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Hi emichele! Arguments are well thought out, a lot of thinking has been put to explain those, though the writing can be improved more. Essay contains few grammatical errors like wrong preposition ("particularly true of leaders" in 1st paragraph ), punctuations are missing in few places. Use of different words either side of pivots mainly synonym will look better, e.g. ("to be generous to those they lead, they will be generous" , second generous can be replaced wit say magnanimity,kind etc.); this won't hurt you but it's looks better. Throughout points are logically connected and germane to the discussion, except in one or two occasions ( If a person is expected to be generous .... they will gamble.) It sounded really vague and confusing to me as i couldn't discern in first read. Also you can corroborate hypothetical situations with practical, everyday life, examples. Overall, i think you are on right track and this was a good read, just pay little bit more attention to grammar and writing and you can get minimum of 4.5-5.

This is my only 2nd attempt at argument essay. i am really struggling to write within 30 min. kindly review this, any sort of feedback is appreciated. An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. Essay : Health is primary need for most of the people and described as basic need of an individual on Maslow's classification of needs. Good health increases the likely hood of prosperous and happy life.Therefore, the people of Tagus must meet with the need of Vitamin A as it is an important part of our diet. But author’s arguments regarding the promotion of new type of millet is not cogent and rife with holes and assumptions. First of all, it's being assumed that people of Tagus are deficient of Vitamin A when no data and survey results are provided to suggest it. Maybe the studies that international development organization made the basis for recommendation are done in the past and are no longer germane to current situation. Also, maybe studies were done in a particular area or participants were from a particular group who don't have access to good food. As it is suggested that Tagus is an impoverished nation, it is highly possible that studies were done in most backward areas. If these arguments come out be true then author stance and reasoning will be weakened by a lot. Secondly, this is implied that as millet is staple food for the people, the new type of millet will be readily adopted by people. Maybe the taste of new type is as good as of the existing one. After all, people don't eat about anything just because it is salubrious, a good example of this would be milk which too many people avoid and alcohol which is indulged by many when it is perennial for us. Also the impoverished people may be not capable to buy new type of millet as it can be costlier than the existing one considering seeds are costlier for the new type. In addition the practicality of the approval of subsidies is not discussed. Government of economically challenged nation may be sanction funds for subsidy. Even they decide to do it because of the recommendation, could that money be spent in better way for some other development. Author should provide a comprehensive expatiation for the above mentioned arguments. In conclusion, reasoning provided in letter is not convincing enough to recommend government to promote the new type of millet.

I have tried to write more than i usually do. Please review it and give your feedback. I have GRE in 2 days so any help is appreciated. People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. History teaches us a lot of things. We can learn from the mistakes of others, especially from the mistakes of people who made decisions based on emotion and justified those decisions with logic afterwards. First and foremost, good decision are made based on logic and objectivity, backed with data, analysis and facts. People who make decisions based on emotions usually ignore the practicality and objectivity and go on with their gut feeling. Such decisions unsurprisingly don't produce desired results as those were based on the ephemeral feelings. Good decision maker decide their course of action based on cold hard logic and are successful mostly. Lets take an example of a governor of a state, who has the misfortune of facing a difficult aftermath of communal violence. Few bad apples, who belongs to particular religion has assailed the people of other religion and destroyed the houses. Now our unfortunate governor belongs to victimized side, but he should not go blazing against the entire community because of few people based on his attachment with his religion. He must take required majors and put the culprits behind bars. In addition, it wouldn't be hard to argue that most of the leaders are cool minded people, who doesn't let their decision-making fogged by emotions or sudden release of adrenaline.Lets look in world of football , captain of a team would be a guy who can keep is temper in control and doesn't fret with the bad situation.He will implement the plan laid by the coach and win the game for himself, the team and the fans. While a irascible person will get irritated and will take a erratic decision because of which complete team has to suffer. Zidane, French layer, is a famous example of that, who head butted a Italian player in world cup final. Not only he faced the ramifications of not keeping his emotions in check by taking red card and sent off, also France lost the control of match and title slipped off their grasp. Based on the arguments presented above it can be assumed that decision making should be based on logic, while emotion can be mixed but shouldn't be the sole basis.

Essay - GRE 363 Present your perspective on the issue below, "The goal of politics should not be the pursuit of an ideal, but rather the search for common ground and reasonable consensus." Essay: The word politic means the quality to show reasonable and practical thinking and gets the work done. Even many times we hear people complaining and arguing that " things could ave been done in better manner and we should have an ideal and incorrupt leader and government" still they want things to be done with promptness and quickly which requires a more politic approach. I completely agree with the notion that politics should search for common ground and reasonable consensus. First and foremost, politics lays a cardinal role in formation and decision making of governments. Politician culled after the voting from people in a democracy create a formal structure called government where these politicians reign in specific departments. The decision for these appointments are taken by having a discourse among the chosen electives and these discussion will be effective and productive only if politicians are looking for reasonable and common grounds. Otherwise altercations will keep going on for long and important time and funds will be wasted. Also governments make decision and pass bill with the help of oppositions, if requires compromises and both sides needs to be inured for the good of country and people. Lets consider India as an example where only 50% share of parliament are needed to make government but 66% to pass an ordinance. Based on these arguments we can assume that politics requires a pursuit for a win-win situation for all participants and reason-ability and pragmatism. In addition, politics plays a chief role in deciding the inter countries disputes and relationships. Not adhering with pragmatism and looking for ideal solutions will hamper both the countries and their people. we can look at Israel and Palestine disputes which are going on for more than 50 years as the leaders of both sides don't want to compromise on their stance and wants their demands to be fulfilled. If a common ground were actually searched, so many people wouldn't have been killed, let alone the loss of money and public properties. An ideal solution or a panacea for a problem and situation can be the assumed best approach but it is not usually feasible. Pragmatism and logical thinking almost always produces better results in less efforts and quickly. Need for pragmatism and pursuit of common ground can not be more important in other areas than politics.

