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x=19 (_ 19 students are taking history), y= 0 (there may be no student taking all three subjects) ---> x+y = 19

I'd love to have one :) :)

The topic asks whether u agree or disagree with the statement: "Good teachers set challenging tasks for their students" but ur fourth paragraph leads the reader to the characteristic of a good teacher, which is too general. My suggestions: 1. challenging tasks help teachers justify/ classify a student 2. challenging tasks make students more creative/ innovatory/ intellectual 3. challenging tasks give students confidence to face with a challenging/ competitive world nowaday. Hope it helps!

good points here. However, you should add a paragraph to give your own opinion. _Which's more beneficial for the society itself: art or science? _In the society where basic needs aren't met, will people need art? _In the past, true science relieved human beings from their hard survival. We had threshing-machines, mowing-machines, dry-cleaners for agriculture. Now we have computers, tape-recorders, beepers, telephone, audiophone for communication... They are all the works of scientists _On the other hand, some palaces or pyramids of art in the past China and Egypt gave a great pleasure but seemed impractical since lots of builders and slavers split their blood and tears over. --> People can only think of and devote for true art when their basic needs are satisfied. If sublime art is the mental sprit of a society, science is its physical body Our society still has many farmers do sweated labors and workers do painstaking jobs ==> science is more desirable and valuable for the present society. We can consecrate and make the most of true art in a more advanced and progressive world

You need to strengthen your arguments. * A listening comprehension can be guidable and repeatable * my suggestions: READING IS MY MOST PREFERABLE CHOICE SINCE: _Reading is the most reliable resources. If I listen, for example, I can cast doubt about whether what I listen is absolutely correct or not. There's an quotidian saying: "Eyesight is better than earshot". Also, before doing things, I need a basic knowledge, which can only be obtained from reading materials. _Reading is an easy way to remember information. It allows me to pause and think everytime I want. I reread and I remember. On the other hand, when I listen, the lessons that the professor provides can fly from one eye to another and get away from my mind immediately. --> People's knowledge first comes from books

*You need to clarify the key points by stating them as the first sentence in each body paragraph _ A close friend should support his friends when they are in difficulty. Money can't be comparable to a true friendship _ We help our friends and life will repay us in the future --> A man should not care about money more than his friends * There are many stories, where a friend sacrifieshis life for the calling of friendship _A friend can share even half of bread, a piece of cloth or a drop of water, let alone an amount of money which he puts aside.

I don't know. I haven't taken Toefl-ibt :D

It's good though you make some basic mistakes. I'll point out and you correct it, o.k? Vocabulary: Grammar: .......etc,

we've finished one topic :)

From game laws, people learn how to conduct their life with full of responsibility. They find out that if they want to reach a goal, they need to follow the rules.

Many parents worry that if their kids waste lots of time playing games, such as video games, card games, board games, and tabletop strategy games, they will easily be addicted and distracted during their studies. .

Thanks, booda. can you put the sentence in blue?. It's easier to follow They can definitely teach us how to lead our life.

Maybe I'll have to play alone. I'm the only one who love games here, aren't I ? :D. The second sentence can be: But game functions can be greater than that.

Good morning, everyone! Today, a writing game comes to my mind. I'll write one sentence related to a topic, then the next one write the next one sentence. Eventually we'll have a total essay aggrandized by our effort. Everyone is welcome to give the next topic when the previous's finished Topic 1: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games can teach us about life Support your oppinion with details and examples. Almost everyone, from kids to adults, loves playing games for fun. Who want to be the next?

Overall, it's a good essay _Vocabulary: *You should just write 'human needs' and 'species needs' * I prefer using 'overtake' to 'overcome' _Grammar: * if you have interest, I’ll share you my essay. But it’s better for you to read some well-written materials in English. I’ll recommend you one sample essay of a literature teacher: http://www.www.urch.com/forums/toefl-members-only/435-essay-erin-029-humans-have-damaged.html * normally I don't use any specific websides to study writing. However, I find this link good for Toefl preparation: TestMagic Test Prep

The writing score can be different because it bases on the topic you write. If you feel it's unfair to your performance (not your ability), ask them to rescore it.

