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Dear Friends, Hope you will accept me as a new member in this forum. I have recently/just joined this forum to learn from the experienced members. I am Rajat Sharma from New Delhi, India and am preparing for IELTS Academic Test. I need to score minimum 8 in my writings for my education cum migration purpose. Therefore, I kindly request you to help me by providing feedback to my essay below. The essay is written by myself by creating exam conditions (On Paper) within the time limit of 40 minutes. Thanks! ********** You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Sending criminals to the prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training more are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience. From the time immemorial, it has been a matter of debate how a criminal be punished. Of course, there are people who advocate one way or the other but in my view, we need to find a middle path to make sure that the punishment on the one hand, deters the potential criminal and on the other, it helps to reform the people involved in illegal activities. First of all, we need to differentiate between the crimes which shock our conscience and the minor ones. I strongly believe that punishment and in some cases, severe punishment is the only way out to deter the people committing crimes which are against life, liberty and humanity. What I mean by this is that we should adequately punish the wrongdoers when they are involved in heinous crimes such as gory killing, cold blooded murder, rape, arsons out of vengeance etc. In contrast to such views, I hold a slightly different opinion when the crimes are petty and born out of compulsion or some grave circumstances. That’s why I believe that the minor crimes like pick pocketing, thefts where the motive of commission of such crimes is to sustain one’s family should be treated differently. An opportunity to reform should be given to such person committing such minor offences. We cannot change our society by crowding our prison cells. Imparting education and providing quality jobs are prerequisites of reforming such people. Therefore, in my conclusion, I would like to summarise my viewpoint that education alone can help to move people away from the criminal world. The punitive measures should be adopted only in case of serious offences. (Total 273 words)

Hi teachers and friends, I am new to this forum. I have my toefl exam next month. I would be greatful if some body can correct my essay. Thanks and Regards. Essay topic: University classes mandatory or optional. Different universities have different policies and rules regarding class attendance for their students. Most of the universities require their students to attend regular classes, where as some universities have optional class attendance policies. However, I believe that going to classes should be mandatory for students. In general univesities with compulsary class attendance are top rated than those with optional attendance. I hold this opinion for few reasons such as real world experience, social skills & team work and discipline. Firstly, many courses in the universities require real world experience, even though students have good theoretical knowledge from books. For example, medical students require both theoritical knowledge from books and clinical experience on patients. It is impossible to become doctor without real life experience. Although educational qualification is essential for many jobs, ultimately the real life experience is the drive that makes people to cotinue their career successfully. Many universities know the essential knowledge required for students, so their curriculum permits students to learn things gradually. If students dont attend classes, it is less likely that they are exposed to many new experiences. Secondly, most of the subjects in the universities requires social skills and team work. Regular class room environment allows students to interact with each other, especially in group discussions, debates, quizzes and social activities. For example, business majors intend to pursue careers in business administration, Sales & Marketing, Human resources, systematic class schedules with group activities and internships provides them great opportunity for future job world. Even fast developing Information Technology field requires people to work as a team which brings success to their company. Strong social skills are essential in almost every field of study, therefore attending regular classes plays very important role in promoting these skills. Lastly, attending organized schedule of classes permits students to develop discipline. This systematic plan allows students to organize time frame for every task in future career which would give them fruitful results in the competitive world.This discipline permits them to balance career and life, allows handling difficult situations very smoothly. If chance is given for optional classes, most of the students choose only interesting subjects and they might miss the important knowledge from rest of the subjects. For example students seeking part time courses are less successful than students perceiving full time regular classes in any field of study. To conclude, I definitely support the idea that university students should attend classes on regular schedule because it allow them to experience real world, to develop social skills and discipline:)

would you please get a grade out of 9 to my IELTS essay? i will be very appreciate if you correct errors. Writing Task 2 topic:Some people say that government should increase the tax on petrol in order to decrease traffic and pollution. Do you agree with this opinion? Explain the benefits and drawbacks. Nowadays the debate over whether or not government can reduce the contamination and traffic jam by getting more taxes from fuel, has sparked a great deal of controversy among people and scientists Although, others are of the opinion that indeed, it has some negative effects on economy, welfare and industries. The advantages and disadvantages of rising fuel prices will be discussed more. A very convincing argument in favor of increasing fuel price is that this strategy will decrease vehicles transportation that subsequently causes to reduce amount of emission fumes by cars and motorcycles. Cost of using private vehicle can be raised by more expensive fuel so, most of people will probably use public transportation and consequently traffic jam will be reduced. Moreover, increasing in fuel price can encourage academies, research institutes and companies to carry out more research on alternative fuels, renewable energies and vehicles performance and innovate more in these fields. Most of past’s inventions in vehicles and energy created when price had been increased like hybrid engines, solar energy and etc. On the other hand, fuel price rising can be an introduction to increase inflation rate. Because fuel use in all processes of manufacturing, maintaining, transporting and distributing of all kind of merchants. As a result, general price level increase and people purchasing power reduce. In addition, poor people’s welfare decrease intensely and most of peoples standard of living will be affected negatively. Moreover according to fundamental of Macroeconomics, fuel price has a strong relation with employment in an economy. Because when fuel price rises, industries benefits reduce and then they must lay off their workers to satisfy their stockholders. It seems the best solution to avoid negative impacts of fuel high price is that governments should impose an extra levy on private vehicles and industries that produce much more pollutants and spend this money to building new highways, roads and extend public transportation to reduce traffic. Finally, I believe governments can choose some more beneficial strategies than increasing fuel price to reduce contamination and traffic especially with controlling transportation via taxes and investing in urban infrastructure.

hi, i am new in this forum. i have recently joined this forum , and i need help.i am gonna have toefl ibt test by next month. Is there someone who can help me in this regard , actually i wanna practice my writing section through this forum . I just want to send my essays on this forum and is there someone who can check my essays and correct me and can guide me in other sections as well . Positive attitude wil be really appreciated.:)