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Hello :) Here's my argument essay response of one of the mock test which I've been giving lately. Would be grateful if anyone could analyze it and provide some incisive feedback. :) The argument: The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school: Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction. My response: The given argument talks about a letter written to the principal of the school who has turned over the management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition last year. The given letter is an amalgamation of complains, warnings and suggestions. But there are considerate amount of questions that the parent has failed to answer, which weakens the very purpose of the letter. In the former part of the letter, the parent alleges that Swift Nutrition serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable. The parent does so because his son and his several friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. However, the parents fails to mention what was the exact complaint. Was the food not tasty? Or did they not like the aesthetics of the food served? And most importantly, why did this complaint arise after one whole year? Perhaps they didn't enjoy because it was too hot in the cafeteria. Answers to these questions will help the principal of the school understand the dilemma of the students better. Also, are all the students having the same opinion about the food? If so, then the parent needs to provide evidence to bolster his claims. A survey result may help to support the his claim. Further in the letter, the parent posits that serving food which students don't enjoy will cause them to bring their own lunch, which is less healthy. Now, the statement itself may seem preposterous to the principal. He may think that how can a home-made lunch be less healthy? The intend of the parent is not lucid in this statement and he needs to provide specific insight on this claim. Does the parent mean that the lunch will lose its nutritious value? If yes, then that needs to be mentioned. Lastly, the parent says that if Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students. Again, on what basis is this statement made? Is there a past record of Swift where its consumers have been faced with serious consequences? If yes, then what's the source? Is it veritable? The given letter, while expressing concerns for the students, lack the ability to answer some serious questions. These questions need to be answered in order to falsify the decision of switching to Swift Nutrition. It also needs to posit various evidences to buttress the claims of the parent. Without these answers and evidences, it is very difficult to evaluate the prediction.

Hello all :) Here's my issue essay response of one of the mock test which I've been giving lately. Would be grateful if anyone could analyze it and provide some incisive feedback. :) The issue at hand: Company management should conduct routine monitoring of all employee e-mail correspondence. Such monitoring will reduce the waste of resources such as time and system capacity, as well as protect the company from lawsuits. Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position. My response: The given policy talks about conducting a routine monitoring of all employee e-mail correspondence. It further alleges that doing so will mitigate the waste of resources such as time and system capacity. The given policy seems to be pragmatic and I do believe that it should be implemented in almost all firms. Firstly, in any company, security is one of the most cardinal aspects to be careful about. Implementing the given policy will help the company avert from collusions of the employees with pariahs. It if my opinion that since the employees would be knowing that their e-mail correspondence is being monitored, they will not dare to engage themselves in any conspiracy against the company. This may help the company's board to develop a sense of fidelity inside them with regards to their employees. Secondly, the given policy claims to reduce the waste of resources. Now, I'm no raconteur but I would like to share an anecdote. One of my friends recently opened his firm named "Opine solutions". It basically is a marketing platform for various firms. Since it is a start up, he started employing stipend-free internships to various callow programmers. But after a month itself, my friend found out that his server had been hacked. He knew it was one of the interns, as he had taken most of the measures to prevent a DNS or similar attacks. He started enquiring and after three weeks, twenty days to be precise, he found out the intern who had colluded with his team to hack the server. And to my friend's utter shock, the hacker used to send the firms logs through the very e-mail provided to him by the firm, since the interns weren't allowed to use their personal e-mails. Now, adopting the stated policy would have helped my friend a lot of time as he could have directly peeped into the logs of the routing monitoring software to find out who was the fraud. Thus, I feel that the policy rightfully claims that a draft of resources will be saved by implementing the policy. Thus, in any firm, I believe that it is important to take measures to discourage charlatans from conspiring against the firm and the stated policy would just serve the purpose.

Hello all :) Here's my issue essay response of one of the mock test which I've been giving lately. Would be grateful if anyone could analyze it and provide some incisive feedback. :) The issue at hand: Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position. My response: The given issue addresses the effect of mass media and internet on the common mass. It alleges that these two medium have resulted in people's attention span getting abridged. It further suggests that the arrant effect is positive as people have developed an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important. Nonetheless, I find myself in apposition to what has been stated in the issue. Firstly, I do believe that mass media and the internet have caused people's attention span to shorten. Mass media and the internet are two major and indefinite sources of information. There are many germane, as well as immaterial information available. It is of my opinion that this vastness has left a negative impact on the stake holders. Since it is a human tendency to get lured to superfluous data, they are prone to checking it out without completing their analysis of the current one. However, I find myself incapable of assimilating the fact that the overall effect has been positive. The claim raises a moot point that people have developed an enhanced ability to sort out large quantities of data according to one's need. However, I believe that this can be deceiving. Since the use of mass media and internet has made many people impetuous, their decisions cannot be relied upon. It is quite possible that many people sort out this data just by reading the title of the article. As we all know, a book cannot be judged from it's cover. Thus, one needs to skim through the topic in order to classify a certain topic as "not important". Another reason, why I believe that these two mediums renders the overall effect negative is because of the "mass media get-along" effect. It crudely means that people sometimes tend to follow the mass and thus, fail to distinguish their interests from others. For instance, an article about the recent Android Google Wear is being reiterated on the two platforms. Many people re-sharing it, or tweeting about it may make an ornithologist to not sort it out. However, that information is not of utter importance to an ornithologist, whose field of study is botany and birds. Recapitulating the ideas expressed in the above paraphrases, I certainly believe that excessive exposure to mass media and the internet overall has a negative effect on the mass. Thus, I don't feel it is becoming to justify that mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter.

Here's my argument essay response of one of the mock test which I've been giving lately. Would be grateful if anyone could analyze it and provide some incisive feedback. :) The argument: Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. My response: The given argument suggests that Pirouettes Ballet School is a pellucid choice for any child. To bolster this claim, the author provides certain factors thereafter. However, the author fails to provide us with adequate information about the claims cited. There are many assumptions which need to be mentioned or many questions which need to be answered in order to evaluate the given recommendation. In the initial part of the argument, the author mentions that Pirouettes have the most intensive program. However, the statement itself feels incomplete. Questions may arise in the readers mind: "What all are the aspects based on which the program is considered intensive?", "Is it due to the relentless training or practice sessions provided by the academy?", "Or is it due to the indefinite number of hours per day?". Ballet is a tedious form of dance which requires patience and a lot of focus. A program intensive in the terms of 'hours per day' will certainly render it ineffective. Further, the author alleges that their teachers have danced in the most well renowned ballet companies all over the world. Again, have all the teachers danced out there? And more importantly, were those teachers appreciated in those ballet companies? Answers to such questions will immensely help to evaluate whether the given claim is becomingly bolstering the recommendation or not. In the latter part of the passage, the author cites that most of their students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies. In this statement too belies many questions that need to be answered. For instance, were those dancers already good dancers when they were admitted in the school? Did they have a body suitable for dancing? Also, most importantly, do they credit their success to Pirouettes Ballet School? There is a possibility that they joined some other school after Pirouettes Ballet School. Although the odds of this may seem less, it cannot be ignored. Such questions need to be addressed. Thus, exegesis of the given argument re surges many questions that ought to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable or not. Perhaps, a chart showing the statistical data of various aspects would have helped buttress the given recommendation.