*First, you should think of what people often recycle. They are Aluminum Cans, Steel Cans , Newspaper,Magazines and slick inserts, plastics, glass They should be called 'energy resources' rather than 'natural resources' in your second idea (natural resources include soil, water, air, minerals, flora, fauna and people) * Continuing with your ideas: _school environment would be destroyed. +Recycling reduces pollution from hazardous substances in the form of plastics, glasses.... +cutting recycling can cause water & soil pollution _wast more natural resources like used paper or bottles. +recycling recover used resources from being removed +by cutting recycling, people will have to make new and virgin materials, which is expensive and costly * add some examples:

good job!

No, it isn't In this type of question, you MUST agree or disagree. Follow this link: http://www.www.urch.com/forums/twe/12765-toefl-essay-writing-tips.html

The topic is: Your answer: It's like you tell the marker that the answer is up to you! You should take a side and recast it

_About this essay, you should avoid some slight mistakes: For example: Or: _About the others, I would love to read interesting and inspiring essays. All you need to do is to think that your essay is interesting and it will be.

I'll point out some suggestions if the author is interested in seeing them Agree or disagree: visiting museums is the best way to study about a country. It is undeniable that visiting museums is a fantastic way to know about history, culture of a country since museums exhibit a lot of critical heritages of the country it owns. However, I am not in harmony with the statement that “visiting museums is the best way to study about a country”. This essay will point out the reasons for my stand. In the first place, studying about a country through visiting museums is tightly contingent upon spatial, temporal as well as financial factor that hinder you in your study(ing). When you visit museums, you need to pay a lot of money for your trips, bus tickets, and gas (if you drive a car) or even airplane tickets if you want to explore a foreign country. It also takes a lot of time to go abroad and move(d) from (this) one museum to another (that museum) to learn well about a nation. Moreover, it might make you tired because of moving and dispirit you to study. On the contrary, it would be better if you goa website about a particular country or even all countries the whole country in the world and get informed about them. (It’s difficult to get information about all the countries in the world) à On the contrary, it will be better if you get access into a website to accumulate information about a special tourism place or the whole country. There are a lot of websites that serve profound and genuine facts about history, culture, politic, economy… of many different countries. à Plenty of profound websites about history, culture, politic and economy are now available and easy to access. Going into internet do not require you to go out, pay a lot of money and spend a lot of time. à Surfing the Internet/ It saves your time, money and effort for a travel. You just stay inside and travel over and learn about whatever country you want. à You can take the whole world into your home. Personally, to know about Ethiopia, I will definitely not choose to go the museums of this country. Instead, I will google (???) information about it. In the second place, it would be challenging for you to grasp systematically the information about a country when you visit museums. The museums do not like books that provide knowledge about certain subject from beginning to the end. Instead, they show things spatially and (it) troubles you in combining all the facts you see. For instance, when you go to the Louvre Museum, you can gaze with veneration a lot of ever famous pictures. However, (do) can you master the history of 19 century French art just by going to the museum? Maybe you do not. But the person who is read a book about that topic would do. Last but not least, museums do not provide you all information about a country that you need. Mostly, the museums just display the historical things and especially the things that essential and prominent in this country’s cultural and historical picture. If you want to learn about how people in France made their special wine, do you go to the museums? I absolutely disagree with this idea and will read book instead. Also, if you want to know more about the economy of United State, should you go to American museums? So visiting museums is actually not the (a) best way to study about a country. In conclusion, learning about a country through visiting museum would be so fascinating. Nevertheless, because of above listed drawback (disadvantages, hindrance), it is not (a) the best way to study about a country. (I think) it will (should) be a good additional way to learn when you have chance to go to museums before or after you explore more about a country by books or the Internet. (Please delete the words in bracket)

