”.

Thanks Awig and LousinLin.I will try a better one.