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Dear Friends, Hope you will accept me as a new member in this forum. I have recently/just joined this forum to learn from the experienced members. I am Rajat Sharma from New Delhi, India and am preparing for IELTS Academic Test. I need to score minimum 8 in my writings for my education cum migration purpose. Therefore, I kindly request you to help me by providing feedback to my essay below. The essay is written by myself by creating exam conditions (On Paper) within the time limit of 40 minutes. Thanks! ********** You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Sending criminals to the prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training more are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience. From the time immemorial, it has been a matter of debate how a criminal be punished. Of course, there are people who advocate one way or the other but in my view, we need to find a middle path to make sure that the punishment on the one hand, deters the potential criminal and on the other, it helps to reform the people involved in illegal activities. First of all, we need to differentiate between the crimes which shock our conscience and the minor ones. I strongly believe that punishment and in some cases, severe punishment is the only way out to deter the people committing crimes which are against life, liberty and humanity. What I mean by this is that we should adequately punish the wrongdoers when they are involved in heinous crimes such as gory killing, cold blooded murder, rape, arsons out of vengeance etc. In contrast to such views, I hold a slightly different opinion when the crimes are petty and born out of compulsion or some grave circumstances. That’s why I believe that the minor crimes like pick pocketing, thefts where the motive of commission of such crimes is to sustain one’s family should be treated differently. An opportunity to reform should be given to such person committing such minor offences. We cannot change our society by crowding our prison cells. Imparting education and providing quality jobs are prerequisites of reforming such people. Therefore, in my conclusion, I would like to summarise my viewpoint that education alone can help to move people away from the criminal world. The punitive measures should be adopted only in case of serious offences. (Total 273 words)

“University should accept equal number of male and female student s in every subject.” Education is the backbone of a nation. A nation’s overall development dependent on many aspects, education is one major part of them. That is why male and female students have equal rights to get higher education in university. However I am not agreed that university should admit same number of male and female students in every department. This will be proved by analyzing some reasons with examples. Every subject of a university is not suitable for either male or female students. For example nursing or medicine is better for a female student on the other hand marine or engineering (e.g. mechanical, textile) are not suited with a female student because that are very hard working subject. Further more the population rate or education rate of a country of male and female student is not equal in every country. In terms of Bangladesh the education rate for female students is less than male students. In this case if equal number of female student with male students is admitted in a subject of a university as a result some meritorious male student are not get opportunity to study in their suitable faculty. In some cases female students are perform better than male student in particular subjects and vice versa. And the required facilities for the male student are not same with the female student for a university. Therefore now it is clear that it will be not fair for a university to accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. It can be for some subjects but not for every subject. “Some people think that parents should tech children how to be a good member of society. Others however believe that school is the place to learn this.” Parents are the first teacher for a child. Children will be a valuable person of a society if we learn them properly in a right way. Parent tech children all the social activities practically and school tech them institutionally. I believe both of them are important to grow up a child as a good member of society. Children can learn all social aspect directly from their parents and apply it in society. For example how to respect their elders and how to love their younger’s, what are the responsibility and social works for a good member of a society, how perform cultural and religious activities like namaz for muslim, puza for hindus and the behavior with other relatives. In addition school also tech a child knowledge base education which make a child educated and valuable for a society as if he can distinguish wrong and right. It teaches them humanity, human rights, law, technology, science and so on. By learning this things from school and will be applying in a particular situation then a children can be a good member in future. Now it is clear that no one is enough for make a child as a good member of society. On is depends on another therefore both of them is essential to tech children equally.