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Hi, would appreciate if someone could review and give me feedback on my GRE issue essay!! :) The prompt: Claim: Restaurants should be required to display nutritional information about the food they serve. Reason: This knowledge will help diners make healthy choices and reduce their risk of diet-related health problems. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based. The Essay: As diet-related health issues continues to grow and diversify, it becomes increasingly critical for people to have knowledge of the nutritional contents in the food they eat. Places like grocery stores solve this problem by placing nutritional labels on practically all their products, but restaurants have yet to adopt the same concept. As a customer of a restaurant, besides a brief description of a dish on the menu, one would have no knowledge of what goes into making their meal. This becomes especially imperative in cases of allergies or other dietary restrictions such as vegetarianism or veganism. Additionally, the increasing prevalence of obesity and its diet-related health issues makes it crucial for people to have the information that they can use to make healthier choices. For these reasons, it should be a requirement of restaurants to display the nutritional information of all foods that they serve or have this information ready upon request. Food allergies are becoming increasingly popular and can often be life-threatening. Although most people are aware of the foods they’re allergic too, a common reason why people still suffer from allergy attacks, is because they are not aware that the allergen is present in the food they eat. Waiters and waitresses are required to inquire about any food allergies amongst their customers, however this information isn’t always passed along to the chef or they might not fully be aware of the presence of that food in every dish. These errors can often lead to life-threatening trips to the hospital and can be avoided by simply adding nutritional labels to the menu. These types of errors amongst restaurant staff is also critical in the case of other dietary restrictions such as vegetarianism and veganism. More people are starting to adopt lifestyle choices that restrict their diets in very different ways. Restaurant staff might not always be aware of all the different customizes someone might make to their diet. Personally, I have had an experience at a restaurant in which after telling the waiter I was vegan, I received food containing cheese because the waiter didn’t know that being vegan meant I couldn’t eat cheese. However, nutritional information doesn’t just contain the contents of the food we eat, but also the calorific count. We currently live in a society that has the highest obesity rates that we have ever seen. This leads to all sorts of diet-related health issues such as the infamous diabetes, high cholesterol, high blood pressure, etc. In order to combat this growing concern, people need to be given the information that will help them make healthier dietary choices. Although it might seem obvious what foods people should be eating or avoiding, even ordering a salad can be deceivingly unhealthy, containing an upwards of 1000 calories; approximately half one’s recommended daily intake. Often, restaurants add fattening products to their “healthier choices” to make them taste better sometimes making them unhealthier than the desserts. By providing the calorific information of each restaurant dish, customers will be able to make well-informed choices without the deception. One might present the argument that by providing the nutritional information of foods with high calorific contents, restaurants could be driving away their customers and thus reducing their income. Although this might be true, this isn’t necessarily a bad thing; as it might even encourage restaurants alter their dishes to become healthier and less calorific. Restaurants like “B. Good” and “Sweet green” even profit off the concept of publicizing the nutritional content of their food and marketing it as a healthy alternative. Additionally, the transparency creates more of a trusting relationship between the customer and the restaurant, causing customers to feel more comfortable knowing exactly what is in their food. Requiring restaurants to display the nutritional information of their food would benefit both the customer and the restaurant itself. It allows customers to have knowledge of the exact contents of their meals, which is critical in cases of food allergies and diverse dietary restrictions. It also allows them to make smarter, well-informed choices that will improve their overall heath and help reduce the risk of diet-related health issues. Restaurants can even benefit from the growing popularity of healthy food, and the increasing trust of their customers. Overall, these benefits are vast and make a convincing case to adopt this requirement in restaurants all over the nation.

Hi I would really appreciate if someone could grade my GRE Issue Essay!! :))) The prompt is: Claim: Restaurants should be required to display nutritional information about the food they serve. Reason: This knowledge will help diners make healthy choices and reduce their risk of diet-related health problems. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which the claim is based. My essay: As diet-related health issues continues to grow and diversify, it becomes increasingly critical for people to have knowledge of the nutritional contents in the food they eat. Places like grocery stores solve this problem by placing nutritional labels on practically all their products, but restaurants have yet to adopt the same concept. As a customer of a restaurant, besides a brief description of a dish on the menu, one would have no knowledge of what goes into making their meal. This becomes especially imperative in cases of allergies or other dietary restrictions such as vegetarianism or veganism. Additionally, the increasing prevalence of obesity and its diet-related health issues makes it crucial for people to have the information that they can use to make healthier choices. For these reasons, it should be a requirement of restaurants to display the nutritional information of all foods that they serve or have this information ready upon request. Food allergies are becoming increasingly popular and can often be life-threatening. Although most people are aware of the foods they’re allergic too, a common reason why people still suffer from allergy attacks, is because they are not aware that the allergen is present in the food they eat. Waiters and waitresses are required to inquire about any food allergies amongst their customers, however this information isn’t always passed along to the chef or they might not fully be aware of the presence of that food in every dish. These errors can often lead to life-threatening trips to the hospital and can be avoided by simply adding nutritional labels to the menu. These types of errors amongst restaurant staff is also critical in the case of other dietary restrictions such as vegetarianism and veganism. More people are starting to adopt lifestyle choices that restrict their diets in very different ways. Restaurant staff might not always be aware of all the different customizes someone might make to their diet. Personally, I have had an experience at a restaurant