Television advertising directed toward young children (age two to five ) should not be allowed. Agree or disagree? Coincident with most people's notion is my heartfelt belief that television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed. (After) Following the advent of television, advertising has penetrated into nearly every corner and every minute of our life. It is not uncommon to observe the large amounts of television advertising aiming at innocent young children. My reasons for opposing advertising directed toward young children are as follows. In the first place, advertising may waste money and cause emotional torture of parents when they fail to fulfill their children's unreasonable demands. However, nowadays, regardless of what children's true need, most of advertising are promoting a large number of products that is useless or unsuitable to children. For example, when a family are having a pleasant dinner together on Christmas Eve, a cartoon figure ---- lion king would appear(s) on screen and hold(s) a tub of popcorn to attract children's attention. It is a typical advertising strategy----host sale. By combining popular cartoon figures and products, advertising (could) tries to draw children's attention and achieve a better sale. However, it may cause problems for children; first, some children may have difficulty to absorb the content in the advertising; second, if children are attracted by it and (they) insist on purchasing it while parents consider the products as a piece of meaningless junk, the crying and screaming could drive their parents crazy. What do the two words ‘it” refer to? The former can be “advertisement” but the later cannot be “products”, right? à if children are attracted by the advertisement and ask their parents to purchase meaningless junk without success, then the crying and screaming could drive their parents crazy. Therefore, advertising could cause problems not only for children to understand but also may bother and upset parents. Furthermore, advertising could be misleading tochildren for major goal(s) of most (of)advertisements(there are only two forms: most of the +N or most +N) are just making profits whereas children between age two to five lack ability of understanding and judgment. Children are susceptible to be (easily) influenced by the outside world and admittedly television advertising is (are) playing a negative role in this aspect for they tend to exaggerate their products. For example, my two-year old younger brother is obsessed with Transformer, Spiderman and Superman models. In his mind, these toys are magic, fantastic and powerful as being imparted by advertising. In fact, they are just normal toys; they can not fly, climb mountains or save people's life. Some two-year-old boys even are just babbling instead of speaking clearly, (not to mention) let alone identify (identifying) misleading messages conveyed in the advertisings. Thus, these advertisements (advertising) are misleading and distorting children’s vision toward reality. All in all, (though) there are some undeniable benefits of advertising for children; for example, advertising could open an amazing world of imagination and innovation for children by informing them what a fabulous Barbie or a magnificent castle is. However, these advantages could be ignored when its disadvantages are taken into consideration. It (would be misleading to) mislead children, distort their vision toward reality and even cause quarrels and financial burdens for parents. You said it’s undeniable then it could be ignored??? à However, take into account negative value , these advantages could be overpowered by its disadvantages… (Please delete the words in bracket)

How many appropriate word count for introduction paragraph? I often write about 50-60 words. I think it will be proper to write from more than 3 lines and less than 10 lines - I often can't create long introduction paragraph of some topics because I don't know about how can generate my idea for it. Someone suggests me to think about the generic topic first. Then continue with the more specific details. But this cannot help me though So, I am not sure that if my introduction paragraph has only . "I agree with the statement that ...... because of ...... " and follow by one or two sentences. I ever tried it and I could describe many details on my essay. Is there any problem on this one? if not, lets continue to the question no2. You can make it longer. It is not so difficult. There are two ways you can start the introduction · Direct way: _Whether doing A or B raises a heated debate for a few recent years. _Some people believe/ agree that ….while others hold the opposite viewpoint _Personally, I think it will be better if…. · Indirect ways: You can choose one of the following suggestions: a) A personal experience Studying abroad/ Working as a…. for several years, I realized that …… b) A statistical: The Project first surveyed teenagers about their mobile phones in 2007 when a survey showed that 75% of American teenagers had a cell phone (59% of girls call friends on their cell phone every day; 42% of boys call friends daily on their cell phone daily.). Due to high rate of mobile phone users, it now raised a hot topic whether…… c) Definition: Education is a fundamental human right: Every child is entitled to it. It is critical to our development as individuals and as societies, and it helps pave the way to a successful and productive future. That is why I believe that ……… d) Question: Does television affect people’s behavior? My answer is no/ yes due to the following reasons….. 2. The standard format of TWE is as belows (not sure, please confirm it again) : - intro - 1st topic sentence + support reason + example + (opponent's argument + refutation+example) - 2nd topic sentence + support reason + example + (opponent's argument + refutation+example) - 3rd topic sentence + support reason + example + (opponent's argument + refutation+example) - ending As you can see, I have to create my own idea for three or more paragraphs in order to earn the good scores. Thus, If I removed one topic and change the template as the following format, Does this has an impact on my scores? - intro - 1st topic sentence + support reason + example - 2nd topic sentence + support reason + example - opponent's argument of 1&2 + refutation+example - ending Therefore, I would have more time to focus on only two body paragraphs. However, I want to make sure that even if my words count are more than 300, this style will not affect my total writing score. Ok, I agree with you