Triscia, thanks a lot for the review and that too surprisingly so positive. :) Well, this gives me a relief as i was really worried about AWA score. 'implications ha, I just forgot about part somehow, will surely use next time as it helps to increase the words count too, which i clearly struggle to attain. After all, i too rely on argument analysis to get me through this painful essay writing hurdle, let's hope it it works out. Thanks again! best of luck for you test too.

Hi pdeep! As far as the evaluation matters, i think it will get 3.5. Though you intro was bit let down as it suggests that you are in favor of negative feedback and second paragraph will emphasize it. vocabulary is very simple, try to use more GRE words. This will hep you to score more, i think so and good luck for tomorrow. .

Well i think is very well written,shows your position clearly from the introduction. Language is a adequate to get a 6, lot of complex vocabulary is used adroitly. Arguments are very cogent and succinct and follows a logical pattern from the word go. I don't think that you have overused the example as arguments and reasoning are backing it up throughout. Though i am not sure you grasped the actual gist of the problem statement. You have explained the effects of environment on the character and personality of people and their response to that stimulus commandingly. Still i don't' know why i believe statement ask about the specific qualities of character which a leader requires and role of dependency and accountability on it. You could have included arguments about 2 managers in same organization and environment, but with different responsibility, role and task, and explain how these extra work and dependency nurture their behavior and personality. Anyway that's how i see it, you please look for second opinion. If you have got it right, then you deserve a solid 5 in my observation.

Hi! Thanks for comprehensive analysis and valuable feedback. Agree that arguments needs to be developed more. I was planning to include some examples in 3rd paragraph to corroborate the argument, though could not do it as time ran out. BDW how much do you evaluate(on 0-6 score) this essay. I am aiming for 4 on AWA with GRE planned for 1Sep. Do you think it is realistic to get this with practice of 3 more days? Also i have tried an argument essay. Can you please analyze this too, cheers! The following opinion was provided in a letter to the editor of a national aeronautics magazine: “Manned space flight is costly and dangerous. Moreover, the recent success of a series of unmanned space probes and satellites has demonstrated that a great deal of useful information can be gathered without the costs and risks associated with sending men and women into space. Therefore, we should invest our resources in unmanned space flight." Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted. Essay: Investing more resources in unmanned space flight will help us in space exploration and understanding of the cosmos. Author has tried to argue the advantage of unmanned space flights over manned space flights with logic rife with holes and assumptions. Author has suggested that manned space flight is costly but has not provided any data and studies to reflect it. Maybe he has considered one special case for making that point or maybe the studies considered for the assertion are conducted in different time and different purposes.We cannot rely on veracity of above assumption to conclude that unmanned space flight involves less cost than manned space flight. Also manned space flight are labeled as dangerous without any facts and studies to back it up. These assumption makes argument very inconclusive. In addition, efficacy of two space programs is not being compared and it is being assumed that unmanned space flight provides same outcome as manned space flight. Can we gain same amount of information with unmanned space flight as with the manned one? Wouldn't human intervention make it easier to take samples, make observation and do the analysis! These question are not being discussed at all, answers to which can change the outcome of whole argument. Lastly, notion that unmanned space flight is success, is stated as a fact, when it can be a subjective study and needs to be corroborated. How many unmanned flights were considered for the study, how many has yielded the desired results, need to be included? Dependency on unmanned space flight and investment for these programs is going to increase in future with the advancement of artificial intelligence, but this letter does not produce a cogent argument to increase the resource in unmanned space flight.

"The desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large." Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations or reading. Essay: Many a times selfish and avarice nature of corporate and cupidity of corporations is discussed and excoriated by human right and moral activists. I don't share that view point that the desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large. Corporations have shaped the modern world and will continue to do so. While corporations do take measures to increase their profit and financial muscle, these actions do not affect the public in negative way significantly. Corporations emphasize on research to bring new products or to enhance the quality of existing products, which in turn will boost the sale of their products. People of the nation actually have a benign effect of this as they have better life quality. For example, a pharmaceutical company will introduce a new brand of medicine, which is more effective than its predecessor, to increase their sale, this in turn will be salubrious for people. These profits from increased sale provide money for future research. In addition, Entrepreneurs bring new ideas and change the way people live. We can look back in history for countless examples where a desire for financial welfare of an individual has made him capable to introduce something new and produce remarkable results. Not only that has gained him wealth, but completely refined the society. Corporations also give financial stability to the nation. These entities provide employment to public, which in turns enhances the living index of society. Again I would like to emphasize that corporations and their need for financial strength only do good for people and society.