in which after telling the waiter I was vegan, I received food containing cheese because the waiter didn’t know that being vegan meant I couldn’t eat cheese. However, nutritional information doesn’t just contain the contents of the food we eat, but also the calorific count. We currently live in a society that has the highest obesity rates that we have ever seen. This leads to all sorts of diet-related health issues such as the infamous diabetes, high cholesterol, high blood pressure, etc. In order to combat this growing concern, people need to be given the information that will help them make healthier dietary choices. Although it might seem obvious what foods people should be eating or avoiding, even ordering a salad can be deceivingly unhealthy, containing an upwards of 1000 calories; approximately half one’s recommended daily intake. Often, restaurants add fattening products to their “healthier choices” to make them taste better sometimes making them unhealthier than the desserts. By providing the calorific information of each restaurant dish, customers will be able to make well-informed choices without the deception. One might present the argument that by providing the nutritional information of foods with high calorific contents, restaurants could be driving away their customers and thus reducing their income. Although this might be true, this isn’t necessarily a bad thing; as it might even encourage restaurants alter their dishes to become healthier and less calorific. Restaurants like “B. Good” and “Sweet green” even profit off the concept of publicizing the nutritional content of their food and marketing it as a healthy alternative. Additionally, the transparency creates more of a trusting relationship between the customer and the restaurant, causing customers to feel more comfortable knowing exactly what is in their food. Requiring restaurants to display the nutritional information of their food would benefit both the customer and the restaurant itself. It allows customers to have knowledge of the exact contents of their meals, which is critical in cases of food allergies and diverse dietary restrictions. It also allows them to make smarter, well-informed choices that will improve their overall heath and help reduce the risk of diet-related health issues. Restaurants can even benefit from the growing popularity of healthy food, and the increasing trust of their customers. Overall, these benefits are vast and make a convincing case to adopt this requirement in restaurants all over the nation.

Hello, Could you please take a look at the following argument of mine. I will be much obliged if you state you opinion on it. If you're also preparing for the GRE and have some essays unchecked, feel free to provide a link to your essay, which I'll be glad to comment on in return. Argument: The following is a memorandum written by the director of personnel to the president of the Cedar Corporation. "It would be a mistake to rehire the Good-Taste Company to supply the food in our employee cafeteria next year. It is the second most expensive caterer in the city. In addition, its prices have risen in each of the last three years, and it refuses to provide meals for people on special diets. Just last month three employees complained to me that they no longer eat in the cafeteria because they find the experience 'unbearable.' Our company should instead hire Discount Foods. Discount is a family-owned local company and it offers a varied menu of fish and poultry. I recently tasted a sample lunch at one of the many companies that Discount serves and it was delicious — an indication that hiring Discount will lead to improved employee satisfaction." Analysis: The presented argument's general claim is that the Good-Taste Company is a bad food supplier and that next year it would be better to hire the Discount Foods as a food supplier for the network of cafeterias. The argument contains two groups of statements that should support both parts of this claim. However, these statements do not support the sub-claims well enough, which makes the overall argument inconclusive. First, the writer claims that the Good-Taste Company should not be rehired. The first statement in favor of this decision is that The Good-Taste Company is the second most expensive supplier in the city. However, it has not been said who occupies the first place; maybe it is the Discount Foods. Also, other supplier with low prices may be located in other cities or even abroad. In addition, the fact that for the last three years prices of the Good-Taste grew does not indicate that the final prices are unacceptable. It may be considered only by looking at the final prices. What is more, the growth in prices indicates the growth in demand. In other words, more and more people trust this company. Next, the fact that the Good-Taste refuses to provide food for special diets does not speak in favor or this company. However, it has not been said whether such food is in demand. If there are also a couple of "special" dieters among all cafeteria customers, then the lack of such food would not be such a big problem. Also, it was not indicated why the Good-Food refuses to provide the food for special diets. For instance, if they have such food in stock, but simply do not agree with prices offered by the cafeteria, then this problem may be easily resolved via negotiations. This would be beneficial in the case if the cafeteria has many special diet food consumers. Finally, the fact that for the last three months three employees did not like the food in cafeteria does not indicate that the food supplier is guilty. For instance, the food may be badly-prepared, or it may just have laid too long in the warehouse gotten tainted. In addition, if there were one thousand employees who liked the food for the last three months, then the opinions of the three unsatisfied employees do not have too much weight. Second, the writer proposes the suggestion that the Discount Foods should be hired for the next year. The fact that the Discount is family-owned does not make it any better than its competitors. Also, the fact that it is local make this choice more alluring, but locality of the Discount makes it better only in what concerns location and better only than the supplier located out of city. However, the Good-Taste is also located within the city, so they are equal with the Discount on that account. The fact that the menu of the Discount is rich of fish and poultry is important, however there is not a word of other elements of the Discount's menu, and there is no comparison of this menu and ones of Discount's competitors. It is possible that others provide more rich menus. Finally, the fact that the writer ate once in the place where the food is supplied by the Discount and liked it do not characterizes the Discount significantly. It is only an opinion of a single person, and the tasty food may be ascribed to the merit of cooks but not the food supplier. To conclude, the writer did not support well neither of two claims. Neither the Good-Taste is proven to be an unsatisfactory food supplier, nor the Discount Foods is proven to be the best food supplier for cafeterias for the next year. To strengthen the argument, the detailed comparison of various food supplier should be presented, comparing their prices, locations, menus, food quality, and so forth. ~ FIN ~ Thanks in advance. -- Victor